The Corpse-dragger
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I decided to write a short story on what could be the future of two characters in a TV show I used to watch. I'm trying to develop my ability in the field of short stories before i move on to long ones that would require multiple chapters (past attempts have been quite...unsuccessful)
All feedback will be accepted :)
All feedback will be accepted :)
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Xenon
FAKKU Writer
Did you really write a story about CatDog with Cat dying? The title is now that much more gruesome.
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Xenon wrote...
Did you really write a story about CatDog with Cat dying? The title is now that much more gruesome.Yup! I was a bit worried that no one would get it haha
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RavenxSinon wrote...
Yup! I was a bit worried that no one would get it hahaThe ending made it pretty obvious. When I first read the title, I was like, "Ooh, who is this guy, and why is he dragging corpses?" Then I realized this is a fanfic about a show from my childhood in which one of the main characters dies a gruesome death.
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d(^_^)(^_^)d wrote...
RavenxSinon wrote...
Yup! I was a bit worried that no one would get it hahaThe ending made it pretty obvious. When I first read the title, I was like, "Ooh, who is this guy, and why is he dragging corpses?" Then I realized this is a fanfic about a show from my childhood in which one of the main characters dies a gruesome death.
Sorry 'bout killing him off by the way. I have a habit of killing characters :>
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RavenxSinon wrote...
I have a habit of killing characters :>You don't say. Out of the two stories from you that I've read, they're both about death.
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Well, I didn't watch the aforementioned TV show as a kid, but I can see how disturbing this is after I google the image.
I can also imagine how 'unsuccessful' your past multi-chapter story was, if assuming its style was similar to this kind of writing.
I can also imagine how 'unsuccessful' your past multi-chapter story was, if assuming its style was similar to this kind of writing.
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Dawn_of_Dark wrote...
Well, I didn't watch the aforementioned TV show as a kid, but I can see how disturbing this is after I google the image.I can also imagine how 'unsuccessful' your past multi-chapter story was, if assuming its style was similar to this kind of writing.
I actually used a different style when i wrote multi-chapter stories. To be honest, I believe it's because I'm not really proficient in developing a long-standing world that they don't turn out well.
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was this done in purpose,
Their perfectly round shape and bounciness were simply irresistible to my past self.
http://media.animevice.com/uploads/0/9923/454554-screenshot451.jpg
Their perfectly round shape and bounciness were simply irresistible to my past self.
http://media.animevice.com/uploads/0/9923/454554-screenshot451.jpg
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GOTHICKID54 wrote...
was this done in purpose, Their perfectly round shape and bounciness were simply irresistible to my past self.
http://media.animevice.com/uploads/0/9923/454554-screenshot451.jpg
Uhhmm... no. That wasn't done on purpose nor did I notice that subliminal message until you said it haha
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HimariNaruse
Bandit of Cake
I think it's a good story, Raven.
What captures the most, which is something that I enjoy, is that you gave good details in certain instances about was happening around the characters.
To me, that's what brings me so that I can visualize what it looks like and what's going on.
What captures the most, which is something that I enjoy, is that you gave good details in certain instances about was happening around the characters.
To me, that's what brings me so that I can visualize what it looks like and what's going on.
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HimariNaruse wrote...
I think it's a good story, Raven.What captures the most, which is something that I enjoy, is that you gave good details in certain instances about was happening around the characters.
To me, that's what brings me so that I can visualize what it looks like and what's going on.
It might just be me, but in my opinion, I still lack with regards to descriptive writing. Thanks for your honest opinion though! :D