[Summer Contest Entry 2012] SevenTeen-th

Author's notes:
-This is for the future question in regards to my reg date, and the fact that this entry is my first post. Ive been lurking fakku for months now, and this contest really caught my interest.It presented me a chance to scale my writing skills, all the while having people judge my work. So i decided id finally hit the registry button, and give this contest my best shot! so wish me luck a good job! I insist on having mods examine my I.P. Address check the accounts registered here, just as proof of my statement.



-Lastly, I am the original author of this work, and thus, declare that only I,My,and Me have the right to edit this work, unless i specify certain individuals of this board.

-1465 words... now that's what I call cutting it close! anyway, there's been ALOT of editing I did to this cos i felt somehow, the plot i first thought of was lackluster(even more lackluster than the final outcome!) anyway, please do give my story a red. it would make me really happy! enjoy!

-Finally made the (amateur) illustration! Hopefully i wont be bashed by how crappy it looks
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PROLOGUE

July 15th, 2012, SUMMER. My days as a high school student finally ends. This summer will mark my last days of a care-free, fun-filled(or perhaps not, since I'm a member, from freshmen to senior, of this so called "go-straight-home-afterclass" club I created) High school life.

Saturday, July 16, 2012. I wake up another morning having nothing at all to do, except sit in front of our sala set , T.V., plug in my PS3, and proceed to beating Tyrant Baal.

"Tch, my friends said they'd give me call whenever the circle planned any hangout. Look at my cell, there's not even a single message!"

So continued my whole day without a single event that's fitting for the last days of a high school student. Really, sometimes I wonder why i even bothered buying myself a cellphone.
7:00 pm. Inside my room after having dinner with my family, i decided to go with my usual routine.

"Alright, firefox *click* aaaand- *type type* fakku.net. *Click* Tags *click* forced. Dammit, isn't there a way to enter two of my favored tags? Id sure love to easily browse forced and group one of these days...."

Finally clicked what I'd decided to exercise my right hand with, tissue in my right hand,positioned...perfectly. Tissue box on the left side of my monitor.

"Alright, better make sure none of my mana will be spilt onto thy keyboard...."

Suddenly, I hear the soft opening of my door.I did say soft, but it was faster than i could close my zipper without looking suspicious. I barely made it!

"kuya,kuya! mom said go downstairs, she says she has something to discuss with us!"
"Damn it Maya, don't you know how to knock?!"
"ehhh,Maya doesn't see any reason to knock on your door, 'cos look, you don't knock when you enter mine either!"
"That's because its different entering a grown man's room! Specially at this time! Whatever, just go downstairs and tell them I'll be there in a second."
"Okaayyy."

Just as what you'd expect from the logic of an 8-year-old elementary schoolgirl. Well, in any case, considering what just happened, I'm still lucky that it was the chiisai brained imouto of mine that entered. Imagine if it was Nee-san that entered, she'd definitely tease me about it even by the time I'd get married, or have grandchildren!

After "cleaning" my room and spraying air freshener, I decided to finally head downstairs and hear what mom has to discuss.

"Oh, finally here! so useless son, where would you prefer, Boracay, or a private beach somewhere in Hong Kong?"
"Did you just call your one-and-only son in the house useless?! You're hurting my feelings here!"
"Well,well, forget about the minor details. So? what do you think about our trip?"

Putting aside the fact that she called my feelings "minor details", actually, this is my first hearing about this trip. Really, how rash can this mother be? Anyway, I would definitely prefer the much less troublesome place to go.

"Boracay would be just fine, I guess..."
"Well, that's what I thought you'd say! I already got us our tickets, and we'll be leaving this Sunday.You'd better start packing your stuff now."
"Then what's the point in letting me choose! more like, the trip's already tomorrow!...Dammit, just forget it. You guys just go and have fun yourselves. Don't hold back, I don't mind just staying here myself anyway."

Well, staying here at the house and grinding a few thousand more level's for reincarnation is STILL much better than going on a trip with my noisy family.

"You...."
"What?"
"I'm cutting your monthly allowance to 1/4th from now"
"I'll be upstairs and pack my things."

PROLOGUE END
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So explains the reason why I'm here on this island. We decided to stay at a local hotel.
July 17, 2012. 8:00 pm. Sunday.

"Hey,Hey, Mom! The key says room 709! suugooii!! is there like 700 hundred rooms in this hotel?! or maybe even more?! but, but, wouldn't that make searching for our room reaallyy difficult?"
"Hahaha, no Maya, 709 just means that our room is on the 7th floor and 9th door of this hotel."
"ehhh,sou nano?that's kinda disappointing..."

