Datenshi

First of all Merry Christmas / Happy Holidays.
This was my first entry to the Writing Contest of 2011, but I couldn't add anything that mentioned Fakku into the story, so I removed this and I then created a completely new story. This felt better since I could expand a little bit more on the story without worrying about the word count limit. So now that I have added everything that I wanted to add, here it is once again for your reading entertainment.
This story contains Oppai, Tentacles, and Yuri.
Enjoy.

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My name is Daichi, I was born on December 25th 1991, and I live in Biei, Japan. It's a beautiful place, and I get to see a lot of it since I am a tour guide, but the Winter months can be very cold, and the tours slow down a bit. Other then that its a great place to live, especially when things like this happen...

It was a cold Christmas Eve night and I had just got off of work. I was walking home, sipping on my tea to try to keep myself warm. In the distance I saw a figure lying in the snow, at first I thought that it was just an animal, but the closer I got the more it resembled a person. It was! I ran over to see if they were alright, and to my astonishment it was a female, she seemed to be about my age and she was beautiful, she had long blonde hair, her chest was well rounded, and her lips glistened, but she was unconscious and looked hurt. I checked to see if there was anyone around to help, but there was nobody in sight, I thought on my feet and picked her up and rushed her to my house right down the street. Changing her out of her wet clothes to warm her up proved difficult since I tried not to look, as soon as she was changed into warmer clothes I put her into my bed to make sure she was kept warm. I decided to stay and watch over her for a bit, but I ended up falling asleep.

As I woke up I noticed that a couple of buttons on her shirt had come undone, I could just about see her nipple. I couldn't help myself but look. Suddenly she started to wake up, she quickly noticed me and was frightened, quickly covering herself and jumping back. "Who are you? Where am I?" she asked. "My name is Daichi I found you collapsed in the snow last night so I brought you to my house to keep you safe." She still seemed a little frightened, but I was glad to see that she had woken up. She started to glare at me, as though she thought I was lying. "M-My name is Ki-Kiyoko." She responded. "Thank you for saving me, you seem like a friendly person. I am in your debt" She said. "Don't worry about it. I was just doing the right thing" I replied. "No. It is customary for me to repay the person who has protected me." She said. "Haha, alright. So Kiyoko what happened to you last night? Why were you collapsed in the snow?" I asked. She looked disappointed in me asking her this but she then replied, "I suppose since you are the one who rescued me I can tell you my story." "To be honest I am a Tenshi an-". "Wait you're a Tenshi?!" I quickly interrupted, as I quickly stood up in shock. "Yes I am. Now may I continue my story?" She asked. "Yes, sorry." I replied, still thinking to myself, wow a Tenshi. Is this real? Am I dreaming? She continued, "As I was saying, I am a Tenshi and one day I was attacked by an Akuma, I was hurt so badly that I fell unconscious and fell down here, and then that is when you found me. Unfortunately I'm sure that they know I am not dead and they are looking for me right now." She had started to cry, and without thinking I had gotten close and started to hold her closely, she tensed up, but embraced it and held me back. "It'll be ok, I will make sure that nobody hurts you ever again." I said gently. "Thank you, you are truly a very kind person" she said as tears were running down her face. I wiped a tear off of her cheek, as I was doing so she looked up at me, and we gazed into each others eye's. We began to get closer to each other as though we were about to kiss, just as our lip's were about to touch these tentacles came crashing through the window and suddenly grabbed Kiyoko and started to pull her away from me. I jumped to rescue her, grabbing her hands, trying to pull her back from their grasp, but I couldn't hold on, she was pulled out of the window and out of my reach. "Kiyoko!" I shouted. I started to cry, as I had just lost the one I am falling for. Suddenly I was knocked unconscious by someone, or something behind me.

