Student Conflict

Hm, not bad. A lot of noticeable typos and weird sentence structure, but it's erotic and does its job. I can clearly see the difference in writing styles between you and him, though, so that's good. I find it interesting that he wrote it from the girl's perspective, though. It's pretty enjoyable overall.

lol?

Could do better with the quotes and other markings, but very nice, has a poetic style to it.

Sasuke
I'm srry ppl for the typos and the anyother thing i missed, i have written this story and the other one along time ago in highschool 2004. I never go back to correct any mistakes i have done. I did it for a certain reason and my own style. but I love ur opions about my work. thanks you guys. as long as u like them. I am trying to recreate my new story but have to do notes again and start writting as soon as I can. srry for the delay on the upcoming story due to deletion. ^_^

they are right, a bit of editing will make this more enjoyable to read, props to your bf