My poems updade april 7/11
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Long ones
Fallen
Incomplete
*note this one's caracters are based from Fallen and Cryes of a valkrie
Inner desires
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Shorter ones
Limits
Dead Space
Cryes of a valkrie
Fallen
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Incomplete
*note this one's caracters are based from Fallen and Cryes of a valkrie
Inner desires
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Shorter ones
Limits
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Dead Space
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Cryes of a valkrie
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Tsumimasen but i've wanted to see the results of the pool for individual poems :(
Tsumimasen again hontoni
Tsumimasen again hontoni
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I know but because people havent been so active on the poetry part of the forum well at least they could just move the mouse cursor and click vote.
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They weren't bad (the three poems that is). Please don't take offense to this, but I'd highly suggest writing in a program with a spell check and proofread before you post. All three were fraught with not just spelling errors, but simple typing errors. For example, in 'Limits' you said "The thongue lik\cks" instead of what I'm assuming you meant: "The tongue licks". Moving past that however:
Well, that's just my two cents. I guess the big things I'd hope you work on are proofreading, details and at least a little bit of planning.
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Well, that's just my two cents. I guess the big things I'd hope you work on are proofreading, details and at least a little bit of planning.
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Can you define "proofreading"? the term is unknown to me.
For the cries of the valkryrie it was my first short poem folowed up by limits
Limits was verry frustrating to put the feeling that i have into words.And yes the ideea for dead space was from the deadspace 2 at the end.
I apreciate your feeback
For the cries of the valkryrie it was my first short poem folowed up by limits
Limits was verry frustrating to put the feeling that i have into words.And yes the ideea for dead space was from the deadspace 2 at the end.
I apreciate your feeback
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Xenon
FAKKU Writer
Goddamn it, anud. We just talked about...Aghhh, they're not even proof-read. I'm done with this.
Please don't post multiple small poems in succession, keep them in one poem thread for yourself.
And don't do polls. Commentary on literature and poetry don't come out to a simple vote.
Please don't post multiple small poems in succession, keep them in one poem thread for yourself.
And don't do polls. Commentary on literature and poetry don't come out to a simple vote.
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anud wrote...
Can you define "proofreading"? the term is unknown to me.For the cries of the valkryrie it was my first short poem folowed up by limits
Limits was verry frustrating to put the feeling that i have into words.And yes the ideea for dead space was from the deadspace 2 at the end.
I apreciate your feeback
Proofreading is just when you read your own work after you're done and make sure that it doesn't need changed. Things like checking to make sure you didn't make any typing errors, or that your poem makes sense, or that it can be read smoothly.
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Reading more and more stuff would give you a better grasp on your writing capabilities rather than relying on comments which is pretty scarce here in this section.
The comments will come sooner or later, all that matters is to keep writing and improving~
The comments will come sooner or later, all that matters is to keep writing and improving~
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Jericho Antares wrote...
anud wrote...
And the last one of the finishing spreeSpoiler:
Reason this should be stickied.
I've made the request of Gambler, and we've exchanged a few PMs. He's down with it, but hasn't been online in a while to discuss small changes. Fingers crossed.
mfw this is exactly what I was talking about:
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