def society and the homeless man's plea

I got award for a poem similar to this. Because i started a new type poetry called "The ranting" when i was in school. Its simple you stick to one subject but the trick is making each new sentence completly different from the first subject line. Making it sound like total rant but when you read it as whole it can be brilliant. Read it slowly, and its total nonsense and it pisses people off because they dont understand it. But you read it steady if not fast pace you get it. Neat right!? I thougt i was goofing around just ranting in class and turned it in. Later i find out i get fifty dollar best buy card for winning the town poetry contest. Of course i lost in state but the idea of it was catching quite well from last time i checked. See this is why i named it ranting cause i rant. SO this is a new one enjoy.



Def society and the homeless man’s plea.

The moon watches down on the disease world
As the man fishes with no hook
An the world lost its logic with no sign of ever returning
As it sang along with the stars
But they revolted back to their imagination
An society washed away their heroes but kept their masks’
While willow tree remained crying for no reason at all
We just couldn’t find the fire flies in June no more.
But the moon didn’t lose its sleep
In the clouds covers up the idiot’s brilliant idea
Of one plus one equals more taxes for you and I.
But we all know its special when the rain washes away
The love that is everything in the world but it doesn’t compare
To the eyes of newborn awakening to world of sorrow and despair
But we keep filling that needle up with our “hard earn money”
Never saying he was right or she was right
We just walked by the homeless man as he shouted nonsense
But society is def when logic and reason isn’t money for their pockets and needles.

lol i kept on reading it over and over until i figured out that it wasnt the type that rhymed alot. *bonk
it was dark and blue but nice

I liked the story/message of the poem but I kept getting caught up on mechanical errors. :? (I don't know if they were from creative initiative or what)



Loved that part especially :)


Also, "grats" to your finding an individualized style; it's always nice to be able to deliver poetry in your own way. :D

yeah thats my favorite part too, i like the last two lines the most though, cause its true if you think about it.