The Rhyme stuff.. :)
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After a harsh 9 months without being to able to open fakku. I finally contribute something to the writing forum. :)
Here's the next chapter,
Hope you all will not burst in laughter,
because it doesn't have a verse,
that just make things worse,
can't write long cause my computer is lagging,
hiding in the room or my family will start nagging,
enjoying everyday like it is the last,
got my self a guitar tonight gonna be a blast,
walking to gas station luckily it's not far,
wait a minute, why am i going there, i don't have a car,
decided to find my old toys in treasure trunk,
found out it full of old junk,
but you know what they say 'old is gold',
i say that to my friends cause i am that bold,
Here's the next chapter,
Hope you all will not burst in laughter,
because it doesn't have a verse,
that just make things worse,
can't write long cause my computer is lagging,
hiding in the room or my family will start nagging,
enjoying everyday like it is the last,
got my self a guitar tonight gonna be a blast,
walking to gas station luckily it's not far,
wait a minute, why am i going there, i don't have a car,
decided to find my old toys in treasure trunk,
found out it full of old junk,
but you know what they say 'old is gold',
i say that to my friends cause i am that bold,
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artcellrox wrote...
Funny.Also, 9 months? You were pregnant?
uuhh -_-' no. I was busy with school work, reports and research.
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I love poems. I love poets. I think I will love you fivey. Though, I found some errors- both grammatical and in the content- which I would like to share.
Spoiler:
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i have one suggestion to. i liked it :D
decided to find my old toys in treasure trunk,
found out it full of old junk,
i think it has some spotty parts there like
decided to find my old toys in (THE or MY) treasure trunk,
found out THAT it'S full of old junk,
decided to find my old toys in treasure trunk,
found out it full of old junk,
i think it has some spotty parts there like
decided to find my old toys in (THE or MY) treasure trunk,
found out THAT it'S full of old junk,
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Cinia Pacifica
Ojou-sama Writer
I think it doesn't rhyme here and there, but it's not bad. It leaves a good message at the end.
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Being a guy at the other side of the road,
With a bag and heavy stuff to load,
But I'm not giving up so easily,
Or I will make myself look silly,
I won't let my fear control me,
and One day I will make you see,
That I'm not just a regular person,
and I'm going to make you learn a lesson,
that nothing is easy,
at it seems to be,
Everything is challenging,
If that is the very first thing,
It will be easy over time,
and one day you will reach that mountain you climb,
>.<
I'm out of ideas.
P/S im going to keep posting on this thread instead of making a new one :)
With a bag and heavy stuff to load,
But I'm not giving up so easily,
Or I will make myself look silly,
I won't let my fear control me,
and One day I will make you see,
That I'm not just a regular person,
and I'm going to make you learn a lesson,
that nothing is easy,
at it seems to be,
Everything is challenging,
If that is the very first thing,
It will be easy over time,
and one day you will reach that mountain you climb,
>.<
I'm out of ideas.
P/S im going to keep posting on this thread instead of making a new one :)
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Damn School Work keeping me behind schedule. -,-
Remember when you were still a kid,
eating cookies from the jar without putting back the lid,
But time goes by so fast,
Everyone know childhood ain't gonna last,
Now hear me when I say,
Live life to the fullest and keep the sadness away,
Confront your problem and keep them at bay,
Because problems will ruin your life,
it hurts your back like a knife,
and when the forces pulls you down,
will you stay down on the ground,
or will you fight and survive,
to move on forward and strive,
remember we live only once,
sit for awhile and take a short glance,
all these burden are a little test,
to see if you can handle these mess,
Remember when you were still a kid,
eating cookies from the jar without putting back the lid,
But time goes by so fast,
Everyone know childhood ain't gonna last,
Now hear me when I say,
Live life to the fullest and keep the sadness away,
Confront your problem and keep them at bay,
Because problems will ruin your life,
it hurts your back like a knife,
and when the forces pulls you down,
will you stay down on the ground,
or will you fight and survive,
to move on forward and strive,
remember we live only once,
sit for awhile and take a short glance,
all these burden are a little test,
to see if you can handle these mess,