Katawa Shoujo Fanfic

I've been writing a route for Miki and was looking for feedback.I've written the first encounter part of the story so. I have some who said their willing to fix the grammar of the piece, but I want to make sure that it's worth continuing first.

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Thank you for checking it out.

I liked it! Miki's personality is exactly what I expected it to be from the few scenes I encountered during the normal game and Hisao's reaction to Miki's comments is priceless. You did have grammar mistakes but I wouldn't worry about those until the whole draft is done. I'm wondering what kind of drama you're planning on inserting for Miki's route. Will it include the story of how she lost her hand? I really did enjoy your writing and I'm looking forward to reading more of it.