After we arrived on our designated room, I started to unpack my things and decided to stroll around the island and breathe some fresh air, after all, my mind is still dizzy after that airplane ride.

"Mom,I'm going out for a bit. Just gonna stroll around and see if there's a convenience store around."
"Alright, just make sure to be careful."
"Oi, Baka otouto, buy me some juice on your way back!"
"Tch, why dont you go off your lazy ass and buy it yourself?"
"ii-janai? just relying on you once in a while? pweease? for the sake of your pretty nee-san?"
"alright, alright. Just stop that, its annoying. I'll see if id have some coins left when I get back.
"Hi-hi-hi..San-kyu❤"

Geez, when will that big sister grow up?

I walk up to the elevator for the second time. Kind of silly now that I think about it. We check-in on an expensive hotel and the second I enter the room, I leave immediately.Well I cant help it right? I got a really bad headache right now and if I don't catch a breather, I'd be puking my dinner out!

9:00 P.M

I'm walking around the seaside,20-minute walk from our hotel.

"Now this is that fresh air I needed!"

The fresh,cool,air breeze,carrying a bit of the salty scent from the ocean. The sounds you make as you walk along the white sands, even the soft feeling of your foot slightly sinking above it. And most of all, the view of the sea. how do I describe this?Starting from the saying "The color of the sea changes from day to nighttime". Beside the usual elegant feel you get while looking at the sea during day, gazing it at nighttime cant even compare to its beauty. Like, maybe, mysterious beauty?

"I guess, all in all, even after all the trouble getting here, its all worth it just for this..."

I sincerely smile from my heart as I say that.

*stretching*"nnnnnggghhhh, ahhhhhh. Been over an hour since i left our room. Guess its time to go back."

I started making my way back to the hotel.

10:45 P.M

I'm anxious about how long I'm taking my time getting back to the hotel. If I remember correctly, it didn't take me this long getting around where I strolled, so why is it taking longer getting back?!

"Dammit, it must be the dark that caused me getting lost."

My heartbeat is getting faster and faster the minute I wander around the surrounding forest(I somehow got to while searching for the hotel!)of the beach.
Now that it came to this, I no longer have any choice. I'm quite hesitant doing this, but this is all I've got.

"S-somebody! Is there anybody here!? I got lost and would appreciate it if somebody would give me directions! H-Help!!"

I thought so. Like hell anyone would answer in the middle of some unknown forest!
But I thought, I'd give it one last call, before finding someplace to spend the night here and wait till morning to leave.

"I-if there's anyone here who can help with directions!?"

I feel a soft touch from my back. I turn around.

"You've been noisy, you know? Don't you know when to give up?"

A...girl? about 147 cm tall. slightly tanned, aaannnd, flat chested. Anyway, I feel so glad meeting another person! I can almost love this girl with all my heart!

"Oh, a person! I'm saved! Hey,you think you can help me get out of this forest?I'll be forever grateful to you if you'd help!"
"If that would shut you up,then I guess there's no problem."

This girl sure has an attitude. but I'm still thankful to her.

As she leads a way out of the forest, I started making conversations. Although she seems very unkindly at first, I started to feel that talking to her doesn't feel so....bad. In fact,I may be enjoying myself.

After my ordeal, I decided to propose to her that we be friends, at least a chance for me to repay her. After finally stepping out of the forest, I see the hotel building, not too far.

"Hey, you said we be friends, I haven't even head from you your name."
"Oh, that's right. You can call me Jun. As in the month- June"
"I see, Then call me Mae.Yoroshiku!

As she say that, she finally gives a very dazzling,cute smile.

It was that moment, that I,Jun Takeuchi, see the very heartful SUMMER that is to come.

Good day to you, Rozeluxe. I'm glad that my contest had caught your interest and I thank you for your submission. But please follow the rules and post the link to this thread in here. Or else your entry may be disregarded.


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Excuse me, I'm sorry to inform you that your entry has surpassed the limit of 1500 words. It is currently 1513 words under Microsoft Word's counting.

Okay, then il just edit it shorter. Thx fir the reminder

Interesting.
Instead of being about what he did with the girl, it's instead how the two meet.
I guess it's up to the reader to use their imagination to think up whatever happens next.
Not a bad read, this is a good opener to what could be the first of many lovely stories.

Wow, thx for the feed back :)
Its comments like these that make me really happy writing a story :)