[Summer Contest Entry 2012] Radiant in heart, mind and form

Does this meet the minimum requirements for entry? I need to know, like asap.

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It occurs to me now that perhaps fan fiction is not acceptable. But it wasn't explicitly stated as far as i can tell.

Rule 4. Any kind of creative writing will be accepted, thus stories and poetry are welcome.

I may have misunderstood the intention behind this, and assumed fan fiction would be considered another form of creative writing.

Rule 5. Please be informed that it must be your own original work. Plagiarism will not be tolerated and rest assured we will be examining your work very closely.

While it specifically states that this must be your own original work, the rest leads the reader to believe that the exact meaning behind it is that you can't use someone else's writing, like taking phrases or descriptions. If that was your original intent, then I'm worrying about nothing. If not, then I'm disqualified and there is nothing i can do.

You can write fan fiction, as many users have already done. What you can't do is plagiarize specific works from other people, so you're fine. There's a pretty awesome beelzebub fic somewhere in the entries you should check out, for instance.

Thanks for the info. Worried about nothing, and this is totally orginal. Hope people like it, even if they are not fans of the game. Looking forward to some feedback. =)

You have not entered the contest properly. And it is unfortunate that I must declare that you cannot enter anymore. The deadline has passed and you haven't submitted the link to your entry's thread (this thread) on the main thread (top thread in the stickies, currently).

My utmost apologies for this. But I believe that I must abide by the rules that I've set for this contest.

Ok, I didn't specifically ask hours in advance if I was in compliance or anything... And thanks for waiting till it was 2 minutes before the deadline just to tell me that it's too late. That sounds fair, also reasonable.

All I really wanted was a review.

It's way past it, not minutes before it's about to pass. Read more next time:

Ok, i won't argue with that. Could you at least read it at some point and maybe tell me what you think? If you ever have time?

Sure.

Cinia "Rise-chan" Pacifica will probably be incredibly busy very soon reading over the rest of the entries and probably won't have time, so I'll tell you my impressions in Rise's stead.

From my brief skim, and it was brief because I am aware of the Breath of Fire series, but never looked into it so I lacked the knowledge to comprehend the appropriate setting, I can tell that you put some work into this. The effort shows, which is nice.

Some negatives, however, are that you have a bit of punctuation errors that I believe you are not aware of because you do them repeatedly. For instance, a quotation from a character usually ends in a comma and not a period. When it does end in a period, you are supposed to capitalize the word after the quotation. There's the majority of your capitalization errors right there. There were a few grammatical errors as well, such as sentences that begin in "But," which is not something to advise.

Ignoring all those basic English rules, the story you're telling is a good one that remains interesting and you tell it well with decently good skill. However, you just need some proof-reading done. That's my take on you're piece.

I hope it being denied entry doesn't come down too hard on you because you have a talent for writing. You just made a mistake with not being punctual and analyzing specific rules and guidelines.

Review: For the love of God, why doesn't anyone capitalize!?! (;____;X (sad whale)

The Good: Description, description, description. Though I enjoyed the pieces of description, I would have liked more in general so I could actually see the world and not just various items. To be honest, I've never played the game nor do I know anything about the characters, but your earlier description kind of brought me into the game world a bit. This entire part seemed to be more a singular anecdote in the midst of a much larger story- because of that I did take some time figuring out the world.

The Okay: Because it read like a game and less like a story, it felt just like that. It felt like a visual novel. Not to say that is entirely a bad thing, but if you are going to write a story, please do just that, write a story. Also, the reference to fakku seemed a little random as you said in your description.

The Bad: I got lost. Throughout this entire anecdote, nothing really happened. A guy meets a girl in a market, says hello and talks about books. Then there were random things that were never answered. What do that flowers at the lake have to do anything with the whole story? Even if it is a fan fiction, if you are writing a story, it should be all-encompassing. It also seemed a little boring. People talking about books, despite the overarching story, is generally boring. Something needs to be happening in the middle of it all.

Sure I get that, And thanks. I suck at things like that. But for future reference, people may want to ensure such a critical entry requirement for any future contests should be specifically stated under the rules, Seeing as how it IS a rule, and clearly an vitally important one. I don't understand why something so important is better placed where it can be conceivably overlooked. Sure I should have read more into the faq, but something like that shouldn't have been in there to begin with. It's not a odd detail, it's a rule. This kind of thing really just seems to diminish the whole spirit of the contest itself. It's an internet forum, not the DMV or small claims court. Anyways thanks again.



1500 word limit, cuts, single part of a larger story. sloppiness, assumptions made based on the readers familiarity of the characters. humming birds like flowers, i compared her to one and stated the exact situation in which he had seen one for said comparison, while he was fishing. I referred to the previous comparison like a paragraph afterwards. it should still be fresh in your mind, but like you said, it's boring. I didn't think it would be confusing though. clearly it's shit.

anyways, thanks.

It's not as if it isn't clearly stated. Forget it being in the rules section, it has it's own section in big, bold font: "Deadline." The problem that arises from accepting submissions after the deadline is that if you're going to be lenient on one rule, there's no point to having any. You're right that this isn't the DMV, we're a bit closer of a community than that, but the organizers can't make exceptions when there are actually concrete prizes, physical awards that matter as a result. What if you won? It would make a lot of people upset and come down hard on what Rise, Tsuyo, Waar and also all the previous judges of Writing and Fanfiction section contests have worked hard to promote.

Again, I hope this doesn't turn you off from submitting your future works to the section.

Thanks again, you have been very kind and patient. I made the deadline, I'm not sure why you keep mentioning it, I just didn't reply to the thread like i was supposed to. I think that's an important distinction. And i did ask hours in advance if I had overlooked any entry requirements. Not that that matters.

Sorry I was harsh though. I hope you take the review seriously and work on something even more fantastic next time!