Ah! My Goddess: Belldandy's Clarification - Chapter 1
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[size=14][font=Tahoma]Ah My Godess: Belldandy's Clarification
Written by ~gamera68
Ah! My Goddess: Belldandy's Clarification: Chapter 1
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A fan-fic based upon characters created by Kosuke Fujishima.
Written by Gamera68. No copyright infringement intended.
Contains lemons, vanilla, and a slightly out of character Belldandy. But not much.
Read at your own discretion. 18+. You have been fairly notified. ^_^
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Keiichi was just arriving back home after a stressful day of exams at Nekomi Tech. He and Belldandy have been together for a whole three years now. He knew in his heart that they loved each other very much; and more than he could ever imagine. Especially since he had finally decided to buy a special gift a couple of weeks ago, for the one and only love of his life. And he would have no interruptions this special day, so he decided to ask for a little help from Belldandy's older sister.
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He had asked for her to get the youngest of the Three Norns, Skuld, the Goddess of the Future, out of the house for the weekend. She was overly thrilled when he told her what he was planning. "Keiichi...you sly dog, I knew you had it in you, even though it took you this long!", she joked as she gave him a jab in his ribs, just like always.
"Uhhh, thanks, Urd. I won't back down, not this time." he replied as she left the temple grounds with Skuld in tow, just as the two sisters headed out for the weekend to a local spa and hot springs resort, courtesy of the one she winked at. As they flew away on her broomstick, he heavily sighed a sign of relief, as the two siblings finally disappeared from his sight, at break-neck speed.
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"Belldandy, I'm home." He declared, full of confidence. As he was prepared to make the ultimate declaration of love to Belldandy. "Welcome home, Master" she said as she bowed her head, while wearing a revealing maid's outfit. Keiichi literally fell over as he was stupefied beyond rational thought. While gazing at Belldandy in her more-than-revealing outfit, his eyes expanded as large as saucers.
"B-Belldandy! W-w-what are you w-w-wearing?!" he sputtered out as he covered his nose, holding back the blood that wanted so desperately to blast out like the ocean itself. "Do you not like what I am wearing, Master?" she pouted, all the while her face turned redder than an overly ripe tomato. "N-no…I love it, b-b-but what's going on exactly, Belldandy?" he replied, blushing, while he tried his best to regain his composure.
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"Well Master, today is our three year anniversary since we were bound by our contract...and I wanted to do something special for you, as I know how much we have gone through..." Keiichi sighed a sign of relief, understanding what she was trying her best to do; even though he could apprehend she was beyond embarrassment. "Belldandy, thank you...but you don't have to do this. I have always loved you the way you are, and for who you are, and that will never change." He said as he reached out and held her hand.
"Oh Keiichi!" she quietly replied as she flung herself into his arms, knocking him over in the entrance way. She kissed him gently on the lips, still blushing from what he said to her a moment ago. "Belldandy…" he quizzically replied, as he was somewhat taken back by her sudden boldness. Her lips were as soft as rose petals.
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They've rarely ever kissed, let alone hold hands or even hugged, as a matter of fact. It seems that there was always someone, or something always getting in the way of their 'alone time'. Far be it from him to hold back now. Rarely seeing this sensual side of Belldandy, except when she's under a spell, or from a potion cooked up by the eldest sister, Urd. He tightly held her in his arms, feeling her bountiful bosom squeezing against his chest, nearly spilling out her revealing maid top.
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Unexpectedly, Belldandy let out a slightly sexy moan. "Keiichi, I do not want to let this feeling end..." she breathed softly into his left ear. Keiichi started to get aroused. Steam nearly came out of his ears from over excitement. He squeezed and held her, tighter than ever, and returned her passionate kisses. His mind started to wander with thoughts of wanting more. A lot more...and he rarely had imagined of doing anything like "that" to her, or at least not any that he could think of at that particular moment.
Not wanting her to get the wrong idea, he replied "Gee, I sure am hot…Is it hot in here? It's hot. I could sure use a bath. I'm gonna take a bath now if it's OK Belldandy…but we can discuss your attire decision later on, OK?" he reassured. She let out a slight sigh of disappointment, which he didn't hear. "All right, Keiichi, in the mean time, I will prepare dinner for us, while you bathe. But please take your time, and try to relax." She smiled that beautiful smile, the one that he knew best, and let him know that she was fine, albeit a little sad. But she didn't want him to see that side of her. "Thanks, Belldandy. I'll be out shortly." he politely replied, as they both got off the hard wooden floor of the entrance way.
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'Wow...what has gotten into Belldandy all of a sudden?' he wondered, as he washed himself on the small wooden traditional bathroom stool, which was just a few feet from the old, yet large bathtub full of warm water. He knew that today was the day he would pop the question, no matter what. He was perplexed as to Belldandy's unexpected burst of passion.
He remembers the day Belldandy suddenly popped into his life. What she explained to him for her sudden appearance. How his accidental phone call brought her into his life. He also recalled how ridiculous her story sounded to his ears, thinking it was a prank, set up by his mean-spirited sempai's. So he decided that he would play along. "I want a Goddess like you to stay by my side forever." He told her as his wish.
He was completely clueless at the time, not realizing now how much weight those words carried; and how drastically his life would change that fateful day. Including what the Ultimate Force would bring about if someone willingly attempted to separate the newly bound couple. But unknowingly at the time, that he inadvertently made himself immortal; as long as he needed (no, scratch that) wanted Belldandy to stay by his side. That part of the Ultimate Force made him what he is today: immune to the impending grip of death.
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After the Lord of Terror incident, the record of his original wish was erased. He knew that Bell and her sisters had to be recalled to Heaven to help restore Yggdrasil, the main world computer. But she reassured him not to worry, as she wanted to stay by his side, contract or not, because she fell madly in love with him.
A tiny tear fell from his eye.
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He got a hold of himself when he heard the bathroom door quietly slide open. "Keiichi, dear, are you alright?" she softly inquired, sensing his saddening emotions from the kitchen. "Uh…yeah, I'm fine…Belldandy…no worries", he nervously replied. He had no clue that she was already coming towards him, only wrapped in a bath towel. She kneeled down behind him, then gently whispered into his ear "I want to wash your back, Keiichi, my love.", while she gently rubbed his shoulders.
He winced at first, but she reassured him that it was fine, by wrapping her loving arms around him. "Keiichi, please...I want to do this for you, if only once." He was powerless against her calming, yet sensual words. He didn't want to trouble her, not after what happened earlier in the hallway; suddenly claiming that he needed to take a bath.
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He got a chill up his spine as he felt her soft, yet firm bosom on his back, remembering how supple they felt in the hallway. His mind was in a fog, as he started to feel her love for him, as she gently washed his wide back. Keiichi knew right then and there, that their relationship was on its' way to a whole new level. He shuddered as she suddenly rubbed her bare bountiful breasts on his back, as her towel had slipped down to her waist. He could feel himself getting more and more excited, just by her tender-loving touch. He was in the radiance that was her love.
