So my warning before posting the first chapter in a spoiler is: this story runs on
hentai logic and
anime logic in general. If you were looking for things to make sense, sense has gone on vacation.
On the other hand, PLEASE DO let me know how I can make the story sexier, funnier, or better written! This is some of the first fiction I've written in a really long time, and some of the first long-form fiction I've written ever. I'm not sure where or if the plot is going, and I really will enjoy talking about this story with the forum and I like reading everyone else's stories in their threads.
I'll post chapter by chapter, starting with the prologue. I try to keep ahead of my actual posting, so there's always time to edit and revise.
Now watch as I work my gypsy magic!
At some point, in an unremarkable room in New Jersey...
Young Mitchie turned over in his bed, contently sleeping after a long day's birthday celebration. Wrapped in warm fleece blankets to insulate himself from the chill November wind, he dreamed.
A great light shone all around. Mitchie sat up, and found himself resting on a hill staring up at the endless, shining blue sky around him. Except... the hill was... various shades of white, gray, and black, a hill coming up from an land of clouds that stretched without horizon. As he looked around, the shadow of a person approached him from behind, walked around and glanced down at him. It was a woman, or perhaps a girl, of indeterminate age but probably in her late teens, more beautiful than even the rest of the place for her glorious, overwhelming vivaciousness. Her shaggy blonde hair fell down over the open, strapless back of her bright white robes to her hips. From her hips her robe billowed out into a dress ending halfway down her thighs and tracing the shape of her butt, and above her hips her robe rose up to just contain her bountiful breasts and strap over her shoulders. She was the most gorgeous sight Mitchie had ever seen, and it broke his heart to see her regard him with confusion and scorn.
“Hey, what's this kid doing here?” she said, “I try to call for a man and this is what the Earth has to offer? Shittiest room service EVER.” A wave of her hand and Mitchie's clothes had gone, like they never existed, leaving him utterly nude and exposing his hardening penis. Mitchie mewled.
“You don't want me?” He needed something from her, needed it desperately, but he didn't know what. It just had something to do with her body and the throbbing in his crotch. She raised her perfectly-shadowed eyebrow.
“You think you're even ready for me? Look kid, I guess I can take a protein boost, but you won't hit my league without a LOT of practice.” She hastily stripped off the front of her robe, unfastening it at the heart-shaped clip holding it over her cleavage, and wrapped her voluptuous breasts around Mitchie's pulsing cock. She gave it a lick and took the head in her mouth as she continued titfucking Mitchie. He shuddered as his whole body burned with desire and pleasure, as he felt his first-ever orgasm fast approach. He thrusted into the angelic mouth sucking his dick, unable to help himself. He groaned as he came into her throat; she gulped down his cum like a tasty drink. He still needed yet more.
As the world of clouds and sky faded, Mitchie heard the wonderful girl look into his eyes and say one last thing.
“I suppose that was reasonably tasty, so hey. You go practice, and someday when you've made a man of yourself, I'll come back and show you what a really good time is. Just promise not to wear a condom so your dick won't be too sensitive.”
“Who are you?”
“Look, just promise to practice and do it bareback and this little pecker of yours'll fuck the brains out of anyone, ok?”
“I promise!”
“Great, now go practice up already! For fuck's sake, stupid kid probably won't even remember.”
And there was nothing but darkness.