The Day....

Title: The Day
WARNING!! POEM DOES NOT MAKE SENSE! I THINK!

Bucket of water poured on my face
Never again should I be disgrace
having no money, no shelter, or food
All I could think about was you
You gave me happiness
you gave me life
not only once but twice
Now you are gone.
I have nothing to eat
I wander the streets with these cold feet.
Blistered by the winter, my body shivers
I took out my Iphone and updated Twitter.


Any comments? Reviews? Is it Bad? I wrote this in 2-3 mintues.

Haha this ones weird too. in a good way?

Edit: Question is... what did he update on twitters?

Good, but weird? xD

I don't know...I just wanted to put that, since you know some stupid people these days instead of calling the cops they update twitter when they are in a pinch or something.




Thanks..

I thought it was good till iphone and twitter came up.

Those kinda elements are kinda weird. But it did make sense.

mmmmmm......a homeless man with no money and home
that visit twitter? how the hell did he get a pc? lol

agreed with unsigned ! Ruu..

Last time I saw a homeless man playing a PSP...His clothes were all ripped up too.


Thank you guys.

It's good i like it

it does make sense and it does sound good. just i couldnt believe that this person so far sunk in his life, would update twitter.

WOW, this one was really good!
I loved the Ending, it made me smile.
keep up the good work!