Kodomo no Jikan: Aki's Diary
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For those who like Kodomo no Jikan but don't keep up with the manga, we recently (Well, not SO recently,) got to see Rin's father, his backstory, etc.
I, for one, was disappointed. I expected her father to look JUST LIKE Aoki-sensei, and prove that old saying, "Like mother, like daughter." or something of that nature.
So .. I decided to write a little tale of my own about the past life of Rin's mother, Kokonoe Aki. I have the first chapter over halfway done, I just want to know if it's a good idea or not. If so, I'll find it and quickly finish it and toss it here.
EDIT: I'll tell you the plot incase that would sway your decision:
What was Rin's mother like as a child? Did she sexually harass her sensei, just like her daughter does now? Was she just as naughty as Rin?
One night, during a Thunderstorm, Rin happens upon her Mother's diary. Those questions are answered soon after.
.. There's more to the plot than that, but that's just a preview.
I, for one, was disappointed. I expected her father to look JUST LIKE Aoki-sensei, and prove that old saying, "Like mother, like daughter." or something of that nature.
So .. I decided to write a little tale of my own about the past life of Rin's mother, Kokonoe Aki. I have the first chapter over halfway done, I just want to know if it's a good idea or not. If so, I'll find it and quickly finish it and toss it here.
EDIT: I'll tell you the plot incase that would sway your decision:
What was Rin's mother like as a child? Did she sexually harass her sensei, just like her daughter does now? Was she just as naughty as Rin?
One night, during a Thunderstorm, Rin happens upon her Mother's diary. Those questions are answered soon after.
.. There's more to the plot than that, but that's just a preview.
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yea sure im willing to read it...
get it done buddy =]
by the way i keep meaning to say that ur avi is fucking awesome XD
get it done buddy =]
by the way i keep meaning to say that ur avi is fucking awesome XD
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I used (...) for scene changes, because I wasn't sure what I should use in this particular story. This chapter's small because I drew a blank after this point, and I'm currently trying to think up good stories for the diary.
SUGGESTIONS ARE WELCOME!
Chaper 1: The Thunderstorm
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"Good Morning, Class."
"Good Morning, Sensei!"
"Shut up, Virgin!"
Class 4-1's morning greeting was complete (Complete with Kuro's loving name for Aoki-Sensei,) so the day was now ready to begin.
"Kagami, Kuro."
"Here …"
"Usa, Mimi."
"Here!"
Aoki paused for a moment before reading the next name. He was tired this morning, and really didn't want to deal with her, but … It was his job.
"Kokonoe, Rin."
"Here, Sensei! Right down here!" A small girl's voice rang out. Aoki paused, feeling something tugging on his pant leg. He looked down in horror, seeing Rin's head looking up at him from right between his knees. She winked at him, licking her lips. "Are you nervous, Sensei?" Aoki's eye twitched as he saw the girl's sly expression.
" … KOKONOE !"
After finally getting Rin to settle down, class had begun. It was a normal day afterwards - Lunch time came and went as usual, no real problems. Even Rin had kept calm for the most part, which was a nice surprise. The children all stood as the day's final bell rang. Aoki stood at the door, giving each student a nod as they left.
"Bye, Sensei!"
"See you tomorrow!"
And just like that, the Classroom was empty. Aoki breathed a sigh of relief as he sat at his desk, grabbing a pen and pulling a stack of worksheets closer. For some strange but nice reason, the kids had been doing a lot better with their work than usual. The final paper hit the stack, and everything was graded - He could finally go home. But something was strange … As if something was missing from his evening grading ritual. But what was it …?
"Hey there, Sensei."
Aoki sighed, scooting back from the desk and looking down, immediately knowing where the girl was hiding.
"Kokonoe, get out of there and go home. It's late." He said, Rin not looking too happy at all. She crawled out from the desk, standing up and forcing a peck on the man's cheek, causing him to blush lightly. He gave her another stern look, pointing to the door. "Kokonoe, go home. Now."
