Amy's Black Book
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This is going to be the second time Ive ever written a story. Its going to be diary styled and probably will have 10 chapters. Whenever I feel bored to do it anyway.
And before 'unwanted' people come here, THIS IS YANDERE
Plot
Plot probably sucks, but whatever.
Chapter 1
And before 'unwanted' people come here, THIS IS YANDERE
Plot
Spoiler:
Plot probably sucks, but whatever.
Chapter 1
Spoiler:
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Honestly, the plot is way too short, maybe write something about who Amy is and what she looks like etc and do the same with Fi. The chapter was okay for a diary-entry-story but the fontsize was unnecesary, if you want to grab attention towards a text you can always bold it.
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Herodotus wrote...
Honestly, the plot is way too short, maybe write something about who Amy is and what she looks like etc and do the same with Fi. The chapter was okay for a diary-entry-story but the fontsize was unnecesary, if you want to grab attention towards a text you can always bold it.If its a diary entry, especially if written by someone with a mental condition, why wouldnt they begin to write even bigger and harsher?
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I quite like the idea but I think that the text should go more like "Who is that girl, who is that girl? Who is she to him? I am the only one that gets to blablablayadayadayada"
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"When lunch was over, I managed to snag it from the trash can."
Okay O_O
Interesting, though. I can't wait to read the next entries.
Okay O_O
Interesting, though. I can't wait to read the next entries.
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SolidShark wrote...
First point perspective makes me feel like reading a copypasta. An idea that hit me that would fit yanderes perfectly is somewhat like this:https://www.fakku.net/forums/writing-and-fanfiction/halloween-2013-a-modern-pilgrim-108548#03937131
Note that Xenon mixed comfortably the third and first perspectives depending on the need.
In example, rather than "I sat down two tables away.", "she sat down two tables away from him, staring dreamingly".
Meanwhile, her internal dialogues she can either scream them in the open, write them down, or simply stop midway the story, hit enter, turn on them italics, and write down her mind down before continuing the story.
The tissue scene was a detail I liked. That was cute, disgusting, but cute.
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But since you're writing a diary and not a story, my advice is useless.
Damn, I wasted my time. Would she he appreciate the thought at least? Would he? WOULD HE REALLY!?
>Decides to write useless advice
>Is a faggot
>Thinks I would appreciate it
Pls.
FUCK OFF.
Thank you for your shitty useless comment.
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SolidShark wrote...
Kiraneko wrote...
>Decides to write useless advice>Is a faggot
>Thinks I would appreciate it
Pls.
FUCK OFF.
Thank you for your shitty useless comment.
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[2/12]W-w-what is this.... is this bitch going to my school now?? How did she get a transfer so fast.... I guess ill pay it no mind. IT MAKES IT EASIER TO GET RID OF HER.. *sigh* I wish lunch would come faster, just so I can see him again.. But if I see her next to him, im gonna lose it... I CANT TAKE SEEING HER EVERYDAY.. she has to be gone.. for touching him like that.. for being close to him.. WHY AM I NOT CLOSE TO HIM LIKE THAT.. no one but me should be close to him.. NO ONE..
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leonard267
FAKKU Non-Writer
Alas, Shark is being a bit unfair. I think what you are doing is something similar to my Cesspit where one writes anything he or she wants. I use the Cesspit to write drafts of things I wish to post on this forum.