What is my name again?
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To leave this place
Is what I wish
To move away...
From all the pain
It hurts so much
What place do I have to call
"Home"?
No one is here
How many tears wasted
On those who don't love me
If I could call someone
To pick me up
I would.
I'll run miles over
Thousands of needles
To reach those who love and care
For me
Rather than come home to
Someone who hates me.
The one who loves me is nowhere to be found
Am I going to rot
From the inside out?
Wishing I melted
into the nothingness
of the abyss of the shadows
Who never were
And never will be
Slipping into
A deep, deep
Sleep
I hope to wake someday,
To smiles, caresses, and hugs
All I ask is for love
I hope I'm not asking for too much.
Someone take me away
From this hole
Of greedy hands
Free me from the
Chain of fingers
Before they tear off all of my face
...What is my name again?
I'm sorry if you do not enjoy (I wouldn't say "enjoy" considering it's a pretty sad.. Whatever it is. XD You know what I mean).
I'll try more to rely on feelings and inspiration and all that great stuff.
:3
Is what I wish
To move away...
From all the pain
It hurts so much
What place do I have to call
"Home"?
No one is here
How many tears wasted
On those who don't love me
If I could call someone
To pick me up
I would.
I'll run miles over
Thousands of needles
To reach those who love and care
For me
Rather than come home to
Someone who hates me.
The one who loves me is nowhere to be found
Am I going to rot
From the inside out?
Wishing I melted
into the nothingness
of the abyss of the shadows
Who never were
And never will be
Slipping into
A deep, deep
Sleep
I hope to wake someday,
To smiles, caresses, and hugs
All I ask is for love
I hope I'm not asking for too much.
Someone take me away
From this hole
Of greedy hands
Free me from the
Chain of fingers
Before they tear off all of my face
...What is my name again?
I'm sorry if you do not enjoy (I wouldn't say "enjoy" considering it's a pretty sad.. Whatever it is. XD You know what I mean).
I'll try more to rely on feelings and inspiration and all that great stuff.
:3
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Jericho Antares
FAKKU Writer
The structure is odd to me, but I am no poem afficionado so for all I know it's totally legit and intentional.
Onto the important part: content. The feeling was conveyed with such ease that I felt a twang of sadness that's been left untouched for a while. The plight of the narrator was a debilitating one that while enormous in and of itself is common enough to be related to.
Kudos, and welcome back Zeph.
Onto the important part: content. The feeling was conveyed with such ease that I felt a twang of sadness that's been left untouched for a while. The plight of the narrator was a debilitating one that while enormous in and of itself is common enough to be related to.
Kudos, and welcome back Zeph.
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Xenon
FAKKU Writer
The poem emphasizes a feeling that is quite prevalent to people. I'm sure anyone can relate at one point in time in their life to having such desired feelings. The poetic sway of the piece really builds the emotion up and lets it flutter down once it reaches the depressing end that more time is needed for the hopes to be achieved. Well done overall, Zeph.