Aai's Cool Story Bro *Update*

Just thought of something to write about out of boredom, and thought "Oh right, Fakku has a Writing section, may as well post it there".

I know my grammar and choice of vocabulary are pretty awful, so just letting you know beforehand.

Still not to sure on what kind of genre this would fall under yet.

maybe a slice of life idk and could kind of care less...

Having being distracted a lot over the week, I find my self trailing off and trying to pull my self together when writing. I tried to keep my word and post this up on the days I have mentioned previously.



Hope I don't disappoint some of my fellow Fakkers Lol.

Distress






Feeling like this was too fast, I re read this over the weekend, wondering and second guessing my self about this.

Good start good plot i hope it will be continued soon

Much better than I thought, you have massive potential from here. I suggest introducing the main cast in your next excerpt, as well as what will make your story special.

Pretty interesting narrative you've got going here, if a little cliché (childhood friend etc). This could potentially go somewhere good.
There are a few minor things I notice, though.

"[...]there in his bed a teenage boy sat up from his bed while yawning."

Repeating the word "bed" twice in the same sentence seems a little clumsy.

Your sentences can get a little long and your paragraphs a little short.

Like I said, minor stuff.
Other than that, it's fine.

hmm cool story bro :)

When's the next one broski

I'm working on it little by little, I do have black jack dealer training to attend during the afternoon, I only have time during the morning to write.

So I would expect to be done with the chapter by Saturday or Sunday.



I thank you and the rest for reading.

I'm actually kind of glad I will be posting this on here, I admit I was hesitant at first, but I'm glad nonetheless. This way I can get better at this and somewhat work toward one of my childhood dreams. (Or so I would like to work toward being the failure at life I am)

Son, bitches love black jack dealers, 'cuz they know you've got the magic touch.

So like update, although I feel as if I need to think more on this, being publicly read, I find my self a bit nervous at times. Thinking about what I am doing with this. I need more strategies on writing, and I have been reading Grover's sticky topic as well. thinking about what to write and how to plot out ahead, stuff like that goes through my head on a daily basis.

Feel free to go all out on me.

On a side not, I am still thinking of a title for this. lol.

again out of boredum, so don't expect much.