He could actually feel her love. When she is loved, her Goddess powers increase. When she was finally finished washing his back, she took a small wooden bucket of tepid water and rinsed it. He stood up, with only a small towel around his waist. Her's had inadvertently tumbled to the floor, which she hurriedly grabbed, as she was slightly embarrassed. "Thank you, Belldandy. You don't have to be shy anymore." he said as he grabbed her in his arms. He gave her a hug that melted her shyness from the inside. "Keiichi. Is it all right if I bathe with you?" she shyly asked. "I would love that, Bell."
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The erotic look she gave him caused his heart to skip a beat. Any other mortal would have fainted from her radiant beauty. Keiichi was the luckiest man on the face of the earth. No, not just the earth, but the entire universe. In his bathtub was the most breathtakingly beautiful Goddess in all the realms. Sure, Urd was a knockout, but Belldandy…or Bell as he lovingly called her from time to time…she was graceful, sweet natured, very protective - (have you ever seen her 'jealousy storms'?), loving and sincere. No other demon or goddess would dare cause harm to, or flirt with him. Not if they valued their precious life.
That's the one side of Bell that neither one of them want to see. Belldandy hated herself for being that way. But like Urd has said, time and time again: "That's what makes Belldandy who she is." It's because she loves Keiichi so much. She wants him exclusively to herself. She has even defied the Almighty One on several occasions when it came to Keiichi. But she stood her ground and fought for their love.
Keiichi doesn't recall when it happened, but he fell fiercely in love with her. She may be a First Class Goddess, but she still remains a woman, and an extraordinary one at that. In more ways than Keiichi could ever possibly imagine.
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Keiichi could still not wrap his head around the idea that Bell is in the bathtub, even though she was right there, in front of him. He was completely and utterly captivated by her astonishing body. Her pure white skin felt like the finest satin against his. He was left dumbfounded still once again by her impromptu certainty. If Skuld knew what was going on at now, she would toss mini-bombs his way calling him a degenerate for soiling her big sister with his so-called perverted ways. But he didn't have a care in the world. Not at this moment. He felt like he was in paradise.
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With Belldandy sitting in front of him, his arms draped around her slender, yet voluptuous frame. 'Life couldn't get any better than this.' he thought to himself. He was indeed very lucky; baffled perhaps; yet content at these unforeseen turn of events. Belldandy was lightly stroking her dainty fingers across his cheek. He wanted to test these feelings and see where they would go, even if he was still a bit nervous. 'Get a hold of yourself. She came here to be with you, idiot!' he thought to himself, trying to muster up the courage to proceed any further.
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He gently breathed into, then kissed her left earlobe, then the nape of her slender neck, while holding her a bit closer... "Mmmmmm…" she moaned. He got a bit more courageous, and yet even more aroused at hearing this from his love. She subconsciously rubbed his right thigh. 'Oh man….I can't believe this…she's getting turned on!' he screamed in his mind. "Keiichi…" she begged. "Please...show me more of your love." Her voice was trembling.
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He firmly held onto her, whispering "Belldandy, if you want more, you have to let me know." He was teasing her of course. She gently took both of his arms and laid them across her ample breasts. Keiichi nearly passed out.
He loved and adored her more than anything. More than anyone could ever love another person. They've been to Hell and back. Literally. He has been places, and seen things no mere mortal has ever witnessed. Nor been able to comprehend. And lived to tell about it. But he survived everything thrown at him, no matter how ridiculous or impossible it seemed.
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He protected her. He stayed by her side. More times than he could count.
She nearly died inside when the Lord of Terror possessed him. She was beside herself, not knowing what to do. Lind wanted to obliterate him as it's unwilling host. Bell stood her ground against the powerful First Class Valkyrie. She cried, begged, and pleaded; with tears streaming down her dainty face.
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Belldandy decided then and there, instead of having Lind do what she planned, she wanted to sacrifice herself; having The Lord of Terror possess her instead of Keiichi, her only true love. But he was unable to. She was a First Class Goddess with an Unlimited License. And on top of that, she had removed her seal without permission from the Almighty One, which was attached to her left ear by two small golden chains, in order to release her full Goddess powers.
She was pure as freshly fallen snow. Untouched and untainted. Irrevocably and utterly incompatible, due to their wavelengths being out of sync. He was beyond desperation to quickly find a new host, before his essence faded. Tricked by Skuld into an old floppy disk, he was promptly erased with a powerful magnet, screaming out as he was permanently obliterated.
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Belldandy quietly started to cry. "Are you OK, Belldandy?" he quietly asked, knowing something was amiss. "I'm fine, K-Keiichi. I was j-just remembering the t-time when you were about to be e-eradicated by Lind. I w-wanted desperately to protect you…" She started to sob uncontrollably. Her held her even tighter and closer.
"I remember that, Bell. And I thanked you then. And I'm thanking you once again, for what you were about to do. For everything you've ever done for me. Thank you for being by my side. I love you, Belldandy." He replied as he gently turned her to face him. Her face was pink and her eyes nearly swollen from her sudden lament. He hugged her like he never did before. "I'm here for you Bell...For ever. I will always love you, Bell; and will do my best to protect you, no matter what."
'She must have been reading my emotions again.' he silently thought to himself.
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His gentle words reassured her, forcing a weak smile from her lips. He gently held her beautiful face, and started to kiss her tears away. "Keiichi…" she barely squeaked out his name. "Belldandy..."He whispered back. She kissed him with all her might. The entire bathroom was aglow in a soft golden light. He felt her love once again radiating outward and into his own body. He felt a warm, yet exquisite feeling coming from his beautiful Goddess. He felt her powers before, but nothing like this, which was completely different.
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He couldn't even begin to describe these feelings in words alone. He kissed her back, pressing her lips apart with his tongue. Bell softly moaned again. Keiichi got even more aroused. He could barely contain his emotions as they were engrossed in their powerful embrace. He gently touched and rubbed her perfect peach-shaped posterior. She gasped at this new sensation. Her mind started to go blank. She embraced Keiichi with all her might. These feelings and emotions were all new to Belldandy. She wanted so much more, and he could tell.
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Time seemed to stop for the couple as they hungrily kissed each other, tongues wrestling, for what seemed liken to an eternity. This went on for who knows how long. Bell was panting like an animal in heat and nearly out of breath. They paused for a moment. She was drenched in sweat.
They unanimously decided it was time to finish up the hour long bath and dry off. Belldandy finally came to her senses, and asked if he was hungry. "For you my love, yes. I am hungry for more kisses." He slyly replied. "Keiichi…" was all she could muster to say. Her cheeks were pinker than cotton candy from blushing. 'She looks so beautiful tonight.' he thought to himself.
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Dinner was excellent as always. Nothing less to be of expected of the First Class Goddess, Belldandy. They barely spoke to each other during dinnertime...just making small talk...Probably from embarrassment. It was too many emotions at once for either of them to grasp a hold of. But Keiichi was happy that they finally had some privacy, away from the prying eyes of the two sisters. They meant well. In their own bizarre ways.
