Become?
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Sgt.broski wrote...
Winter is truly the season for death,Glad you won't ever see it,
I'll always keep your heart alive,
While keeping your memories lit,
For only a minute.[/align]
Sweet. Rhyme is existant too. Sadly, you didn't get to point out how winter was relevant later on.
My god what have I become,
The halo will soon fade away,
My loves ones will soon be gone,
Future is my only escape.
The halo will soon fade away,
My loves ones will soon be gone,
Future is my only escape.
Sounds a bit too much like the song.
Tis' body will soon be grounded,
Rain will shed its last tears,
To a man who died worthless,
Suffocated from his fears,
Rain will shed its last tears,
To a man who died worthless,
Suffocated from his fears,
I like that part. Rhyme shines here too.
While he sits in a last year of thoughts,
Before turning into a stone on top of an old dirt hill?
Is that what I'll turn into?
Never recognized for who I was?
To leave while my heart still hurts?
Before turning into a stone on top of an old dirt hill?
Is that what I'll turn into?
Never recognized for who I was?
To leave while my heart still hurts?
A bit more words and swap sentences.
In that case you can have it all,
I won't be carrying that luggage,
I will jump over that wall,
While still staining the earth,
With my smile.
I won't be carrying that luggage,
I will jump over that wall,
While still staining the earth,
With my smile.
The message, to not live drowning in worries and not be materialistic. Simple, nice, and sweet.
With the few edits, that's the way I liked it, others might like it differently or as-is. That said, looking forward for more, bro.