After helping a friend with one of their writings I decided to try my hand at it. I showed it to them and they said they liked it. So I want to get other users opinions. Should I try writing more or do i need too much work to worry about writing a story?
Input is welcomed. thanks again ^_^
First Attempt:
I slowly move forward towards Yuu,
I see his look of wonder and I blush, hoping he feels the same.
I slowly reach out to caress his soft face, the curves are smooth.
His eyes glisten as I get closer to him, I see a slight tinge of red on his cheeks as my breath rolls across his face.
He whispers my name as I slowly close the distance, hoping I wont be rejected.
As I feel our lips connect, I slowly feel him kiss me back.
The bliss I feel of his acceptance warming my body.
I wrap my arms around his neck and tilt my head hoping to keep our kiss.
His broad arms wrap around my small frame and hold me close.
We stop for a second to catch our breath. He looks deep into my eyes.
I can see my blushing figure in the reflection of his eyes.
He gently grabs my chin as he whispers my name again.
Slowly he brings my face to his. My burning desires wanting to speed up his movements.
But wanting the moment to last I stay patient till our lips connect again in a motion so smooth, it feels like it was pre-destined.
Our kiss gets more intimate and I feel his arms running up and down my back.
Finally I feel him pick me up in his strong arms, his blushing face showing he doesn't want this moment to end either.
Slowly he lays me on the bed, his gaze all over my body, i blush and look away, feeling nervous.
He slowly leans over me and turns my face towards him. I see him shaking slightly.
I slowly lean up and kiss him to reassure him of my feelings. His shaking subsides as I kiss him.
His soft hands slowly start to roam my chest. As he slowly undoes the buttons on my blouse I just stare into his passionate eyes.
Finally when the last button was undone. He pulls the cloth aside to reveal my snow white chest.
As I blush he gets closer and licking a trail from my navel to my lips he whispers two wonderful words. "You're beautiful"
Slowly he starts to rub my chest as he continues to kiss me.
I start to feel the warmth of his strong hands as they massage my chest.
He then starts to favor my right breast, gently he starts licking the tip as it begins to harden.
I blush more feeling such warm sensations on me, I then continue to take off the rest of my shirt.
I hold his head close as he starts to gently suck on it, the sensation is making me feel wonderful.
Slowly I push him down on the bed. I softly pull my hands down his chest to his pants as I start to undo them.
As I pull them down I see how erect he is through his boxers. Looking up at him I see he is nervous as to what I will do also.
I finish pulling his Boxers down to see his full member in front of me.
without looking at Yuu's face I slowly breath on his member seeing it quiver in front of me.
Without seeing his face I hear his moan. Slowly I lick the tip hoping for a positive reaction.
He puts his hands on my face and finally I look up, my face feeling so hot.
He whispers "I love you." Pure joy rushes through my body. With new determination I grab his shaft gently with my hands.
Then I take the tip into my mouth. It feels hot and stiff. Slowly I start to suck moving my mouth up and down using my tongue to stroke the tip.
I start to massage the base with my hands and continue to gently suck and lick the rest.
After a bit I notice he is thrusting his hips up to meet me. I realize he may be getting close and I don't want it to end like this.
I slow down and pull my mouth away. He opens his eyes that were closed in ecstasy, and looks at me.
He slowly leans up as I lay back. He then pushes my skirt up viewing my panties underneath.
His face gets closer as his strong arms hold my legs apart. His warm breath making me blush. Slowly his tongue traces the curves of my most personal part
I gasp as I feel the pleasure between my legs. He gently pulls my Panties off with a genuine smile on his face. showing the love I care for so much.
His tongue Slowly caresses me finding my most sensitive spot within seconds. Gently he sucks, his hands rubbing my legs.
I Start to moan never feeling such a pleasure before. Finally I can take it no longer. I grab his face and pull it to mine.
"I want you." I whisper in his ear. He looks deep into my eyes before slowly nodding his understanding.
I lay back my legs spread apart fully revealing my most intimate parts to him. I can see the sweat on his body and the way the light reflects off his eyes make me feel like everything will be alright.
He gently lays his burning member over me, placing the tip to my entrance. One more time he looks to me for confirmation. I nod and whisper his name.
I then feel him enter me slowly it goes in smooth. finally meeting a little Resistance which he gets past with a little bit more pressure.
I cry out feeling the sudden pain, but it slowly subsides and is replaced with pleasure.
I feel his warm heavy body over mine. He slowly starts to move his body over mine. I feel the pleasure rising and when I look into my lover's face I can tell he feels the same.
He starts to kiss me as he rocks into me faster, keeping a steady rhythm. I slowly start to thrust my own hips to meet his, feeling his shaft reaching my deepest parts. The ecstasy I am feeling overwhelms all else.
We moan each others name as we increase our movements, the intense love we feel mixing with the joy of our actions giving me a feeling of euphoria I have never felt before in my life.
Finally he Whispers to me that he cant hold it much longer, I understand his feelings I am on the verge also. Finally I feel my climax, its a strong wave of warmth that rushes through my body.
I hear him say he is coming also, I shout out for fear of him coming inside me. But, all was okay, he pulled out just at the last moment as I feel his warm semen coating my chest.
We lay there gasping for air. The warmth is still coursing through my body almost makes me feel like I'm on fire. Though its a good feeling,
one I never want to end. I look at my lover who is just staring at me with love in his eyes. I slowly curl up on his lap, his warm arms surrounding me.
The warm feelings of the love we made still in my body as I slip into a peaceful dream.
anyways thanks again ^_^
Edit: I Believe I fixed most Typos hope it's better now ^_^