I slowly woke up in a mysterious place, my hands bound behind my back, and in front of me there was a woman holding Kiyoko with the tentacle things that took her from my house, her clothes had been torn off, and the tentacles were wrapped around her. I couldn't help but show my excitement, but I could tell she was embarrassed so I tried to put my head down. "Who are you?!" I shouted. "Who am I you ask? I am an Akuma, my name is Kasumi. I'm sure that Kiyoko has told you about me, and what I did to her. I didn't think that she would be able to live through that honestly, and I'm guessing it is because of something you did." She responded. "Please just don't hurt her." I shouted, as tears started to run down my cheeks. "Haha, I'm not going to hurt her, at least not until I've had my fun with her." Kasumi said. She snapped her fingers and suddenly the tentacles bound her legs and her arms, she moved closer to Kiyoko and grabbed her face, and turned it towards her own. "Now be a good boy and sit and watch as I have fun with the one you love." She spoke. As soon as she said that I tried to scream "No, stop!" but some kind of magic shut my mouth and I could no longer speak. I couldn't help but watch as Kasumi started to kiss Kiyoko, putting her tongue deep in her throat. Her hand's groping Kiyoko's breast's. I could see Kiyoko crying as she was helpless and I couldn't help but cry and think to myself, I have failed, I couldn't protect her! Suddenly it seemed as though time had stopped, and I could see someone else near Kiyoko. At first I thought it had to be another Akuma, but she attacked Kasumi with some sort of magic and forced her back down into the depths. As soon as she was gone all the magic she had set up stopped, I was free and could talk, and more importantly Kiyoko was alright.

I rushed over to her side and held her tight, tears rolling down both of our face's. "I don't know who you are, but thank you for helping Kiyoko." I said to the mysterious person. "I am a Jinsei No Tenshi, and I was only protecting one of my own." She responded. She then turned to Kiyoko and said, "Come now Kiyoko we must return, and get you back to your post." "But I don't want to go, I want to stay here with Daichi." Kiyoko responded. " "Why can't she stay here with me? You must notice that we have feelings for each other!" I quickly asked. "I'm sorry it is against our rules to allow such a love to accrue. I notice that you care deeply for her and her the same, but you will just have to try to move on, I am deeply sorry." The Jinsei No Tenshi said as she grabbed a hold of Kiyoko's hand and suddenly disappeared. I couldn't help but cry again, now that she was gone and I had no way of getting her back. I curled up into a ball and started to ball my eyes out as if I hadn't cried in ages. Suddenly there was a flash of bright light, just like when the Jinsei No Tenshi appeared, I looked up and noticed there was another mysterious person standing in front of me. I couldn't help myself but attack her, thinking she was the Tenshi that took Kiyoko away from me. She quickly grabbed my arm and threw me to the ground, she got close to me and said "I am not here to harm you, I am here to help. Ever since Kiyoko fell down here I've been watching the two of you and how you have acted towards each other. My name is Chamuel and I am an Ai No Tenshi." Without realizing that she said she was a Tenshi, I asked "How can you help me? She was taken away from me, and I don't even know where." I put my head between my legs and started to cry more. "Haha, weren't you listening? I said I'm a Tenshi. Obviously I would know where they went too." Chamuel said. I tried to take a few deep breaths to regain my composer, and with a shaky voice I got on my hands and knees and said "Please, please help me get Kiyoko back!" Chamuel chuckled, "Get up, you don't have to beg me to help you for I am an Ai No Tenshi, and I will help anyone in the name of love. Now take a hold of my hand" Chamuel said. I hesitantly grabbed his hand, and just like Kiyoko we disappeared in the blink of an eye.