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She was caught blushing whenever Keiichi stole a momentary glance at the beautiful goddess sitting on his right side of the small table, where they all shared their meals. His head was in a daze, wondering where Belldandy got her sudden burst of courage. Not that he minded. Oh no. Quite the opposite. He had a bit more backbone as well, all thanks to her intense passion.
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"Bell?" he said out of nowhere, lightly startling her from her thoughts. "Yes, Keiichi?" she inquired. "Do you need anything else? Some tea perhaps?" He shot her a smile that warmed her heart. "No thanks, Bell. I'm good. Thank you for dinner. It was delicious as always!" he complimented her. She shyly smiled back. "Thank you. I am so glad to hear that, Keiichi." She blushed yet again at hearing this. A few awkward moments passed.
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"Hey, Belldandy? Do you have a moment?" he asked nonchalantly. "Yes, Keiichi? What is it?" she softly replied as she removed the dishes from the table, while heading to the kitchen. "Would you meet me in the back yard by the temple, let's say in ten minutes? Or whenever you're done? By the well… It won't take long. I just wanted to show you something…", he asked, halfheartedly, expecting her to inquire as to why. "Yes, Keiichi. I will meet you there when I am finished here in the kitchen." she replied, with a song in her voice. "OK, Bell…take your time. I'll meet you there when you're done."
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He knew Belldandy was fast at cleaning up, since she enjoyed housework so much. He didn't waste any time. He made a quick beeline down the hallway to his room, slid the door open and found the small square red box that he was hiding from Bell in his bottom left dresser drawer. 'Thank goodness. It's still here!' he sighed a sign of relief to himself when he saw the sterling silver ring, still in its' temporary velvet house.
He bought it a few weeks ago, after saving up enough money from his job at Whirlwind. He gulped when he finally realized that tonight was the night. No hesitation. No interruptions. No turning back. A huge sweat drop suddenly appeared and ran down the back of his slightly damp hair from his bath with Belldandy. He blushed a bit. He knew what he was going to ask her. He practiced it every night before going to bed for two weeks straight.
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He was waiting by the well in the back yard, beside the Temple. It was a quiet spring evening. The full moon hung low in the crisp clear night sky. Hundreds of twinkling stars surrounded it. Belldandy was slowly approaching, looking lovely as ever. She was wearing a light-blue colored cotton dress. Keiichi bought it for her a while back as a thank you gift. It was his favorite and she knew it. "Belldandy" he gasped out her name, as if a cactus was lodged in his throat. He was utterly speechless. Not from seeing his gorgeous Goddess approaching him. No. The words he practiced every night for two solid weeks, and wanted desperately to say wouldn't come out. He started to sputter incomprehensibly.
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"Keiichi? Are you alright?" she asked, with a semi-worried look across her face. She grabbed and held his right hand and knew something was a bit off. She then remembered the first time that he attempted to ask her to go on a date, and he completely freaked out. "Keiichi, my love...Look at me please." she begged. "Try to relax. I'm here, and I came as soon as I could. What is it that you wanted to show me?" Love and compassion filled her lovely deep blue eyes. He started to relax a bit as she was still holding his hand. A few moments later, which seemed like hours to him, he inhaled deeply, then finally spoke.
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"Belldandy. Before I met you, my life was not what it is today. I was short, not very well liked and above all, I was never able to have a girlfriend. But despite all my shortcomings, I was never bitter about it. It's just the way I was. And because of that, I was low in the self-esteem department. Once again, I was never bitter. I always worked hard to make the best out of what life I was dealt. Then, that one fateful night, three years ago I made that phone call. I don't know if it was fate or just dumb luck. And when you appeared through the mirror in my old dorm, I was shocked speechless. On so many levels. But the story you told me about me being born under an unlucky star and whatnot, I had a difficult time believing that. But you reassured me, the way you always have, that I was chosen by Heaven to receive favor. And that you, Goddess First Class, Second Category, Unlimited License, Belldandy... were sent down from there to grant me, Keiichi Morisato, one solitary wish. Whatever my heart desired. I didn't know what to think nor say. I thought it over for a moment, and decided that 'this has to be a prank or a joke'...set up by my senpai's. So when I was finally ready, I told you my wish. Do you remember my wish, Belldandy?"
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She smiled and nodded her head yes, repeating it back to him in her angelic voice:
"I want a Goddess like you to stay by my side forever."
"Yes, Belldandy. That was my wish, more than once. Even though we met as children, many, many years ago, I never forgot that sweet, cute golden-haired goddess. And I made a promise to that little goddess. That I would never forget her, and that I would buy her the ring she loved so much at the festival. Even though you had to return shortly after we met. I made good on that promise, didn't I?"
A lonely single tear streamed down Belldandy's moonlit cheek as she held up her right hand, admiring the silver ring with the purple amethyst gem he had bought her two years ago. "Yes, you kept your word, my love." she replied as she lightly squeezed his hand.
He continued, as he wiped away the tears from her soft pink cheek.
"Even though you were asked to seal my memories away of meeting you. I remembered you somehow, and the promise I had made to you back then. I love you Belldandy. And I will always be here, right by your side. Forever. And my feelings for you will only grow stronger for all eternity. You're my soul-mate, Bell." She softly shook her head yes in agreement, forcing back her tears. He got down on one knee and looked with sincerity and love at the beautiful golden-haired goddess square in the eyes.
The same little girl he met many, many years ago, all grown up to be the beautiful woman standing in front of him, tears streaming down her face. "Keiichi..." she barely replied. "First Class Goddess Belldandy. Will you marry me!?" He opened the soft red velvet box he had clutched in his other hand. She saw the sterling silver engagement ring with a sparkling 5 karat diamond on top.
Her eyes grew at the sight. She was beyond speechless. Her whole body shook for a moment. Her knees gave way. Keiichi caught her in his arms half-way down. She hugged him tighter than she ever hugged him before. She cried out "Yes, my love. I will marry you!" He placed the sterling silver engagement ring on her left ring finger. If fit like a silk glove.
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The tears she held back finally came in waves. Not from sadness, but from overwhelming pure joy. Her Keiichi finally said the words. The words she's been yearning to hear for so very long. He held her in his arms; his shirt sleeves soaked from her tears, fighting back his own.
A while later, what seemed like days, she finally gained her composure, as Keiichi tried wiping her tears away so he could see her lovely face illuminated by the silvery blue moon above. He released her as she tried to get up herself, offering her a hand, so she could stand on her own two feet. She hugged and kissed him like a woman who had lost her mind. Well, a little bit anyway. They were giddy with joy.
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Especially Keiichi. Well, more like relieved. Earlier his heart was racing like it was running a marathon through the scorching desert in the middle of July. After they both calmed down, they decided it was getting late, and started to head back to the house, hand in hand, like a couple madly in love. Well, they are madly in love. Keiichi finally found the courage to ask Belldandy to marry him.
