K-ON!!! - mio akiyama no.1/3

THROUGH THE DARK STREETS I CAME I LOST MYSELF IN THIS GLOOMY WAY.
I FEAR THIS ROAD WILL BE MY END OF MY DAY.
THE DANGERS ABOUT THIS STREETS WITH LESS LIGHTS AND NO ONE IN SIGHT.
WITH DARKNESS FUELED ME WITH FEAR.
I CALL UPON MY FRIEND RITSU BUT STRANGE MY PHONE'S BATTERY IS NO MORE.
HOW OD MY PHONE IS FULLY CHARGE THEN MY FEAR FUELS ME MORE.

NOW I CANT TURN BACK NO MORE
AS I SIT ON THIS CHAIR ALONE......

what will be happened to mio?
whos gonna save her and guide her
to the true way. find out in the next
chapter of K-ON!!!

This started out good, with a single plot. But then it turned into fail. Not only did you leave us with a bad cliffhanger, but almost the whole thing was just hilarious.

I cannot comprehend if this was poetry or something you just wisped up in a matter of minutes, but the way you presented it was just plain fuckin messy.

I won't point out the problems, for I am sure even you could find out what is wrong with it. But if you do want me to point them out, I would be glad to do so.

But seeing as this is just a part of a trilogy, i'm giving this another shot and not give out a score this early.

What is this even -_-.

TT_TT

i read it without even seeing who made it.. then after I finished it.. i was like 'WUT?' then i saw the username.. i was like 'cool'