"Fine … I suppose we'll just meet at your apartment, it's been soooo long …" Rin said as she left, winking at him. He had no idea at all what she meant by that, but it didn't matter. She was gone.
"Finally …"
(…)
"Rin-chan, where were you?"
"Yeah, we waited forever! What's so great about that Virgin?!"
Mimi and Kuro had been waiting by the school's door for Rin, and they must've been there quite a few hours as the sun was starting to set. Rin smiled, hugging Kuro as she walked outside, making the small girl's face go completely red.
"Everything's so great about him, Kuro-chan … Everything." She said. Mimi forced a smile, knowing how Kuro must be feeling during this hug, and Kuro couldn't move a muscle.
"I … Um … Okay." Kuro stammered as Rin let go. "L-Let's go home." She said, turning and walking off, Rin and Mimi following. Mimi turned to Rin as the three walked.
"Rin-chan, what do you and Sensei do when you visit him after school?"
Kuro froze. Rin shook her head, laughing.
"Nothing, Mimi-chan ..." She replied.
Kuro sighed in relief at her words.
(….)
The door slammed shut as Aoki turned to make his way down the hallway. He sighed as he made his way out, seeing the sun was completely gone.
"It seems I get no time alone anymore, between work and Kokonoe never going away …" He thought as he made his way to the subway. "I know her pervert of a 'brother' doesn't mind how she is, but I wonder what her mother would think."
(….)
"Rin, I'm home!" The door opened, Reiji stepping inside, holding a soaking wet umbrella as water dripped from his hair. It was storming wildly outside - The rain was hitting the roof hard, almost like it could rip right through it.
"Hi, Reiji!" Rin yelled, running into the room and hugging the boy tight. Reiji smiled, patting her on the head. "I already made you dinner!" Rin said, looking up at him, smiling.
"Oh, is that so?" He said as Rin released her grip. "I thought it was my turn to cook tonight." He smiled, sitting down at the table. Rin carried a plate over, setting it in front of him.
"You always say it's your turn! I wanted to cook once in a while." Rin said, hugging the boy again. Reiji blushed slightly, running his fingers through the girl's long hair.
BOOM! Thunder cracked. Rin screamed and quickly dove into Reiji's arms, knocking him and the chair he was in down to the floor. He held the girl close to him, smiling as she cuddled up close.
"Aki didn't like storms, either …" He said, Rin looking up at him.
"She didn't? Mom was afraid of stuff?" She asked, looking very curious. Reiji laughed lightly, petting the girl.
"Well of course, she was human, after all." He replied. Rin sat up, looking at him.
"Tell me more about Mom, Reiji-" She was cut off by the power going out. The two both stared at each other in the darkness for a few seconds before Reiji found a flashlight.
"I'll tell you anything else you want to know after your bath. You stay here, and I'll get the water ready." He said, handing her the flashlight. "Don't move, I don't want you getting hurt." Rin nodded as he stood to leave.
Of course, Rin didn't listen and stood up to follow him. But on her way, she walked into something and fell hard - The flashlight revealed it was the stand with her Mom's urn and picture. But there was something else on the bottom shelf … A book?
Rin reached down, picking it up and flipping it open, holding the light to the first page.
"Diary of Kokonoe Aki"
She never knew that her Mother kept a Diary, and from the look of the handwriting, it must've been kept way back when she was Rin's age. Would Reiji want her looking through this?
Did she care? Not really.
She put the light to the page once more, starting to read.
"Dear Diary …"
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VERY short, but I just want opinions. What do you guys think? Acceptable start? Should I go on?
SUGGESTIONS ARE WELCOME!
Chaper 1: The Thunderstorm
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"Good Morning, Class."
"Good Morning, Sensei!"
"Shut up, Virgin!"
Class 4-1's morning greeting was complete (Complete with Kuro's loving name for Aoki-Sensei,) so the day was now ready to begin.
"Kagami, Kuro."
"Here …"
"Usa, Mimi."
"Here!"