On the way back, Belldandy could barely keep her eyes off her engagement ring, which glittered under the full moonlight. "Belldandy? Are you feeling better now?" he asked out of love and concern, seeing the water works a while ago. "Yes. I am....more than fine. I'm so much in love with you, Mr. Morisato!" she beamed back at him, flashing her dazzling smile in his general direction.
Taken aback, as he hasn't heard her call him by his surname in such a long time, more than two years he thought to himself. "I'm very much in love with you, Mrs. Morisato." He lovingly joked back. She suddenly blushed after hearing what he said had sunk in. "…Mrs. Morisato…" she echoed back, breathlessly.
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'Could tonight be any more wonderful?' he thought as they reached the door to their home. Hearing the TV on in the living room, Keiichi's heart sank a bit; knowing Urd and Skuld must be back from their hot springs trip a day early. 'Crap' he thought to himself, knowing their blissful night came to a screeching halt.
Belldandy didn't seem to mind though. She wanted to tell her sister Urd the big news, even though she knew beforehand, hence their absence over the weekend. Skuld was nowhere to be found. 'Maybe the trip tired her out' Keiichi thought to himself. Sure enough, he was right. Urd confirmed it the moment she saw Keiichi's face twisted in a knot. With a crazed grin plastered across her face, she pulled him aside for a moment.
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"So Kei. I see it all went according to plan? Congratulations, brother-in–law!" she said as she gave him another jab to the ribs. He looked at her like she was crazy. 'Oh yes…It went waaaay better than expected' he boasted to himself. He then blushed, remembering Belldandy's actions earlier that day in the bathroom.
"Thanks, Urd. For all your help and advice. It really meant a lot to me." He said as he gave her a quick hug, careful as to not let Belldandy see this sudden outburst of affection towards her sister. Belldandy observed it, but didn't seem to mind. Any traces of her 'jealousy storm' were nowhere to be found. Belldandy ran up to Urd, showing her the engagement ring. "Wow!! Belldandy! It's sooo beautiful!" she exclaimed, nearly raising the sleeping Skuld from her slumber.
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"Urd, please… Not a word to Skuld. Not yet, anyway." Belldandy pleaded to the overly excited silver-haired beauty squeezing both of them. Keiichi nodded in agreement. "OK. Gotch'a. Mum's the word" she sighed, as she mimicked to zip her mouth shut.
"Well, the way I see it, that this is my decision, Urd. I love Keiichi more than words could ever describe. And Skuld will have to grow up and learn that I belong to Keiichi now. Heart, body, and soul. We were meant to be together Urd. So please..." She smiled as she expressed her feelings to her sister.
"Well, Belldandy. Keiichi. Congratulations to the both of you. I know I've given old Kei here a lot of 'difficulties' about you two moving your relationship along together. But I only meant it in my own 'special' ways to give you two a gentle push. BUT I'M SO FREAKING HAPPY FOR YOU TWO!" she exclaimed, almost to the point of tears. "Urd…" Keiichi sympathetically replied. "Thanks, Urd. I know you meant well. In your own 'special' ways." He smiled back at her, reassuring her that he was happy with the way things worked out.
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Then like a bolt of lightning, Keiichi had an epiphany.
"Belldandy, I think we should elope!!"
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I hope you enjoyed this, as it was my first fan-fic, ever, and I haven't written anything this involved since high school. (Don't ask…it was a long time ago) LOL
I had this idea in my head for a few days now, and I just had to get it out. The first few paragraphs went according to plan. After that, I kinda lost track. But I got back on track seeing where I wanted the story to go, and how to wrap it up.
Using flashbacks from the manga and anime series. The telephone call, the Lord of Terror arc, the first time Bell and Kei met as children and his promise to her. And all from memory – from my POV, anyway. I didn't want to go too far with the 'alone' time between those two. And the emotional parts Kei says to Bell before he proposed, well those are my words, and I can relate to him. Too short, not popular with girls, meeting his soul-mate…etc. anyways, enough drabble. Hope you enjoyed it. Any feedback will be appreciated. Maybe if I get enough encouragement, I will continue it in the future. BTW, this took me almost 6 hours!! Including spell check, sentence structure, etc!! O_o[/font][/h]
Written by ~gamera68
Ah! My Goddess: Belldandy's Clarification: Chapter 1
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A fan-fic based upon characters created by Kosuke Fujishima.
Written by Gamera68. No copyright infringement intended.
Contains lemons, vanilla, and a slightly out of character Belldandy. But not much.
Read at your own discretion. 18+. You have been fairly notified. ^_^
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Keiichi was just arriving back home after a stressful day of exams at Nekomi Tech. He and Belldandy have been together for a whole three years now. He knew in his heart that they loved each other very much; and more than he could ever imagine. Especially since he had finally decided to buy a special gift a couple of weeks ago, for the one and only love of his life. And he would have no interruptions this special day, so he decided to ask for a little help from Belldandy's older sister.
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He had asked for her to get the youngest of the Three Norns, Skuld, the Goddess of the Future, out of the house for the weekend. She was overly thrilled when he told her what he was planning. "Keiichi...you sly dog, I knew you had it in you, even though it took you this long!", she joked as she gave him a jab in his ribs, just like always.
"Uhhh, thanks, Urd. I won't back down, not this time." he replied as she left the temple grounds with Skuld in tow, just as the two sisters headed out for the weekend to a local spa and hot springs resort, courtesy of the one she winked at. As they flew away on her broomstick, he heavily sighed a sign of relief, as the two siblings finally disappeared from his sight, at break-neck speed.
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"Belldandy, I'm home." He declared, full of confidence. As he was prepared to make the ultimate declaration of love to Belldandy. "Welcome home, Master" she said as she bowed her head, while wearing a revealing maid's outfit. Keiichi literally fell over as he was stupefied beyond rational thought. While gazing at Belldandy in her more-than-revealing outfit, his eyes expanded as large as saucers.
"B-Belldandy! W-w-what are you w-w-wearing?!" he sputtered out as he covered his nose, holding back the blood that wanted so desperately to blast out like the ocean itself. "Do you not like what I am wearing, Master?" she pouted, all the while her face turned redder than an overly ripe tomato. "N-no…I love it, b-b-but what's going on exactly, Belldandy?" he replied, blushing, while he tried his best to regain his composure.
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"Well Master, today is our three year anniversary since we were bound by our contract...and I wanted to do something special for you, as I know how much we have gone through..." Keiichi sighed a sign of relief, understanding what she was trying her best to do; even though he could apprehend she was beyond embarrassment. "Belldandy, thank you...but you don't have to do this. I have always loved you the way you are, and for who you are, and that will never change." He said as he reached out and held her hand.
"Oh Keiichi!" she quietly replied as she flung herself into his arms, knocking him over in the entrance way. She kissed him gently on the lips, still blushing from what he said to her a moment ago. "Belldandy…" he quizzically replied, as he was somewhat taken back by her sudden boldness. Her lips were as soft as rose petals.
