Confessing to Myself;Exposing the Phony
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Verse One. Ego Trip
Verse Two. Examination
Verse Three. Self Destruction
Verse Four. Accept the nature
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Verse Two. Examination
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Verse Three. Self Destruction
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Verse Four. Accept the nature
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Xenon
FAKKU Writer
Impressive, however, I cannot judge on the arrangement of poetry, only content.
In the end, it would appear that you as the author or subject have acknowledged the fact that to complain is a form of weakness and that for complaining, you should be punished.
However, I find that you are misled by your observation. Yes, this is apparently how society has formulated its opinion on weakness, but regardless of what society has dictated, it continues to live on especially in this generation. We are simply hearing people's cries and complaints more, but they have always and always will exist. To deny what inevitably makes up the nature of who we are is to deny one's status as a human being. A human being thinks, it feels, it gets upset, it laughs, it cries, it gets angry, it bleeds, it copulates, it dies, it's simply the nature of the human. Arguing the philosophical aspects is simply another aspect in and of itself. So, I propose a question to you, assuming your poetry actually reflects your own opinions and were not just a social commentary: What is wrong with experiencing feeling, that which makes human beings so defined? What is wrong with complaining? What is wrong with silence? Why do they appear to be wrong? I do not mean why society has deemed all of them wrong, I mean already considering that, and even passed that, why then? Really think about that.
It would appear to me that the reason we look so down upon these things are because they represent exactly what you've claimed, they are inherent esteem devourers. However, you will not last if you've obliterated your own sense of purpose. It is actually not difficult to shift your emotional perspective once you've dropped your focus on negative nature and concentrated on the essence of the positive. In summary; it's a matter of personal perspective and maintaining a positive philosophy on what makes life actually worthwhile to experience.
Oh, and I liked your stanza arrangement and found nearly nothing to correct (setting aside poetical writing, which is not my strength). Do continue writing.
In the end, it would appear that you as the author or subject have acknowledged the fact that to complain is a form of weakness and that for complaining, you should be punished.
However, I find that you are misled by your observation. Yes, this is apparently how society has formulated its opinion on weakness, but regardless of what society has dictated, it continues to live on especially in this generation. We are simply hearing people's cries and complaints more, but they have always and always will exist. To deny what inevitably makes up the nature of who we are is to deny one's status as a human being. A human being thinks, it feels, it gets upset, it laughs, it cries, it gets angry, it bleeds, it copulates, it dies, it's simply the nature of the human. Arguing the philosophical aspects is simply another aspect in and of itself. So, I propose a question to you, assuming your poetry actually reflects your own opinions and were not just a social commentary: What is wrong with experiencing feeling, that which makes human beings so defined? What is wrong with complaining? What is wrong with silence? Why do they appear to be wrong? I do not mean why society has deemed all of them wrong, I mean already considering that, and even passed that, why then? Really think about that.
It would appear to me that the reason we look so down upon these things are because they represent exactly what you've claimed, they are inherent esteem devourers. However, you will not last if you've obliterated your own sense of purpose. It is actually not difficult to shift your emotional perspective once you've dropped your focus on negative nature and concentrated on the essence of the positive. In summary; it's a matter of personal perspective and maintaining a positive philosophy on what makes life actually worthwhile to experience.
Oh, and I liked your stanza arrangement and found nearly nothing to correct (setting aside poetical writing, which is not my strength). Do continue writing.
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Xenon wrote...
Impressive, however, I cannot judge on the arrangement of poetry, only content.In the end, it would appear that you as the author or subject have acknowledged the fact that to complain is a form of weakness and that for complaining, you should be punished.
However, I find that you are misled by your observation. Yes, this is apparently how society has formulated its opinion on weakness, but regardless of what society has dictated, it continues to live on especially in this generation. We are simply hearing people's cries and complaints more, but they have always and always will exist. To deny what inevitably makes up the nature of who we are is to deny one's status as a human being. A human being thinks, it feels, it gets upset, it laughs, it cries, it gets angry, it bleeds, it copulates, it dies, it's simply the nature of the human. Arguing the philosophical aspects is simply another aspect in and of itself. So, I propose a question to you, assuming your poetry actually reflects your own opinions and were not just a social commentary: What is wrong with experiencing feeling, that which makes human beings so defined? What is wrong with complaining? What is wrong with silence? Why do they appear to be wrong? I do not mean why society has deemed all of them wrong, I mean already considering that, and even passed that, why then? Really think about that.
It would appear to me that the reason we look so down upon these things are because they represent exactly what you've claimed, they are inherent esteem devourers. However, you will not last if you've obliterated your own sense of purpose. It is actually not difficult to shift your emotional perspective once you've dropped your focus on negative nature and concentrated on the essence of the positive. In summary; it's a matter of personal perspective and maintaining a positive philosophy on what makes life actually worthwhile to experience.
Oh, and I liked your stanza arrangement and found nearly nothing to correct (setting aside poetical writing, which is not my strength). Do continue writing.
Wow, thank you. I got the idea after I had a breakdown a few nights ago. I felt that I should try to map my thoughts in the form of a confession to try to unearth the root of my problems.
I plan to add more, so keep an eye out.