Poems, poetry, rap, you name it - your creations
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It's been a while since I created a topic. As topic name states, here's the thread to post your poems and poetry or rap verse that you yourself have created. 100% grade A originality is the criteria, and with a bit of poetic license, feel free to contribute your poems/rap lyrics, discuss, and criticize.
To start off, just earlier today I posted a 7-8 line poem in the thread "Anyone have a gun" thread in the Random subforum section out of pure randomness. It later hit me that I wanted to create a more refined and finished version of it, and after spending a hour or so, voila, I present my new poem/rap "Gunz inna Body":
"Gunz inna Body", by g-money
Got a machine gun in my pants,
With bullets the size of ants.
I spray my load all over town,
†˜Nitiate a system meltdown.
I got a power of a nuke,
Like manly N64 Duke,
Missile launchers from my deltoids,
Like the panzer-mode Liger zoid.
I got shotguns in my biceps,
Pumping-action in my triceps,
And dual optic laser beams fly
From my Mechazilla-like eyes.
My shit’s a bio-weapon.
Spread it, we got mass destruction.
I got skillz like da Master Chief.
Covenant, don’t mess with that beef.
Brain power exceeds AI speed,
It’s so sharp it makes yo mind bleed.
My words come out like gatling rounds
And I scream supersonic sound.
If you ever try to cross me,
I’ll aim and shoot u in da knees,
And when you are kneelin down there,
U might as well suck my deez,
To buy u time before I turn
Ur fugly body to Swiss cheese.
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Comments? New poems? Roll out the creative juices.
To start off, just earlier today I posted a 7-8 line poem in the thread "Anyone have a gun" thread in the Random subforum section out of pure randomness. It later hit me that I wanted to create a more refined and finished version of it, and after spending a hour or so, voila, I present my new poem/rap "Gunz inna Body":
"Gunz inna Body", by g-money
Got a machine gun in my pants,
With bullets the size of ants.
I spray my load all over town,
†˜Nitiate a system meltdown.
I got a power of a nuke,
Like manly N64 Duke,
Missile launchers from my deltoids,
Like the panzer-mode Liger zoid.
I got shotguns in my biceps,
Pumping-action in my triceps,
And dual optic laser beams fly
From my Mechazilla-like eyes.
My shit’s a bio-weapon.
Spread it, we got mass destruction.
I got skillz like da Master Chief.
Covenant, don’t mess with that beef.
Brain power exceeds AI speed,
It’s so sharp it makes yo mind bleed.
My words come out like gatling rounds
And I scream supersonic sound.
If you ever try to cross me,
I’ll aim and shoot u in da knees,
And when you are kneelin down there,
U might as well suck my deez,
To buy u time before I turn
Ur fugly body to Swiss cheese.
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Comments? New poems? Roll out the creative juices.
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well i don't have a poem or w/e so ill comment on that 1 u made....
not bad i liked it you just started to kinda mess up at the end there from rhyming from every line to every other line...
not bad i liked it you just started to kinda mess up at the end there from rhyming from every line to every other line...
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Gimme a break, it's only the last 4 lines, but I felt I had to go off rhyme meter to incorporate that kickass verse. At least my lines were all 8 syllables, which given more effort, I could have it turned into iambic pentameter, but I didn't cuz I'm lazy. Get some of the media references?
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i also have pieces here, but i dont know if its a something or just sheer crap my cousin wrote and i edited it.....
like walking into a dream, so silent and serene
peace roams unbound, free and sound
a field full of flowers, a river flowing clear waters
a dream perhaps? or is it the afterlife
'tis then i see a bright light, so bright that i could not see
a pretty girl came up, touched my face and kissed me
as i opened my eyes, and to my greatest surprise
the woman i loved long ago, stood still at my sight
she died long ago, by the order of god
to be taken away at eighteen, such a young and fragile age
she wanted me to come, to the light beyond the horizon
'twas then i realized, i too have fallen away
i refused to take her hand, saying it is not yet time
for my life to be forfeit, to be simply taken away
in the earth, at my room where i sleep
lies my souless body, asleep in death
a voice was heard that called my name, to weigh the scales and make the choice
i was given a small taste, a sample of my afterlife
it said i can fully go there, or stay in the land to continue existing
but i had made my decision, so firm that it cannot be destroyed
to return to the earth, seek back my body
for i have been ascended, by my past woman's request
to be with her, and be contempt
but alas, i told her it was not yet my time
as an angel guided me to where my body lay
there my body slept, in peace and loneliness
undisturbed and quiet, yet with a lipstick mark
made by my childhood friend, who had feelings for me
then i woke up, in a daze but alive
i noticed the kissmark, on my cheek and forehead
now it is clear, as white as snow
that god has heard my prayer, and to start again
in the brightest of sunlight, across the paved walkroads
i met my childhood friend again, with the deepest of care
then to my surprise, she quickly blushed red
and while slurring she said, "I love you so much"
it was then i hugged her, close to my chest
as i realized the request, it was fulfilled by the lord
as we kissed each other, i distinctly head a faint voice
the voice of my past, the voice of my former love
"you have proven yourself, valiant young man
to be capable to live, to survive in the midst of evil
i was right in choosing you, to being my former lover
now i shall wait for you, in the gates of heaven"
as i heard these words, i felt a bit lightened
to experience a silent death, only to come back again
and to no one's knowledge, that i passed and returned in a night
i said to myself, "i'll definitely return there"
well? is it good?
like walking into a dream, so silent and serene
peace roams unbound, free and sound
a field full of flowers, a river flowing clear waters
a dream perhaps? or is it the afterlife
'tis then i see a bright light, so bright that i could not see
a pretty girl came up, touched my face and kissed me
as i opened my eyes, and to my greatest surprise
the woman i loved long ago, stood still at my sight
she died long ago, by the order of god
to be taken away at eighteen, such a young and fragile age
she wanted me to come, to the light beyond the horizon
'twas then i realized, i too have fallen away
i refused to take her hand, saying it is not yet time
for my life to be forfeit, to be simply taken away
in the earth, at my room where i sleep
lies my souless body, asleep in death
a voice was heard that called my name, to weigh the scales and make the choice
i was given a small taste, a sample of my afterlife
it said i can fully go there, or stay in the land to continue existing
but i had made my decision, so firm that it cannot be destroyed
to return to the earth, seek back my body
for i have been ascended, by my past woman's request
to be with her, and be contempt
but alas, i told her it was not yet my time
as an angel guided me to where my body lay
there my body slept, in peace and loneliness
undisturbed and quiet, yet with a lipstick mark
made by my childhood friend, who had feelings for me
then i woke up, in a daze but alive
i noticed the kissmark, on my cheek and forehead
now it is clear, as white as snow
that god has heard my prayer, and to start again
in the brightest of sunlight, across the paved walkroads
i met my childhood friend again, with the deepest of care
then to my surprise, she quickly blushed red
and while slurring she said, "I love you so much"
it was then i hugged her, close to my chest
as i realized the request, it was fulfilled by the lord
as we kissed each other, i distinctly head a faint voice
the voice of my past, the voice of my former love
"you have proven yourself, valiant young man
to be capable to live, to survive in the midst of evil
i was right in choosing you, to being my former lover
now i shall wait for you, in the gates of heaven"
as i heard these words, i felt a bit lightened
to experience a silent death, only to come back again
and to no one's knowledge, that i passed and returned in a night
i said to myself, "i'll definitely return there"
well? is it good?