When I could open my eyes I noticed a place that looked like no other. It was beautiful, it looked just like a huge cosplay cafe, each maid had a different hair color, the one that greeted me had blue. "This is the place where time stops. Everybody that comes through here sees something different, but they all see something that they have feelings for." Chamuel said as he stood behind me. "It's amazing" I said in awe. "Unfortunately I cannot help you past this point. You must continue your journey by yourself to find what you truly desire. Please be careful though, certain things up here are not what they seem. This is the warning I heed you as I take my leave. Good luck." Chamuel said as he disappeared into air. I didn't want Chamuel to leave, his help would've been great to have here since I don't know where anything is or how to do anything up here I thought to myself. Suddenly everything started to disappear just like Chamuel and Kiyoko, and I could no longer see the Cosplay Cafe or anything else around me. I was then surrounded by a number of mysterious Tenshis that were all growing some kind of orange aura. They were wearing black robes with hoods so I couldn't see their faces, and they all seemed to have some kind of weapon with them, the weapon of choice looked like it was swords/knives. They were all talking with each other in some kind of language that I couldn't understand, but then they all suddenly became silent. They all stepped aside and one of them held my arms behind my back pushing me to my knees. The Tenshi that seemed to be in charge walked up to me and removed his hood, he had light blue eyes and short white hair, I was shocked by just how handsome he was. "What is your business here intruder? You are not deceased nor are you a Tenshi." the white haired Tenshi asked. I couldn't tell them about me saving Kiyoko since that would probably just get me in some kind of trouble, but at the same time it didn't seem to be a good idea to lie to these guys as well. "My name is Daichi, I am looking for the Jinsei No Tenshi." I said to them leaving out many details. They all started to look around at each other as if they were talking to one another without using words, I felt like I had said something wrong. "What business do you have with my sister?" The white haired Tenshi asked. My eyes widened as I had just said something that I couldn't dig myself out of without telling them all the details. The Tenshi holding my hands started to bind them together with some kind of magic, and another Tenshi bound my mouth shut so I couldn't speak. "He's coming with us, if he wants to see my sister so much we will let her deal with him herself." My eyes started to widen more, and I tried to speak, but nothing was able to come out, I was then knocked unconscious.

As I started to wake up I was being held by the white haired Tenshi, and we were flying high up in the air, the rest of them were flying behind us. "We are almost there, then we can find out whats really going on here." He said to me. As soon as he said that I could start to see huge buildings coming into sight. "I'm guessing you can see all the buildings now, you see that tall one there?" as he pointed to the tallest building in the center of the city. "Thats where we are going, to the top floor, nobody has ever come out of there once they go in." the Tenshi said as he started to laugh. Finally we started to descend to the ground, right in front of the building he was pointing to before. He stood in front of the door and put his hand on some kind of scanner and the doors quickly opened. As we walked in I noticed a Tenshi sitting behind a desk, just like a receptionist, she had a name-tag on her it read Chouko. She then said "Welcome to th- Wait what are you doing here Hotaru!?" "I've found an intruder in Section 1. He says he is looking for the Jinsei No Tenshi, so I've decided to bring him here and see what we can find out." Hotaru responded. "Would you like me to call her down here?" Chouko asked. "No. We are going up to meet her." Hotaru replied. "B-but sir, you know that you aren't allowed on the top floor." Chouko said. "You underestimate my authority! I am leader of the Daitenshis, the defensive force of this place! We go where we want, and when we want too!" Hotaru stated. I could then see that this guy defiantly has some anger issues. We started to head to an elevator, but just when we got there the door opened, and I recognized her face immediately it was Kiyoko! I could tell that she had recognized me as well, since she started to tear up a little bit and tried to avoid eye contact with me. She started to take deep breaths and then started to speak, "What are you doing Hotaru?" "I've found this intruder saying he's looking for my sister so I'm going to have this dealt with!" Hotaru replied. We started to walk past Kiyoko into the elevator, I could see she was hurting inside unfortunately there was nothing I could do or say to make her feel better at this point. As the doors were just about to close a hand came in and stopped the doors. "I'll come with you, I forgot something upstairs anyway." Kiyoko said. "Do as you wish." Hotaru said as he sighed. As we were riding up in the elevator I could feel Kiyoko's hand gently touching mine, I was happy to see that she missed me. She started to take a few deep breaths and I was wondering what was going on, she suddenly stole Hotaru's sword and quickly knocked him out and stopping the elevator. She casted some kind of reverse magic and unbound my hands and my mouth. She quickly held me, and I did the same. "Kiyoko I missed you so much. I'm sorry for not being able to protect you." I said. "I missed you too Daichi, but you shouldn't of come here, they will surely kill you." Kiyoko said. "Then it looks like we will have to escape from here then huh?" I said as I tried to keep a smile on my face. "Yes we will, together." Kiyoko said trying to keep a smile on her face as well.