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They've rarely ever kissed, let alone hold hands or even hugged, as a matter of fact. It seems that there was always someone, or something always getting in the way of their 'alone time'. Far be it from him to hold back now. Rarely seeing this sensual side of Belldandy, except when she's under a spell, or from a potion cooked up by the eldest sister, Urd. He tightly held her in his arms, feeling her bountiful bosom squeezing against his chest, nearly spilling out her revealing maid top.
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Unexpectedly, Belldandy let out a slightly sexy moan. "Keiichi, I do not want to let this feeling end..." she breathed softly into his left ear. Keiichi started to get aroused. Steam nearly came out of his ears from over excitement. He squeezed and held her, tighter than ever, and returned her passionate kisses. His mind started to wander with thoughts of wanting more. A lot more...and he rarely had imagined of doing anything like "that" to her, or at least not any that he could think of at that particular moment.
Not wanting her to get the wrong idea, he replied "Gee, I sure am hot…Is it hot in here? It's hot. I could sure use a bath. I'm gonna take a bath now if it's OK Belldandy…but we can discuss your attire decision later on, OK?" he reassured. She let out a slight sigh of disappointment, which he didn't hear. "All right, Keiichi, in the mean time, I will prepare dinner for us, while you bathe. But please take your time, and try to relax." She smiled that beautiful smile, the one that he knew best, and let him know that she was fine, albeit a little sad. But she didn't want him to see that side of her. "Thanks, Belldandy. I'll be out shortly." he politely replied, as they both got off the hard wooden floor of the entrance way.
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'Wow...what has gotten into Belldandy all of a sudden?' he wondered, as he washed himself on the small wooden traditional bathroom stool, which was just a few feet from the old, yet large bathtub full of warm water. He knew that today was the day he would pop the question, no matter what. He was perplexed as to Belldandy's unexpected burst of passion.
He remembers the day Belldandy suddenly popped into his life. What she explained to him for her sudden appearance. How his accidental phone call brought her into his life. He also recalled how ridiculous her story sounded to his ears, thinking it was a prank, set up by his mean-spirited sempai's. So he decided that he would play along. "I want a Goddess like you to stay by my side forever." He told her as his wish.
He was completely clueless at the time, not realizing now how much weight those words carried; and how drastically his life would change that fateful day. Including what the Ultimate Force would bring about if someone willingly attempted to separate the newly bound couple. But unknowingly at the time, that he inadvertently made himself immortal; as long as he needed (no, scratch that) wanted Belldandy to stay by his side. That part of the Ultimate Force made him what he is today: immune to the impending grip of death.
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After the Lord of Terror incident, the record of his original wish was erased. He knew that Bell and her sisters had to be recalled to Heaven to help restore Yggdrasil, the main world computer. But she reassured him not to worry, as she wanted to stay by his side, contract or not, because she fell madly in love with him.
A tiny tear fell from his eye.
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He got a hold of himself when he heard the bathroom door quietly slide open. "Keiichi, dear, are you alright?" she softly inquired, sensing his saddening emotions from the kitchen. "Uh…yeah, I'm fine…Belldandy…no worries", he nervously replied. He had no clue that she was already coming towards him, only wrapped in a bath towel. She kneeled down behind him, then gently whispered into his ear "I want to wash your back, Keiichi, my love.", while she gently rubbed his shoulders.
He winced at first, but she reassured him that it was fine, by wrapping her loving arms around him. "Keiichi, please...I want to do this for you, if only once." He was powerless against her calming, yet sensual words. He didn't want to trouble her, not after what happened earlier in the hallway; suddenly claiming that he needed to take a bath.
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He got a chill up his spine as he felt her soft, yet firm bosom on his back, remembering how supple they felt in the hallway. His mind was in a fog, as he started to feel her love for him, as she gently washed his wide back. Keiichi knew right then and there, that their relationship was on its' way to a whole new level. He shuddered as she suddenly rubbed her bare bountiful breasts on his back, as her towel had slipped down to her waist. He could feel himself getting more and more excited, just by her tender-loving touch. He was in the radiance that was her love.
He could actually feel her love. When she is loved, her Goddess powers increase. When she was finally finished washing his back, she took a small wooden bucket of tepid water and rinsed it. He stood up, with only a small towel around his waist. Her's had inadvertently tumbled to the floor, which she hurriedly grabbed, as she was slightly embarrassed. "Thank you, Belldandy. You don't have to be shy anymore." he said as he grabbed her in his arms. He gave her a hug that melted her shyness from the inside. "Keiichi. Is it all right if I bathe with you?" she shyly asked. "I would love that, Bell."
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The erotic look she gave him caused his heart to skip a beat. Any other mortal would have fainted from her radiant beauty. Keiichi was the luckiest man on the face of the earth. No, not just the earth, but the entire universe. In his bathtub was the most breathtakingly beautiful Goddess in all the realms. Sure, Urd was a knockout, but Belldandy…or Bell as he lovingly called her from time to time…she was graceful, sweet natured, very protective - (have you ever seen her 'jealousy storms'?), loving and sincere. No other demon or goddess would dare cause harm to, or flirt with him. Not if they valued their precious life.
That's the one side of Bell that neither one of them want to see. Belldandy hated herself for being that way. But like Urd has said, time and time again: "That's what makes Belldandy who she is." It's because she loves Keiichi so much. She wants him exclusively to herself. She has even defied the Almighty One on several occasions when it came to Keiichi. But she stood her ground and fought for their love.
Keiichi doesn't recall when it happened, but he fell fiercely in love with her. She may be a First Class Goddess, but she still remains a woman, and an extraordinary one at that. In more ways than Keiichi could ever possibly imagine.
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Keiichi could still not wrap his head around the idea that Bell is in the bathtub, even though she was right there, in front of him. He was completely and utterly captivated by her astonishing body. Her pure white skin felt like the finest satin against his. He was left dumbfounded still once again by her impromptu certainty. If Skuld knew what was going on at now, she would toss mini-bombs his way calling him a degenerate for soiling her big sister with his so-called perverted ways. But he didn't have a care in the world. Not at this moment. He felt like he was in paradise.
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With Belldandy sitting in front of him, his arms draped around her slender, yet voluptuous frame. 'Life couldn't get any better than this.' he thought to himself. He was indeed very lucky; baffled perhaps; yet content at these unforeseen turn of events. Belldandy was lightly stroking her dainty fingers across his cheek. He wanted to test these feelings and see where they would go, even if he was still a bit nervous. 'Get a hold of yourself. She came here to be with you, idiot!' he thought to himself, trying to muster up the courage to proceed any further.
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He gently breathed into, then kissed her left earlobe, then the nape of her slender neck, while holding her a bit closer... "Mmmmmm…" she moaned. He got a bit more courageous, and yet even more aroused at hearing this from his love. She subconsciously rubbed his right thigh. 'Oh man….I can't believe this…she's getting turned on!' he screamed in his mind. "Keiichi…" she begged. "Please...show me more of your love." Her voice was trembling.
