My first story... no name yet
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Ok so I was a little worried about posting this because I thought it might be bad, but with a little encouragement, I have decided to post my first story. There's no H in it yet and some of the events seem a little out of place (to me at least), but I will explain them and add some H later on. So here ya go!
I was never at the top of my class. I don't really have any special talents. I'm not very good looking either... I guess you could say there's nothing interesting about me. I used to make some bad mistakes and people seem to stay away from me because of them. No one had ever loved me, nor have I ever loved any one else...until that day. Tamaki walked onto the train after a long day of the new school year. The train was full of people as usual this time of day. He looked around and saw the everyday assortment of business men and students, but today something caught his eye. A beautiful girl was sitting a few feet away from him. She seemed to be his age, but she wore no uniform and she had a suitcase with her. She looked so small and fragile. Her face was tiny and she was very slender. Her hands, legs, breasts, and everything else were so petite and beautiful. She looked as if she would break with the easiest touch. The doors opened as the train came to a stop and all the people started to move off and other moved on. He stepped off and noticed that the girl had also gotten off of the train along with him. She put down her suitcase and scanned the area with a confused look. Something drew him to her. Some...strange force. Tamaki walked up to the young lady and said to her with a smile, "You look a little lost. Need some help finding something?" She looked back at him, surprised, and said back, "Well actually I am a little lost...I'm looking for my aunt's house. I was pretty sure it was somewhere near this station." She held up a piece of paper with an ad0dress on it. He looked at it closely and said, "This is really close to where I live. If you want, I could take you there." He smiled at her. "Really? That would help me alot! Thank you so much," she said in a joyous tone. The two of them walked out of the station and down the sidewalk. Tamaki glanced at her a few times then said, "So are transferring to a school around here? I hear a lot of people are doing that to take exams for the university." She looked up at him and said, "That actually is why I'm here. I'm going to live with my aunt for the year and take my exams. I used to live here when I was little, but we moved because of my mom's work. I hardly remember it at all..." Tamaki turned the corner, and saw their destination ahead. "Well, here we are." The two walked up to the house with the address on the sheet of paper. "I'm taking those exams as well. Hopefully we can both get in." She gave a warm smile as she walked to the gate and turned to face him. "Thanks a lot for walking me here. By the way, I never got your name. Mine's Rei." He hesitated for a second then said, "I-I'm Tamaki. Nice to meet you Rei." His face blushed slightly. "Well thank you, Tamaki. Hopefully I'll see you again. Bye!" She walked past the gate and to the door smiling and waving as she went. He did the same, until she went inside. Slowly, but surely, he made his way to his own home and into his room. "Geez, I'm so tired!!" He plopped onto his bed and stared up at the ceiling. His eyes grew heavier and heavier as he slowly drifted off to sleep.
End of chapter 1. It is kinda long, but I had to get it out of the way. Chapter 2 is shorter, but more exciting. AND NOW...!!!
Chapter 2
Tamaki woke up in a dimly lit classroom with a low sound of students muttering to each other. He looked around and saw a group of students talking to one another. None of them look familiar to him. He walked up to an familiar girl and went to tap her on the shoulder. "Hey, do you-" As he touched her shoulder, the girl turned to him, smiled, then dissolved away like sand in a light breeze. He was shocked at the site of the girl vanishing like that. He looked to the other students and said, "What's going on??" They all looked at him and dissolved just like the first girl. His jaw dropped and he ran from the room in terror. He ran down the hall, with students disappearing when he passed them. He ran down the halls and all around the school until no one was left. An empty room stood before him. He entered the dark room and walked around slowly, then he fell to his knees on the cold floor. "W-Where...Where did they go? They-They just disappeared...into thin air. I'm all alone now. No...No I CAN'T BE!!! I DON'T WANT TO BE ALL ALONE!!!" He yelled at the top of his lungs and placed his face in his hands, as tears pooled in his eyes. "You don't have to be alone," said a claming, warm voice that seemed so familiar. "I'm here now. So you're not alone." A figure appeared in the door way, that seemed to shine like the sun. The figured walked into the room and up to him. It was Rei. She bent down and embraced him. "You have me, so you're not alone. So please don't cry." His eyes widened at the embrace of her warm, petite body against his. He closed his eyes and put his arms around her in return. Through tears her said, "I'm so glad." Tamaki lays on his bed, with tears streaming down his face. We a slight breath her mutters, "Rei..."
END Chapter 2
Well that's all I got for now. I will add more when I write it. Unless you guys want me to stop that is... :cry: Feel free to comment and help me improve this story. This one came straight from the heart, so I want it to be as good as I can make it. Thanks!