We decided to go to a better place and try to figure out what we were going to do next, so we went to a floor below the top. As we were getting out of the elevator Kiyoko bound Hotaru's hands, mouth, legs, so he wouldn't be able to follow us, and we then made sure to stop it, just so we would have more time to potentially escape. "It won't take long for them to find out that something is going wrong especially with the Daitenshis here so we've got to move quickly." Kiyoko said as she held my hand tightly. From behind us we heard a voice say "Hmm so we meet again, I thought I told you this isn't allowed? You even followed her here, you must be stupid. Since you are so persistent we will have to discipline you." As we turned around we saw that it was the Jinsei No Tenshi, she had drawn her sword, and we were defiantly in trouble. She started to walk towards us, getting closer and closer, as she dragged her sword thru the ground. "I'm sorry Kiyoko but it seems that you have sided with this human, you even attacked my brother, its true that he is an idiot, but he is one of your own, you are now a traitor so I will not allow you two to escape this place with your lives." The Jinsei No Tenshi declared. She quickly lunged towards Kiyoko prepared to stab her, without thinking I jumped in front of Kiyoko as I could stop the sword. Suddenly everything went white and I thought to myself that I must've done it, I must've saved Kiyoko. A violent cough and a scream from behind me brought me back, as I looked down there was a blade thru my stomach. All I could do was cry, it wasn't even because of the pain and the thought that I was going to die here, it was because I had completely failed to keep Kiyoko from getting hurt. I've been hurting her this whole time, making her worry about me, making her cry. "I'm sorry Kiyoko, I promised to keep you out of harms way, instead I've been hurting you this whole time." I said as I continued to cough up blood. The Jinsei No Tenshi then started to remove the sword from my stomach, "You truly are stupid aren't you? Why would you sacrifice your own life for one of us?" she said. "B-b-because *cough* I l-l-l-love her *cough*, ever since the say we met I felt something between the two of us." I said as I was in agonizing pain, bleeding so much that I could barely keep myself up. I then felt someone hold me from behind, I slowly turned my head and it was Kiyoko, she was crying so hard now. "Oh Daichi, I love you too. I was so happy when I saw you chased after me once I was taken away from you. Please! Please don't die on me! I want to be with you!" Kiyoko said. The only thing holding me up now was Kiyoko's warm embrace. "I'm sorry to break up this touching time, but I must do what is right, I am truly sorry." The Jinsei No Tenshi said. She quickly lunged towards us again prepared to stab Kiyoko, I had lost way to much blood to be able to move and protect Kiyoko again, I wanted to shout "No! Stop!" but I could only cough up blood when I tried to talk. I tried to muster up any power I had left and stood my body up showing that I would protect Kiyoko no matter what, I closed my eyes tight and hoped it would be all right.

As I opened my eyes I saw the back of someone I've seen before, it was Chamuel! "Daichi I'm sorry you have gotten hurt by this Tenshi, I am here to help you now." Chamuel said. Up until now I had tried so hard to keep myself awake just so I could protect Kiyoko, but now my eyelids felt like they weighed a ton. I started to smile and couldn't help but start to cry tears of happiness, and relief, I could no longer keep my eyes open and the last thing I saw before I went unconscious was Chamuel lunging at the Jinsei No Tenshi. As I started to open my eyes again I noticed I was in a warm bed in a completely white room, at first I thought I had died but then the door started to open slowly. It was Kiyoko and Chamuel. As soon as Kiyoko saw me she noticed that I had woken up and ran over to me and quickly hugged me "Oh Daichi! I was so worried, I'm glad so glad your alright." Kiyoko said. "Chamuel, what happened after I fainted?" I asked while I was holding Kiyoko. "I stopped her. I take no pride in what I did, but I did end up bringing you here and saving your life, all I had to do was transfer a little bit of magic into your body, it was fairly simple. Unfortunately we are now all traitors now, Kiyoko loves a human, and attacked one of her own. I helped two traitors and attacked one of my own as well. As for you Daichi you haven't actually done anything wrong. You fell in love with an angel, which is quite easy, we are beautiful creatures after all. You protected Kiyoko with your own body, putting yourself in harms way for somebody you love. Over everything you've done since you've met Kiyoko you haven't done anything wrong as far as I can see." Chamuel said. "So you could actually sav-" "Stop, after all I have done I would never abandon you guys for my own sake, I love you." I said as I interrupted Chamuel. "Thank you Daichi, you are truly a very kind human. I suppose now we should bring you home." Chamuel said with a smile on his face. "Grab my hand and we can set off." Chamuel said. I grabbed Chamuel's hand, still holding Kiyoko in my arms I kissed her gently on the lips right before we left.