Aoki paused for a moment before reading the next name. He was tired this morning, and really didn't want to deal with her, but … It was his job.
"Kokonoe, Rin."
"Here, Sensei! Right down here!" A small girl's voice rang out. Aoki paused, feeling something tugging on his pant leg. He looked down in horror, seeing Rin's head looking up at him from right between his knees. She winked at him, licking her lips. "Are you nervous, Sensei?" Aoki's eye twitched as he saw the girl's sly expression.
" … KOKONOE !"
After finally getting Rin to settle down, class had begun. It was a normal day afterwards - Lunch time came and went as usual, no real problems. Even Rin had kept calm for the most part, which was a nice surprise. The children all stood as the day's final bell rang. Aoki stood at the door, giving each student a nod as they left.
"Bye, Sensei!"
"See you tomorrow!"
And just like that, the Classroom was empty. Aoki breathed a sigh of relief as he sat at his desk, grabbing a pen and pulling a stack of worksheets closer. For some strange but nice reason, the kids had been doing a lot better with their work than usual. The final paper hit the stack, and everything was graded - He could finally go home. But something was strange … As if something was missing from his evening grading ritual. But what was it …?
"Hey there, Sensei."
Aoki sighed, scooting back from the desk and looking down, immediately knowing where the girl was hiding.
"Kokonoe, get out of there and go home. It's late." He said, Rin not looking too happy at all. She crawled out from the desk, standing up and forcing a peck on the man's cheek, causing him to blush lightly. He gave her another stern look, pointing to the door. "Kokonoe, go home. Now."
"Fine … I suppose we'll just meet at your apartment, it's been soooo long …" Rin said as she left, winking at him. He had no idea at all what she meant by that, but it didn't matter. She was gone.
"Finally …"
(…)
"Rin-chan, where were you?"
"Yeah, we waited forever! What's so great about that Virgin?!"
Mimi and Kuro had been waiting by the school's door for Rin, and they must've been there quite a few hours as the sun was starting to set. Rin smiled, hugging Kuro as she walked outside, making the small girl's face go completely red.
"Everything's so great about him, Kuro-chan … Everything." She said. Mimi forced a smile, knowing how Kuro must be feeling during this hug, and Kuro couldn't move a muscle.
"I … Um … Okay." Kuro stammered as Rin let go. "L-Let's go home." She said, turning and walking off, Rin and Mimi following. Mimi turned to Rin as the three walked.
"Rin-chan, what do you and Sensei do when you visit him after school?"
Kuro froze. Rin shook her head, laughing.
"Nothing, Mimi-chan ..." She replied.
Kuro sighed in relief at her words.
(….)
The door slammed shut as Aoki turned to make his way down the hallway. He sighed as he made his way out, seeing the sun was completely gone.
"It seems I get no time alone anymore, between work and Kokonoe never going away …" He thought as he made his way to the subway. "I know her pervert of a 'brother' doesn't mind how she is, but I wonder what her mother would think."
(….)
"Rin, I'm home!" The door opened, Reiji stepping inside, holding a soaking wet umbrella as water dripped from his hair. It was storming wildly outside - The rain was hitting the roof hard, almost like it could rip right through it.
"Hi, Reiji!" Rin yelled, running into the room and hugging the boy tight. Reiji smiled, patting her on the head. "I already made you dinner!" Rin said, looking up at him, smiling.
"Oh, is that so?" He said as Rin released her grip. "I thought it was my turn to cook tonight." He smiled, sitting down at the table. Rin carried a plate over, setting it in front of him.
"You always say it's your turn! I wanted to cook once in a while." Rin said, hugging the boy again. Reiji blushed slightly, running his fingers through the girl's long hair.
BOOM! Thunder cracked. Rin screamed and quickly dove into Reiji's arms, knocking him and the chair he was in down to the floor. He held the girl close to him, smiling as she cuddled up close.
"Aki didn't like storms, either …" He said, Rin looking up at him.
"She didn't? Mom was afraid of stuff?" She asked, looking very curious. Reiji laughed lightly, petting the girl.
