My Very First Writting..

My name is Nanase, i'm a 16 year old schoolgirl. I just transferred to an all girls school because of my phobia for men. It was happened a few months ago, there was a guy who confessed his feelings to me, i was happy to know that he liked me the way i like him so i accept his feelings for me and we started going out. After 2 weeks of our relationship, ha ask me to have sex with him but i rejected it and he said that he understand and everything still normal between us. But, one day he ask me to study together at his place and i accept it because he said that his parents were at home, but when i arrived at his home i didn't see anyone beside him, and then he told me to go to his room. At the time, i still didn't now that his parents weren't at home. After awhile, he came with 2 cups of tea on his hands. After he put the cups on the table, he walk to the door and lock the door. I asked him "why do lock the door?" and he simply said "so that you can't run away". I was really really scared at the time, my body were shaking. Suddenly he grabed my hands and started to touch my breasts and my vagina. I tried to resist and even beg him to stop, but he said "when women say no, that means they want it, right?" and he started to rape me like crazy. Since that time, i become scared to all men.

After that incident, i got transferred to an all girls school so that i can start a new peaceful and happy school life, or so i thought. But when i get into the classroom for the very firs time, a new scary incident happened. A girl from my class named Aki suddenly grab me and say "i've decided, i'll make you my girl Nanase-san" and kiss me in front of everyone in my class. After that frightening incident, i lost consciousness and wake up in the nurse office. I glad that incident was just a dream, but the nurse suddenly said "i know how you feel that you want it was just a dream, but unfortunately it was all real". The thing the nurse said make me scared and tell the cause i transferred school, but the thing that i don't realize is that Aki is in that room too and heard all of my story. When i realize that aki is in that room too, the nurse left me alone with Aki so that we can clear the problem. After the nurse get out of the room, me and Aki tried to solve the problem by talking. Aki told me the story of her past that she had the same experience as i am and that's why she hate men. Suddenly she take off her clothes and hug me gently and said "girl's body were made passive, so that we can't hurt each other", at the time i feel warm and relax. A few days after we solve the problem, we become bestfriend and make other student thinks that we're a couple (it's normal for them, since it's an all girls school). Whenever we met, Aki will always hug me that makes me irritated yet a bit happy.

It's been two months since i become bestfriend with Aki. I started to realize that there was something wierd, when Aki hug me i don't feel irritated anymore, in fact i want to hug her even more to the point that i want to kiss her. whenever i see her face, i ended up staring at her lips. I want to hug her, kiss her, even touch her more. I don't like it when i see Aki close to other girls. And then, i realized that i fall in love with her. I want to confess my feelings for her but i'm scared, i think a lot of 'what if'. What if she don't like me anymore. What if the kiss that she did was just a joke. What if she het me after i confessed. What if she think i'm wierd. Those thought make me think that i should avoid her so that she didn't figure out my feelings for her.

And then , i started to avoid her. When school over, i always go home first. When she ask me to accompany her to the toilet, i refuse. When it's lunchtime, i go to the library to hide from her. It makes my heart hurts, i want to stop being like this. Always hiding from her, i want everything back to normal again but i can't. beacause whenever i close to Aki, my heart hurts even more. I'm scared, i'm affraid if she find out about my feelings for her she'll hate me.

It's been one week since i avoid Aki. She start to realize that there's something wrong about me. Whenever she look at me, her face looks sad. It makes my heart hurts. But, this Sunday will make my world change. This Sunday, Aki come to my house. my heart beating like crazy, non of us start talking. After a few minutes silent, Aki ask me "why were you avoid me?" and i said "that's because..." i can't answer her question.

"is it because you hate me?"

"of course not"

"Then why?!"
her face start to pale and she cried

"why? why were you avoid me?"

"that's..."

I still can't answer it but, when i see her cute crying face i can't think and suddenly kiss her unconsciously.

"it's because i love you. I want to hug you, kiss you, touch all of you, and i want you to be mine only. that's why i've been avoiding you lately. i'm affraid if you find out about my feelings for you, you'll think i'm a freak and you'ss hate me.I don't want tha-.."

She suddenly kiss me and say

"i love you too Nanase, i've been in love with you for a long time now"

And she kiss me again, she push down my body untill i lie down on the floor. She keep kissing me, her hands rubbing my breasts and then my Vagina and i do the same to her. We go all the way today.

The next day, we start our new life as a happy couple.

THE END

Wrong section. A mod will move it soon.

I like the story and premise, don't worry about anything, everyone starts somewhere. To be honest, I think you can make a short serial out of this.

There are some minor grammatical errors that can be worked out, they aren't that difficult.

Overall, it was a fairly good story. I agree with Randomness on this, that you could end up making a series out of this. Well, just for writing purposes anyways. And if you have more, please share them. I look forward to it. :3

Fuck yes, I love yuri. More yuri, please.

Then why'd you write a yaoi? Hmm? :3

really? thanks for the compliment.. ^^

geez, you embarrassed me.. ^^
thanks for the compliment anyway.. ^^

wow, we're the same then.. i'm a yuri lover too.. ^^
well, i'll try to write about yuri more.. wish me luck.. ^^

thanks for the compliment you guys..
you give me courage to write more.. ^^

I'll just have to stay with Zandorf on this one.
Overall it was a great story and it could become something so much bigger if you want it to.
All I dislike is the grammatical errors, but no one is perfect.

Nice quadruple post -.-
Next time, reply to everything in one post.

actually, i have a plan to continue the story by making the sequel..
but somehow, i just can't find a good storyline to continue the story.. -,-

how to do that? teach me..

Quote one person, copy it, quote the next person and paste the previous post, etc.
This forum doesn't have a multi-quote button so that's the only way.

Bahaha, that made me crack up. In all honesty, we sort of forced him to.

Oh, and to actually address the piece. I can see English is not your first language from the minor errors, kuroneko. However, this is really well organized and speaks volumes of your effort. A very nice work that I'm sure more good works will follow. If you learn one thing, at least remember to always capitalize 'I'

thanks for the compliment and i'll take your advice.. ^^

Oh come on, I don't discriminate, go look at the second page and find, "Don't Mind Me". It's yuri.

As for why I haven't written in it much...I just can't...I've hit a writer's block.