We appeared right in front of my house, and Chamuel started to say "Nobody should be after you anymore, I have explained everything to a certain somebody, and he had approved of it all. I will start to travel the world of the living, I never actually had a life, so I'd love to be able to see everything I have missed." "That sounds amazing Chamuel, I hope we will see each other again one day." I said to Chamuel as I walked over to him and gave him a hug "thank you for everything you've done for me, I mean us." I continued as I put my arm over Kiyoko's shoulder. Chamuel started to smile, and then said "goodbye you two, please love each other with everything you've got." He then disappeared. I kissed Kiyoko on the cheek and said "lets go in." I had my arm over her shoulder and she had he arm around my waist, our heads resting on each other's. We got inside and took a seat on the couch, Kiyoko leaned over and started to whisper in my ear "let's make love. I want to be even closer to you then I am now." I turned to look at her and we quickly kissed passionately. We started to remove each others clothes. I removed her shirt kissing he neck down to her waist, and starting to unbutton her pants as I come back up to kiss her lips. She pushed me down getting on top of me removing my pants and starting to play with my now hard penis. "Easy Kiyoko if you do that I'll cum." I moaned gently. She climbed on top of my lap right in front of my hard cock, "Daichi, it's my first time, please be gentle with me." she said as cutely as she possibly could. "Kiyoko, of course." I said as I kissed her on the lips and picking up her hips and hovering her over my cock. "Are you ready Kiyoko?" I asked. All she did was shake her head, I started to slowly lower her down onto my cock. The tip started to enter her tight pussy, I started to go in further and further I could tell she was in pain, but she was trying to hide it, so I would slow down a bit until seemed comfortable, finally my cock was completely inside of Kiyoko's tight wet pussy a little bit of blood dripping out. "I'm going to start moving now Kiyoko." I said. "I love you Daichi" She said. All I did was smile, I knew this love was real, I flipped her over onto her back and started to move my hips going in and out of her pussy. She started to moan a little and I started to move faster and faster, making her moan, she then became dominant and grabbed my head and brought it down to her's kissing me ravenously, my cock still going in and out of her. I could feel her tightening up a lot every time I made her cum. I started to suck on her neck still pounding her nice pussy. "Daichi! It feels so good!" Kiyoko screamed. It became to much for me to handle feeling her tightening up so much, I could hear just how wet she had become. "Kiyoko I'm about to cum." I said to her as I was panting. "Cum inside of me! I want to have your baby!" She screamed. I started to to grab her hips pounding her hard, Kissing he passionately. My cock started to throb "Kiyoko I'm cumming!" I screamed. As I came Kiyoko moaned loudly, I started to slow down and eventually stopped. I fell besides her, looking at her, gazing into her eyes just like before we got closer and closer each other just as though we were about to kiss. Without being interrupted by anything like Tenshis, or Akumas, or even tentacles, we were free to kiss passionately making up for lost time. "I love you Kiyoko" I said. "I love you too Daichi" she replied. We started to giggle and we smiled as we started to fall asleep next to each other. "Merry Christmas Kiyoko." "Merry Christmas Daichi."

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I'd love to hear your opinions. I was actually thinking of taking out the sex scene but then I was like eh what the hell, so I just decided to make a simple one. I love writing and I've been thinking of trying to make it into some sort of career so maybe if you guys/girls like this I'll try to make a novel perhaps.
A few translations for anyone who doesn't know.

