Yeah, I kind of felt that way for this contest as well.
It needs to be shorter and quickly grasp reader's attention.
I'll try to edit it again.
This was actually going to become clear in Chapter 2, but I might end up editing it to Chapter 1
Sophie is a guy! That's why everyone remembered him so well. He's the only boy in class with an English female name. Reason: his dad made a vow to name his first born the woman who saved his life.
