Doujinshi (+18) made by me. (please comment.)

Hello!

I just made a doujinshi. But, before editing it one last time, I would like to know what people think about it.


Ok, that is all.
Please enjoy.

<<< read from right to left<<<<<

idk about the pictures of the insides of the body, for max usage, i would keep the art at skin level. Also the angles are kind of confusing, but that may be rough draft. Pretty good otherwise.

It was good. Kinda funny at the same time. Overall you did great.

^ I am glad you enjoyed it.



Mmm...
"keep it at skin level", "confusing angles..." Ok, I will keep that in mind.

thanks for the advice.

nice work ! Ruuu....

There's one scene where it looks like she's about to bite it off.

You show a bit too much of the internal body, I don't wanna see the brain when I read a doujinshi. Otherwise not too bad at all.

mmm

Well...I drew the brain, blood stream and the beating heart because I wanted to give that feeling of unusual high, sexual arousal. The girl is supposed to lose all control of herself due to the huge amounts of dopamine that her brain is secreting.
I wanted to transmite that feeling of "desiring something to the point of self-destuction" people know so well, before they lose their virginity and go like, "Oh! this is also sex. It somehow differs from what I thought it would be but...it isn't bad either."

(Well...some people know that feeling, some people don't.)

I couldn't really think of anything besides drawing the insides to transmite that kind of feeling.

I was trying to something like in the movie "Trainspotting" (with the eye, the breath and the blood stream sequence)....
Or was that a scene from "requiem for a dream"?
Ahh...I forgot.



And about the biting...well...I like it...to bite.