[Summer Contest Entry 2012] Summer of Love and Friendship

Summer of Love and Friendship

There I was again, alone in the dark in front of my computer screen checking the newly added hentai on Fakku hoping to find something with my preferences. Femdom, housewife, tsundere, schoolgirl, kemonomimi, or even the occasional incest, but regardless of what I prefer in the hentai world there is always one tag that I seem to love and hate and that is the romance tag “Vanilla”. What “Vanilla” seems to do for me is it gives a sense of love and hope that I’ll find that special one for me one day. I know most people would look at me and call me a pervert and a deviant for going to hentai in order to cope with my loneliness but it goes deeper than that, it’s more of way to escape reality and believe that for that short moment that I’m not alone.

There was a knock at my door shortly after I started to browse the Fakku selection. I minimized what I was just looking at and then brought up another page as a decoy to throw off people incase they were suspicious as to what I was doing alone in the dark. I opened the door and there standing before me was my roommate, Anna. Now I know what you may be thinking and no she isn’t my girlfriend, she’s my best friend’s girlfriend. Now if your next question is why not put the moves on her it’s because she is like a little sister to me. While her boyfriend Ryan was away studying abroad in England, Anna and I moved in together so when Ryan returns he has not just his best friend, but his girlfriend in the same place as well. She knocked on my door because she felt sad and alone since she hasn’t seen Ryan in almost a year. I spent the remaining night with her as we watched movies, played games, and just talked. I didn’t mind doing this, and the fact that she has the same interests as Ryan and I made it easier.

It was like that for the most of summer, that is, until Anna came bursting into my room. She was full of energy, happiness, and excitement, so much so it could only mean one thing, Ryan’s coming back. Anna, being the person she is, wanted to throw a big welcome back party for him at the beach. She entrusted me to invite all of our friends and family members who know and missed Ryan as much as we did. Seeing Anna all lit up made me reflect on the “Vanilla” tag on hentai. I think the reason why I and so many people love hentai is for the same reason we love anime, we want to live most of those events and feel like we are larger than life and have the time of a lifetime. The night before Ryan was to return, Anna was so excited as well as nervous to see her love again that she couldn’t sleep. Seeing her as a little sister I was happy for her, but I was also somewhat happy for myself since Ryan is also my best friend and I haven’t seen him for almost a year as well.

Morning came and like a little kid on Christmas morning, Anna came bursting into my room and woke me up. As I was getting ready, Anna checked with me to see if everyone that was invited would show up for Ryan’s welcome back party, once I told her everything was taken cared of she quickly forgot all about it and seemed to be daydreaming about what would be the first thing she and Ryan would do. Once we got to the airport we waited in the area where he was supposed to arrive at, and for a split second when we both saw him it seemed like everything went in slow motion as the people who passed by Ryan seemed to be the only thing left keeping him from us. Slow motion or not, Anna lost control of herself as she ran into Ryan’s arms and the both of them shared a kissed. Everyone who could see them awed at the couple that were so clearly and deeply in love. I, myself saw how the two of them held each other with such passion and it reminded me about romance in hentai and how even if hentai itself may not be real, the stories they tell are real enough.

After the two of them kissed and held each other for a few minutes, Ryan and I hugged and talked for a quick moment before we headed to the beach for his welcome back party. Once we got out of the car and stepped onto the beach where the party was supposed to be, Anna began to get upset at the fact that no one had shown up. She quickly turned to me to make sure that I sent out the invites as well as set the right time and date, but before I could explain to her, Ryan grabbed her and kissed her as he signaled me to leave. Ryan knew that Anna would throw a welcome back party, but what he really wanted was do something for her, so he asked me if I could set up something for just the two of them. So I took it upon myself to make sure that the two of them were alone and not disturbed so they could spend their first night together alone. Ryan knew that this is what Anna wanted, and indeed she did, for Anna began to cry tears of happiness at first until Ryan used his finger to wipe them away as he gave her a kiss. The two of them spent the night cuddling together underneath the stars.

The next day the two of them returned home, this being the first time Ryan had stepped into this apartment, and quickly Anna hugged me as she thanked me for being a good “Big Brother”. The two of them then began to smile even more so than before and that’s when they told me that they were getting married. Now at first I was shocked, but I quickly realized that it has been long overdue and that my best friend as well as my “Little Sister” both deserved this as well as each other. After I congratulated them I left to the shore that we lived nearby and watched the sun set. I reflected about how I stayed up late at night checking Fakku and other sites for new uploads and if I was ashamed for hiding in the world of hentai because of some fear that I won’t ever be happy. I wouldn’t say that I’m depressed, I would say that I’m seeking an answer, and after seeing Anna and Ryan so happy together I realized that hentai was showing me what I wanted, I wanted romance and a loved one to share that with. While I was thinking about all of this, Anna and Ryan had showed up as they were looking for me because they wanted to know if I would like to join them for dinner. I gave them a smile as I said yes, and as I began to walk with the two of them I looked back to the sunset to see that even though summer has ended, our future now begins.

For once the POV is someone not in the relationship. Interesting.

In my opinion, this was very cute and touching,
how the big brother sent off his little sister to somebody else,
kind of like how a father gives his daughter to her husband on their wedding day.

I also enjoyed how he had a "realization" about life, although it's a little bit cheesy.
Keep it up, man.

Thanks Man. I was trying to mix elements of my life and what is recently going in it while twisting it a bit with some fiction. I didn't have much room to do what I originally planned so I had to cut out certain parts. In the future I do plan to post more original work on the forums that are longer and hopefully appealing to you as well as others.

While I am fully aware of Second-person-narrative you used, I think the story is a bit lacking in emotion as to the conflict (person against itself). The story revolves with love and friendship alright, but its main concern is the narrator’s questioning himself with whatever he’s doing.

My advice is that you should’ve made more of the character’s part. The story of the couple was alright (though not that superb in my taste), but I think it would’ve been better if you inserted much more emotion as to what the narrator feels.

It was cheesy, by the way. I’m not that a fan of Vanilla, so maybe it’s just me. Anyway, nice attempt for your first story here in Writing section! Keep Writing!

I see what you mean, and I did want to do more but after having to cut my original story down I chose to keep the core of what I had. I planned on having actual conversations between the three characters but due to the word limit I chose to keep it simple and first person. But like I said, I plan on writing and posting more here on the forums so I hope you keep a look out for those and comment on them as well. ^.^

That's great! Doing that, you'd grow even better as a writer (and there'll be no more word lmits by then). You can bet I'll be there to comment again ^^

Honestly, I'd have to disagree a bit here. I felt that the core conflict was resolved. Maybe not by finding a loved one, but by having the main character understanding himself a little better. It did have rising action, a climax, and falling action with a resolution. It could be because I am not aware of the story behind the story, but I find this piece quite well-written compared to the other works I have just read. Keep it up.

Thanks Man.

I tried to make sure that the story had a "Happy" ending since the story was about romance and I didn't want to have a short story about romance end in a depressing way.