I was never at the top of my class. I don't really have any special talents. I'm not very good looking either... I guess you could say there's nothing interesting about me. I used to make some bad mistakes and people seem to stay away from me because of them. No one had ever loved me, nor have I ever loved any one else...until that day. Tamaki walked onto the train after a long day of the new school year. The train was full of people as usual this time of day. He looked around and saw the everyday assortment of business men and students, but today something caught his eye. A beautiful girl was sitting a few feet away from him. She seemed to be his age, but she wore no uniform and she had a suitcase with her. She looked so small and fragile. Her face was tiny and she was very slender. Her hands, legs, breasts, and everything else were so petite and beautiful. She looked as if she would break with the easiest touch. The doors opened as the train came to a stop and all the people started to move off and other moved on. He stepped off and noticed that the girl had also gotten off of the train along with him. She put down her suitcase and scanned the area with a confused look. Something drew him to her. Some...strange force. Tamaki walked up to the young lady and said to her with a smile, "You look a little lost. Need some help finding something?" She looked back at him, surprised, and said back, "Well actually I am a little lost...I'm looking for my aunt's house. I was pretty sure it was somewhere near this station." She held up a piece of paper with an ad0dress on it. He looked at it closely and said, "This is really close to where I live. If you want, I could take you there." He smiled at her. "Really? That would help me alot! Thank you so much," she said in a joyous tone. The two of them walked out of the station and down the sidewalk. Tamaki glanced at her a few times then said, "So are transferring to a school around here? I hear a lot of people are doing that to take exams for the university." She looked up at him and said, "That actually is why I'm here. I'm going to live with my aunt for the year and take my exams. I used to live here when I was little, but we moved because of my mom's work. I hardly remember it at all..." Tamaki turned the corner, and saw their destination ahead. "Well, here we are." The two walked up to the house with the address on the sheet of paper. "I'm taking those exams as well. Hopefully we can both get in." She gave a warm smile as she walked to the gate and turned to face him. "Thanks a lot for walking me here. By the way, I never got your name. Mine's Rei." He hesitated for a second then said, "I-I'm Tamaki. Nice to meet you Rei." His face blushed slightly. "Well thank you, Tamaki. Hopefully I'll see you again. Bye!" She walked past the gate and to the door smiling and waving as she went. He did the same, until she went inside. Slowly, but surely, he made his way to his own home and into his room. "Geez, I'm so tired!!" He plopped onto his bed and stared up at the ceiling. His eyes grew heavier and heavier as he slowly drifted off to sleep.
End of chapter 1. It is kinda long, but I had to get it out of the way. Chapter 2 is shorter, but more exciting. AND NOW...!!!
Chapter 2
Tamaki woke up in a dimly lit classroom with a low sound of students muttering to each other. He looked around and saw a group of students talking to one another. None of them look familiar to him. He walked up to an familiar girl and went to tap her on the shoulder. "Hey, do you-" As he touched her shoulder, the girl turned to him, smiled, then dissolved away like sand in a light breeze. He was shocked at the site of the girl vanishing like that. He looked to the other students and said, "What's going on??" They all looked at him and dissolved just like the first girl. His jaw dropped and he ran from the room in terror. He ran down the hall, with students disappearing when he passed them. He ran down the halls and all around the school until no one was left. An empty room stood before him. He entered the dark room and walked around slowly, then he fell to his knees on the cold floor. "W-Where...Where did they go? They-They just disappeared...into thin air. I'm all alone now. No...No I CAN'T BE!!! I DON'T WANT TO BE ALL ALONE!!!" He yelled at the top of his lungs and placed his face in his hands, as tears pooled in his eyes. "You don't have to be alone," said a claming, warm voice that seemed so familiar. "I'm here now. So you're not alone." A figure appeared in the door way, that seemed to shine like the sun. The figured walked into the room and up to him. It was Rei. She bent down and embraced him. "You have me, so you're not alone. So please don't cry." His eyes widened at the embrace of her warm, petite body against his. He closed his eyes and put his arms around her in return. Through tears her said, "I'm so glad." Tamaki lays on his bed, with tears streaming down his face. We a slight breath her mutters, "Rei..."
END Chapter 2
Well that's all I got for now. I will add more when I write it. Unless you guys want me to stop that is... :cry: Feel free to comment and help me improve this story. This one came straight from the heart, so I want it to be as good as I can make it. Thanks!
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People not posting makes me nervous...is it bad? Feel free to let me know, but be gentle...it's my first time. *blushes then thinks for a minute...wut?*
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lol dont worry ppl will say something lol
but ummnot bad...saw a few typo's here and there
i thought chapter 2 was a little to short like you should add that
to chapter 1 to make it 1 chapter but all in all an ok story so far
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but ummnot bad...saw a few typo's here and there
i thought chapter 2 was a little to short like you should add that
to chapter 1 to make it 1 chapter but all in all an ok story so far
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Thanks. I know its short but i felt like it needed to be a new chapter because the first one was so long.
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yea. the chapters feel a little too short.
chapter 2 was plenty interesting. well looking forward for more. :wink:
chapter 2 was plenty interesting. well looking forward for more. :wink:
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DxTRiNiTYLiMiTxD wrote...
yea. the chapters feel a little too short.chapter 2 was plenty interesting. well looking forward for more. :wink:
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What I feel right now is that i'm dissappointed. I dunno why though, after reading your story.... I can't put my finger on what is wrong with this story.....