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He firmly held onto her, whispering "Belldandy, if you want more, you have to let me know." He was teasing her of course. She gently took both of his arms and laid them across her ample breasts. Keiichi nearly passed out.
He loved and adored her more than anything. More than anyone could ever love another person. They've been to Hell and back. Literally. He has been places, and seen things no mere mortal has ever witnessed. Nor been able to comprehend. And lived to tell about it. But he survived everything thrown at him, no matter how ridiculous or impossible it seemed.
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He protected her. He stayed by her side. More times than he could count.
She nearly died inside when the Lord of Terror possessed him. She was beside herself, not knowing what to do. Lind wanted to obliterate him as it's unwilling host. Bell stood her ground against the powerful First Class Valkyrie. She cried, begged, and pleaded; with tears streaming down her dainty face.
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Belldandy decided then and there, instead of having Lind do what she planned, she wanted to sacrifice herself; having The Lord of Terror possess her instead of Keiichi, her only true love. But he was unable to. She was a First Class Goddess with an Unlimited License. And on top of that, she had removed her seal without permission from the Almighty One, which was attached to her left ear by two small golden chains, in order to release her full Goddess powers.
She was pure as freshly fallen snow. Untouched and untainted. Irrevocably and utterly incompatible, due to their wavelengths being out of sync. He was beyond desperation to quickly find a new host, before his essence faded. Tricked by Skuld into an old floppy disk, he was promptly erased with a powerful magnet, screaming out as he was permanently obliterated.
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Belldandy quietly started to cry. "Are you OK, Belldandy?" he quietly asked, knowing something was amiss. "I'm fine, K-Keiichi. I was j-just remembering the t-time when you were about to be e-eradicated by Lind. I w-wanted desperately to protect you…" She started to sob uncontrollably. Her held her even tighter and closer.
"I remember that, Bell. And I thanked you then. And I'm thanking you once again, for what you were about to do. For everything you've ever done for me. Thank you for being by my side. I love you, Belldandy." He replied as he gently turned her to face him. Her face was pink and her eyes nearly swollen from her sudden lament. He hugged her like he never did before. "I'm here for you Bell...For ever. I will always love you, Bell; and will do my best to protect you, no matter what."
'She must have been reading my emotions again.' he silently thought to himself.
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His gentle words reassured her, forcing a weak smile from her lips. He gently held her beautiful face, and started to kiss her tears away. "Keiichi…" she barely squeaked out his name. "Belldandy..."He whispered back. She kissed him with all her might. The entire bathroom was aglow in a soft golden light. He felt her love once again radiating outward and into his own body. He felt a warm, yet exquisite feeling coming from his beautiful Goddess. He felt her powers before, but nothing like this, which was completely different.
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He couldn't even begin to describe these feelings in words alone. He kissed her back, pressing her lips apart with his tongue. Bell softly moaned again. Keiichi got even more aroused. He could barely contain his emotions as they were engrossed in their powerful embrace. He gently touched and rubbed her perfect peach-shaped posterior. She gasped at this new sensation. Her mind started to go blank. She embraced Keiichi with all her might. These feelings and emotions were all new to Belldandy. She wanted so much more, and he could tell.
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Time seemed to stop for the couple as they hungrily kissed each other, tongues wrestling, for what seemed liken to an eternity. This went on for who knows how long. Bell was panting like an animal in heat and nearly out of breath. They paused for a moment. She was drenched in sweat.
They unanimously decided it was time to finish up the hour long bath and dry off. Belldandy finally came to her senses, and asked if he was hungry. "For you my love, yes. I am hungry for more kisses." He slyly replied. "Keiichi…" was all she could muster to say. Her cheeks were pinker than cotton candy from blushing. 'She looks so beautiful tonight.' he thought to himself.
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Dinner was excellent as always. Nothing less to be of expected of the First Class Goddess, Belldandy. They barely spoke to each other during dinnertime...just making small talk...Probably from embarrassment. It was too many emotions at once for either of them to grasp a hold of. But Keiichi was happy that they finally had some privacy, away from the prying eyes of the two sisters. They meant well. In their own bizarre ways.
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She was caught blushing whenever Keiichi stole a momentary glance at the beautiful goddess sitting on his right side of the small table, where they all shared their meals. His head was in a daze, wondering where Belldandy got her sudden burst of courage. Not that he minded. Oh no. Quite the opposite. He had a bit more backbone as well, all thanks to her intense passion.
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"Bell?" he said out of nowhere, lightly startling her from her thoughts. "Yes, Keiichi?" she inquired. "Do you need anything else? Some tea perhaps?" He shot her a smile that warmed her heart. "No thanks, Bell. I'm good. Thank you for dinner. It was delicious as always!" he complimented her. She shyly smiled back. "Thank you. I am so glad to hear that, Keiichi." She blushed yet again at hearing this. A few awkward moments passed.
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"Hey, Belldandy? Do you have a moment?" he asked nonchalantly. "Yes, Keiichi? What is it?" she softly replied as she removed the dishes from the table, while heading to the kitchen. "Would you meet me in the back yard by the temple, let's say in ten minutes? Or whenever you're done? By the well… It won't take long. I just wanted to show you something…", he asked, halfheartedly, expecting her to inquire as to why. "Yes, Keiichi. I will meet you there when I am finished here in the kitchen." she replied, with a song in her voice. "OK, Bell…take your time. I'll meet you there when you're done."
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He knew Belldandy was fast at cleaning up, since she enjoyed housework so much. He didn't waste any time. He made a quick beeline down the hallway to his room, slid the door open and found the small square red box that he was hiding from Bell in his bottom left dresser drawer. 'Thank goodness. It's still here!' he sighed a sign of relief to himself when he saw the sterling silver ring, still in its' temporary velvet house.
He bought it a few weeks ago, after saving up enough money from his job at Whirlwind. He gulped when he finally realized that tonight was the night. No hesitation. No interruptions. No turning back. A huge sweat drop suddenly appeared and ran down the back of his slightly damp hair from his bath with Belldandy. He blushed a bit. He knew what he was going to ask her. He practiced it every night before going to bed for two weeks straight.
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He was waiting by the well in the back yard, beside the Temple. It was a quiet spring evening. The full moon hung low in the crisp clear night sky. Hundreds of twinkling stars surrounded it. Belldandy was slowly approaching, looking lovely as ever. She was wearing a light-blue colored cotton dress. Keiichi bought it for her a while back as a thank you gift. It was his favorite and she knew it. "Belldandy" he gasped out her name, as if a cactus was lodged in his throat. He was utterly speechless. Not from seeing his gorgeous Goddess approaching him. No. The words he practiced every night for two solid weeks, and wanted desperately to say wouldn't come out. He started to sputter incomprehensibly.
