A random short story
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Yeah, I was bored so I decided to write a quick story. I thought I would share it with you. And it is very short.
Contains: Yuri, Tsundere, Tragedy
Enjoy
Contains: Yuri, Tsundere, Tragedy
Enjoy
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Xenon
FAKKU Writer
Proficient in grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Only thing I would change is the all-caps speak. An exclamation mark gets the point across of yelling. Otherwise, a nice trope of the classic tsun-dere attitude. Perhaps the ending was abruptly final, but you did say it was a short short story, after all. Nice.
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DatYuriThough
Goddess of Nature
Considering that you wrote this in like half an hour while also finishing an illustration and being sat next to me (You know how much of a distraction I can be)? It's pretty good. Then again that's purely from a quality of writing perspective, from an aesthetic perspective: You made me sad. Remind me never to ask you to write stuff for me in the future otherwise I'll probably fall into a spiral of depression.
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Xenon wrote...
Proficient in grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Only thing I would change is the all-caps speak. An exclamation mark gets the point across of yelling. Otherwise, a nice trope of the classic tsun-dere attitude. Perhaps the ending was abruptly final, but you did say it was a short short story, after all. Nice.Thanks for the feedback.
I made it short because I was in an hour long break, and I knew if I didn't finish the story in that time I would probably never go back to it. And since I was telling DatYuriThough that she should kill off all the main characters in her story, I thought I should show her how it's done.
But you never know, maybe sometime in the future I'll get bored and write a sequel!
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DatYuriThough
Goddess of Nature
Oh a sequel...how would that go? Ghost-Yuri? Whatever. I'm not killing all of my characters off, I get too attached... :'(
