Lucia wrote...
Done it Rise~
Would you revise it and tell me if I do nothing wrong with this one?
"Wow~ It's sooo crowded here~ Piazza San Marco is the best!" shout a red-headed girl in excitement. She was in the
middle of Piazza San Marco in Venice, Italy. Her red hair added to her beauty stood out amongst the massive crowds
in the piazza makes her quite eye-catching to the people in the Piazza.
"Whaat? It's not just a square! It's a hugeee square!!" she said to..... particularly no one.
"S-still a square you say...? Uhh... You're right, b-but see, the massive number people coming here every single,
don't you think it's special??" said Lucia to.... again, no one.
"Ahh... Okay okay! Whatever you say!! You're just-.." she suddenly stopped her words as she realized the crowds
have been staring at her in confused looks.
"Eh.... Uhh... Umm...." she blushed and flustered before she finally decided to run away from the crowd's
attention.
("HAHAHA! That was quite entertaining!") Nanami laughed from inside Lucia's mind which can only be heard by her.
"S-shut up...... Geez...." blushing still Lucia replied with her voice kept down.
("Haha... Oh well, enough of your happy-go-lucky strolling. Let's get down to the errand sister Claudia gave us.")
"Right. We need to help her as much as we could. If it isn't because she was kind enough to took us in her church
several years ago, we might still a homeless wanderer by now. This little errand of delivering a letter will never
enough to repay her kindness." said Lucia while reminiscing the past.
("Heh.. With my sexiness, I can charm some handsome guy to give us a place to stay and money.")
"Don't you ever do that with my body!! Geez...." She denied as she walks towards Saint Marco Basilica.
I dunno why there are brackets.... thoughts can be easily shown through narrations, I'm sorry if changing some things in there was a bad thing, but, anyway, here it is:
"Wow, it's sooo crowded in here! Piazza San Marco is the best!" shouted, a red-headed girl, due to excitement.
She was in the middle of Piazza San Marco in Venice, Italy. Her red hair added to her beauty stood out amongst the massive bustling crowd.
In the piazza, her eyes makes her look quite eye-catching to the people.
"Whaat? It's not just a square! It's a huuuge square!!" she said it to... herself.
"S-Still, a square you say... ? Uhh... You're right, b-but see, the massive number people comes here every single day... Don't you think it's special?!" said Lucia to.... again, to herself.
"Ahh... Okay okay! Whatever you say!! You're just-" she suddenly stopped as she realized that people have been staring at her in confused looks for some time now.
"Eh.... Uhh... Umm....", her cheeks blushed and flustered, before she finally decided to run away from the crowd's attention.
"HAHAHA! That was quite entertaining!" Nanami spoke after she laughed, inside Lucia's mind which could only be heard by her.
"S-shut up...... Geez...." blushing still Lucia replied with her voice down.
"Haha... Oh well, enough of your happy-go-lucky strolling. Let's get down to the errand sister Claudia gave us.", said Nanami, again, within Lucia's mind.
"Right. We need to help her as much as we can. Since she was kind enough to take us in her on the church several years ago, or else we'd still be homeless wanderers now. This little errand of delivering a letter will never enough to repay her kindness." said Lucia while reminiscing the past.
"Heh.. With my sexiness, I can charm some handsome guy to give us money and a place to stay.", replied Nanami to Lucia within Lucia's mind.
"Don't you ever do that with my body!! Geez...." She denied as she walked towards Saint Marco Basilica.