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"Keiichi? Are you alright?" she asked, with a semi-worried look across her face. She grabbed and held his right hand and knew something was a bit off. She then remembered the first time that he attempted to ask her to go on a date, and he completely freaked out. "Keiichi, my love...Look at me please." she begged. "Try to relax. I'm here, and I came as soon as I could. What is it that you wanted to show me?" Love and compassion filled her lovely deep blue eyes. He started to relax a bit as she was still holding his hand. A few moments later, which seemed like hours to him, he inhaled deeply, then finally spoke.
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"Belldandy. Before I met you, my life was not what it is today. I was short, not very well liked and above all, I was never able to have a girlfriend. But despite all my shortcomings, I was never bitter about it. It's just the way I was. And because of that, I was low in the self-esteem department. Once again, I was never bitter. I always worked hard to make the best out of what life I was dealt. Then, that one fateful night, three years ago I made that phone call. I don't know if it was fate or just dumb luck. And when you appeared through the mirror in my old dorm, I was shocked speechless. On so many levels. But the story you told me about me being born under an unlucky star and whatnot, I had a difficult time believing that. But you reassured me, the way you always have, that I was chosen by Heaven to receive favor. And that you, Goddess First Class, Second Category, Unlimited License, Belldandy... were sent down from there to grant me, Keiichi Morisato, one solitary wish. Whatever my heart desired. I didn't know what to think nor say. I thought it over for a moment, and decided that 'this has to be a prank or a joke'...set up by my senpai's. So when I was finally ready, I told you my wish. Do you remember my wish, Belldandy?"
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She smiled and nodded her head yes, repeating it back to him in her angelic voice:
"I want a Goddess like you to stay by my side forever."
"Yes, Belldandy. That was my wish, more than once. Even though we met as children, many, many years ago, I never forgot that sweet, cute golden-haired goddess. And I made a promise to that little goddess. That I would never forget her, and that I would buy her the ring she loved so much at the festival. Even though you had to return shortly after we met. I made good on that promise, didn't I?"
A lonely single tear streamed down Belldandy's moonlit cheek as she held up her right hand, admiring the silver ring with the purple amethyst gem he had bought her two years ago. "Yes, you kept your word, my love." she replied as she lightly squeezed his hand.
He continued, as he wiped away the tears from her soft pink cheek.
"Even though you were asked to seal my memories away of meeting you. I remembered you somehow, and the promise I had made to you back then. I love you Belldandy. And I will always be here, right by your side. Forever. And my feelings for you will only grow stronger for all eternity. You're my soul-mate, Bell." She softly shook her head yes in agreement, forcing back her tears. He got down on one knee and looked with sincerity and love at the beautiful golden-haired goddess square in the eyes.
The same little girl he met many, many years ago, all grown up to be the beautiful woman standing in front of him, tears streaming down her face. "Keiichi..." she barely replied. "First Class Goddess Belldandy. Will you marry me!?" He opened the soft red velvet box he had clutched in his other hand. She saw the sterling silver engagement ring with a sparkling 5 karat diamond on top.
Her eyes grew at the sight. She was beyond speechless. Her whole body shook for a moment. Her knees gave way. Keiichi caught her in his arms half-way down. She hugged him tighter than she ever hugged him before. She cried out "Yes, my love. I will marry you!" He placed the sterling silver engagement ring on her left ring finger. If fit like a silk glove.
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The tears she held back finally came in waves. Not from sadness, but from overwhelming pure joy. Her Keiichi finally said the words. The words she's been yearning to hear for so very long. He held her in his arms; his shirt sleeves soaked from her tears, fighting back his own.
A while later, what seemed like days, she finally gained her composure, as Keiichi tried wiping her tears away so he could see her lovely face illuminated by the silvery blue moon above. He released her as she tried to get up herself, offering her a hand, so she could stand on her own two feet. She hugged and kissed him like a woman who had lost her mind. Well, a little bit anyway. They were giddy with joy.
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Especially Keiichi. Well, more like relieved. Earlier his heart was racing like it was running a marathon through the scorching desert in the middle of July. After they both calmed down, they decided it was getting late, and started to head back to the house, hand in hand, like a couple madly in love. Well, they are madly in love. Keiichi finally found the courage to ask Belldandy to marry him.
On the way back, Belldandy could barely keep her eyes off her engagement ring, which glittered under the full moonlight. "Belldandy? Are you feeling better now?" he asked out of love and concern, seeing the water works a while ago. "Yes. I am....more than fine. I'm so much in love with you, Mr. Morisato!" she beamed back at him, flashing her dazzling smile in his general direction.
Taken aback, as he hasn't heard her call him by his surname in such a long time, more than two years he thought to himself. "I'm very much in love with you, Mrs. Morisato." He lovingly joked back. She suddenly blushed after hearing what he said had sunk in. "…Mrs. Morisato…" she echoed back, breathlessly.
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'Could tonight be any more wonderful?' he thought as they reached the door to their home. Hearing the TV on in the living room, Keiichi's heart sank a bit; knowing Urd and Skuld must be back from their hot springs trip a day early. 'Crap' he thought to himself, knowing their blissful night came to a screeching halt.
Belldandy didn't seem to mind though. She wanted to tell her sister Urd the big news, even though she knew beforehand, hence their absence over the weekend. Skuld was nowhere to be found. 'Maybe the trip tired her out' Keiichi thought to himself. Sure enough, he was right. Urd confirmed it the moment she saw Keiichi's face twisted in a knot. With a crazed grin plastered across her face, she pulled him aside for a moment.
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"So Kei. I see it all went according to plan? Congratulations, brother-in–law!" she said as she gave him another jab to the ribs. He looked at her like she was crazy. 'Oh yes…It went waaaay better than expected' he boasted to himself. He then blushed, remembering Belldandy's actions earlier that day in the bathroom.
"Thanks, Urd. For all your help and advice. It really meant a lot to me." He said as he gave her a quick hug, careful as to not let Belldandy see this sudden outburst of affection towards her sister. Belldandy observed it, but didn't seem to mind. Any traces of her 'jealousy storm' were nowhere to be found. Belldandy ran up to Urd, showing her the engagement ring. "Wow!! Belldandy! It's sooo beautiful!" she exclaimed, nearly raising the sleeping Skuld from her slumber.
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"Urd, please… Not a word to Skuld. Not yet, anyway." Belldandy pleaded to the overly excited silver-haired beauty squeezing both of them. Keiichi nodded in agreement. "OK. Gotch'a. Mum's the word" she sighed, as she mimicked to zip her mouth shut.
"Well, the way I see it, that this is my decision, Urd. I love Keiichi more than words could ever describe. And Skuld will have to grow up and learn that I belong to Keiichi now. Heart, body, and soul. We were meant to be together Urd. So please..." She smiled as she expressed her feelings to her sister.
"Well, Belldandy. Keiichi. Congratulations to the both of you. I know I've given old Kei here a lot of 'difficulties' about you two moving your relationship along together. But I only meant it in my own 'special' ways to give you two a gentle push. BUT I'M SO FREAKING HAPPY FOR YOU TWO!" she exclaimed, almost to the point of tears. "Urd…" Keiichi sympathetically replied. "Thanks, Urd. I know you meant well. In your own 'special' ways." He smiled back at her, reassuring her that he was happy with the way things worked out.