Tenshi - Angel
Datenshi - Fallen Angel
Akuma - Devil
Jinsei No Tenshi - Angel Of Life
Ai No Tenshi - Angel of Love
Daitenshi - Archangels

Very intriguing. I'm glad to see you post the fuller version. I'd love to critique this now, but I will wait for after the contest deadline to do so because it may give you an idea as to how you or others could change their stories and I simply can't give out that information as of yet. Happy to see this, however.

@ Xenon. Alright ^_^ I'm glad to see that you liked having it back ^_^. I can't wait for your critique =D I'm a little bad with endings but I tried lol. Thank you. xD

Hmm, Well it took me a while to get back to this, sorry. Well, it's better than the original(i'd imagine because you changed multiple things). Here is a little something that bothered me...The words are all in bunched up text boxes, it's not wrong...of course. But i personally think it's a little messy. I had no problems reading it, i'm used to it. But, well it's just a little something.

For some reason, many stories i find here are Yuri...Heh. A lot of people tell me big words make a bigger impact, but i personally prefer simple language. All those complex words(i understand them easily, but...) really, to me is annoying =/. Oh wait, am i rambling now? Sorry man(or are you a girl? ... no offense)

Haha, on a side note, i really like your profile picture, Hakuchi. >X< So cute!

Keep it up Hachi(=p), story-writing is never perfect, there is always room to improve...No one is perfect either. Thanks for a nice read~

One word: Yummy.

I always love to get critiqued =) Because it helps me fix what I have done incorrectly. I'm glad that it was better then the original, I would've been sad if I had made it worse =p. I'm sorry if there were any complex words. I'm currently thinking of another story to write, but there are lots of plots in my head along with genres and characters and etc. etc. As long as it's a nice read and cute then it makes me happy ^_^, but only if it pleases the readers does it make me very happy <3. I also think that a lot of stories are Yuri because many people like that genre, instead of the opposing Yaoi, personally I like Yaoi but I felt that if I added that it might be frowned upon, somehow haha. Lets just call my gender Hideyoshi ^_^ (Baka to Test reference incase anyone didn't know xD) Thank you ^_^ I found it somewhere but now I forget where to find it again =( luckily I saved it though ^_^. Anyway now I'm rambling haha. Thank you for being honest about my story ^_^ I will try to improve on the next one and I hope that you give it a read and critique that one as well. ^_^ Thank you again ^_^

Haha. Thank you I'm glad that you liked it ^_^. Stay tuned for my next story. <3

I think you had 5 ^^ smileys and 1 ) smiley...Haha i'm spouting nonsense.

That you like Yaoi, i may be presumptuous but i'd say you are a girl. Well, i don't hate, people are entitled to like what they like. I just DONT read stuff i dont like. Hideyoshi just reminds me of Toyotomi from the samurai or sumth era.

Nono, no words were too hard for me to understand. I'm just ranting back there haha.

Hmm, i generally review stories to help others improve, but it's rare that i find people who actually take my criticism seriously and not cry or hate over it.

No problem, if you post any new stories feel free to pm me, i'll drop by and give it a read(supposing im free of course)

Well, Good luck with your future works and good job once again with this!

Yea I notice that I use smileys a ton when I type haha. I try not too but it feels a little weird =p. Besides I think they are cute ^_^. Really? O_o I think any criticism is good criticism, I can understand if the person is being rude and saying that it sucked but what you did is perfect =) and I thank you for that.

I'm not sure when my next story wil be out but I think I came up with an okay idea last night, but I'm not sure how to make it cute =p. How come Hideyoshi reminds you of Toyotomi from the samurai or sumth era? Thank you again ^_^. <-- See lots of faces again >< haha.

I hate to say it, but it kinda distracts me from what you're trying to say haha.
What i mean by what i said was that they generally say i hate you or pls dont ever review me again because they cant take any criticism...Bleh, buncha kids, those lads.

Well, Hideyoshi Toyotomi is a famous general in the Sengoku period, i think.

I'm sorry i don't mean to distract you or anybody, but I am trying to cut back on how much I use them. Well I defiantly don't hate you for it, I like you more for being able to be honest with me instead of hiding your feeling to protect mine. Ah I see, you learn something new everyday. Thank you again <3

See I got thru that without a smiley haha.