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Then like a bolt of lightning, Keiichi had an epiphany.
"Belldandy, I think we should elope!!"
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I hope you enjoyed this, as it was my first fan-fic, ever, and I haven't written anything this involved since high school. (Don't ask…it was a long time ago) LOL
I had this idea in my head for a few days now, and I just had to get it out. The first few paragraphs went according to plan. After that, I kinda lost track. But I got back on track seeing where I wanted the story to go, and how to wrap it up.
Using flashbacks from the manga and anime series. The telephone call, the Lord of Terror arc, the first time Bell and Kei met as children and his promise to her. And all from memory – from my POV, anyway. I didn't want to go too far with the 'alone' time between those two. And the emotional parts Kei says to Bell before he proposed, well those are my words, and I can relate to him. Too short, not popular with girls, meeting his soul-mate…etc. anyways, enough drabble. Hope you enjoyed it. Any feedback will be appreciated. Maybe if I get enough encouragement, I will continue it in the future. BTW, this took me almost 6 hours!! Including spell check, sentence structure, etc!! O_o[/font][/h]
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Forgot my safe word
Well done, and very well written! I almost felt like I was watching an episode. From your disclaimer, I expected it to be a little more explicit, but it added just the right touch of 'fan service' to their relationship.
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Firstly, I'd like to say thank you for posting your fanfic here. It's quite sometime since i seen one.
Now, to be serious. As a big fan of the series and a bigger one for Belldandy & Keiichi, i'll have to say...
It felt empty.
Perhapes i'm not seeing it in the "18+" manner. I can't see "Keiichi" nor "Belldandy" in the fan fiction that you're writing. That "Keiichi" with his courage to express his love for belldandy. The courage that always burns out when he needs it the most yet is able to express his intentions in the most sincere, though not properly expressed ways. That even though he wouldn't get everything that he intend to express out, is able to simply appreciate that little result that his semi-successful actions and just smile it through because he's very happy as he is now. The hero who'd never get the entire package.
It's refreshing to see the way you writing , potraying him finally unleashing a torrent of kept up courage and be manly for once, although being plentiful of that when matters expects him to. However, after see him for so long and to withness him suddenly to become a different man kinda hits me at the wrong way.
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As for Belldandy. She is forever pure, that tiny candle light that you'll admire in a dark room , that such a tiny flame brings so much illumination to the darkness.
"Revealing maid outfit" and "Belldandy" hits me very wrongly, even more so of the motive of doing so, it's just not "belldandy-ish". Unless she drunk in cola, it's hard to imagine her do such actions that'll make her seem cheap, knowningly or unknowingly.
I noticed that you've potrayed Belldandy to be rather agreesive as well where she's the forever patient. As shown in the manga where Urd drugged her to bring her inner aggressive side out that she question Keiichi as to why he'd not lay a single finger on her.
As the equation of how Belldandy still stay patient is that whenever she feel uneasy about their relationship, Keiichi will be there to cement the cracks that she stands as a unreplacable pillar in his heart. that she with the knowledge of his love continues to stay honest and patient while waiting Keiichi to progress it together one step at a time.
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The most important part. Kissing.
For them 2, Kissing is like Mario classic, that keiichi being mario would have to scale across stage by stage of killer mushrooms and turtles to finally make it to the final confrontation of beating Browsers and freeing the princess to get that Kiss.
It's THAT HARD. That's why to see a kissing scene between them 2 in the manga was always something that ignites a inferno of warmth and "DAWWWWWWW" in every reader's heart. To kiss before the confession made the romance between them that much weaker or simply that the 2 were already that close to being bunnies in the heat. Both ways doesn't really seem too positive.
Sorry for the spree of words, negative ones at that. I sincerely apologise. But i simply felt the need to unleash the unease i felt after reading your fanfic in the form of my review to it.
Peace.
Now, to be serious. As a big fan of the series and a bigger one for Belldandy & Keiichi, i'll have to say...
It felt empty.
Perhapes i'm not seeing it in the "18+" manner. I can't see "Keiichi" nor "Belldandy" in the fan fiction that you're writing. That "Keiichi" with his courage to express his love for belldandy. The courage that always burns out when he needs it the most yet is able to express his intentions in the most sincere, though not properly expressed ways. That even though he wouldn't get everything that he intend to express out, is able to simply appreciate that little result that his semi-successful actions and just smile it through because he's very happy as he is now. The hero who'd never get the entire package.
It's refreshing to see the way you writing , potraying him finally unleashing a torrent of kept up courage and be manly for once, although being plentiful of that when matters expects him to. However, after see him for so long and to withness him suddenly to become a different man kinda hits me at the wrong way.
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As for Belldandy. She is forever pure, that tiny candle light that you'll admire in a dark room , that such a tiny flame brings so much illumination to the darkness.
"Revealing maid outfit" and "Belldandy" hits me very wrongly, even more so of the motive of doing so, it's just not "belldandy-ish". Unless she drunk in cola, it's hard to imagine her do such actions that'll make her seem cheap, knowningly or unknowingly.
I noticed that you've potrayed Belldandy to be rather agreesive as well where she's the forever patient. As shown in the manga where Urd drugged her to bring her inner aggressive side out that she question Keiichi as to why he'd not lay a single finger on her.
As the equation of how Belldandy still stay patient is that whenever she feel uneasy about their relationship, Keiichi will be there to cement the cracks that she stands as a unreplacable pillar in his heart. that she with the knowledge of his love continues to stay honest and patient while waiting Keiichi to progress it together one step at a time.
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The most important part. Kissing.
For them 2, Kissing is like Mario classic, that keiichi being mario would have to scale across stage by stage of killer mushrooms and turtles to finally make it to the final confrontation of beating Browsers and freeing the princess to get that Kiss.
It's THAT HARD. That's why to see a kissing scene between them 2 in the manga was always something that ignites a inferno of warmth and "DAWWWWWWW" in every reader's heart. To kiss before the confession made the romance between them that much weaker or simply that the 2 were already that close to being bunnies in the heat. Both ways doesn't really seem too positive.
Sorry for the spree of words, negative ones at that. I sincerely apologise. But i simply felt the need to unleash the unease i felt after reading your fanfic in the form of my review to it.
Peace.
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Thanks for your input.
I know everyone 'expects' Belldandy to act a certain way.
The way I wrote her is for a reason.
Remember when Urd always told Keiichi that "Belldandy is waiting for HIM to make the moves on HER"?
Well, now you see why I wrote her the way I did.
Chapter 2 is up now: Ah! My Goddess: Keiichi's Uneasiness
I know everyone 'expects' Belldandy to act a certain way.
The way I wrote her is for a reason.
Remember when Urd always told Keiichi that "Belldandy is waiting for HIM to make the moves on HER"?
Well, now you see why I wrote her the way I did.
Chapter 2 is up now: Ah! My Goddess: Keiichi's Uneasiness