"Well of course, she was human, after all." He replied. Rin sat up, looking at him.
"Tell me more about Mom, Reiji-" She was cut off by the power going out. The two both stared at each other in the darkness for a few seconds before Reiji found a flashlight.
"I'll tell you anything else you want to know after your bath. You stay here, and I'll get the water ready." He said, handing her the flashlight. "Don't move, I don't want you getting hurt." Rin nodded as he stood to leave.
Of course, Rin didn't listen and stood up to follow him. But on her way, she walked into something and fell hard - The flashlight revealed it was the stand with her Mom's urn and picture. But there was something else on the bottom shelf … A book?
Rin reached down, picking it up and flipping it open, holding the light to the first page.
"Diary of Kokonoe Aki"
She never knew that her Mother kept a Diary, and from the look of the handwriting, it must've been kept way back when she was Rin's age. Would Reiji want her looking through this?
Did she care? Not really.
She put the light to the page once more, starting to read.
"Dear Diary …"
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VERY short, but I just want opinions. What do you guys think? Acceptable start? Should I go on?
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nice start i guess pretty boring to say the least...
hoping that the next chapter will be better...
hoping that the next chapter will be better...
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Okay, the layout of these chapters might confuse you: These are diary entries, but they're also small stories. So .. It's like a story entry.
Does that make sense?
Any talking you see above a ~ Is Aki's writing. Everything inbetween is the story which would be the diary entry. If this doesn't make sense, please tell me. Every chapter will begin and end with a comment from Aki.
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Entry 1: Brand new Sensei!
"This is the diary of me, Kokonoe Aki! Today was such a fun day, diary! My class got a brand new Sensei!"
~
"Did you hear?"
"Yeah, he's a guy, isn't he?"
"I hope he's a nice guy."
A group of children were chatting amongst each other one early morning. They were the children of class 3-1, in a small classroom. They had heard rumor that a new Teacher would be entering their class today, and each child had their own version of what the person would be like.
"I bet he's tall …"
"No, I heard he was like a midget!"
"… What's a midget?"
A loud bell rang throughout the room - Class was about to begin. Each child quickly ran to their desks, watching the classroom door with wide eyes and anticipation.
One girl in particular, however, seemed the most excited. She sat at the North West corner of the room, the first desk in the first row. She had flowing blonde hair which she tied into very long ponytails. Her hazel colored eyes had a look of delight as she imagined what this new adult would look like.
The large door finally slid open, a figure walking inside. It was a somewhat tall man with dark black hair, lime green eyes, and glasses. His attire was the usual for a teacher - A black tie, black dress pants, and a white formal shirt. The class wondered if he was their teacher, or just some kind of secret agent turned normal. The man approached the desk at the front of the room, smiling at the group of children in front of him.
"Good morning, class. My name is Sasahara Takeshi. I will be your Sensei from this day on!" The man smiled. "It's nice to meet you all!" The children all smiled, returning the greeting.
"Nice to meet you!" The children all seemed happy with their new teacher. This man seemed like he would be a nice guy, and that was really all they cared about at this time.
"Okay, now to take roll and learn your names." The man said, grabbing a list of the children names. Everyone seemed to be here, and he was getting to one of the last names on the list.
"Kokonoe, Aki." He said, looking into the group. The blonde girl smiled, standing up quickly and thrusting her hand into the air. Her long ponytails swayed as she moved.
"I'm here, Sasa-Sensei! I'm right over here!" She exclaimed, grinning. The teacher looked disturbed, but forced a smile back.
"Please, Kokonoe. It's Sasahara-sensei." He said, sighing. The girl shook her head, sitting back down.
"Nah, I like Sasa-sensei better! It's cute!" Aki said, winking at him. Sasahara turned from her, pretending she was no longer there.
"S-So, today we'll be learning about …"
(…)
The lunch bell rang, and the children quickly left the room. Sasahara sighed in relief, falling into his seat, wiping his forehead.
"I was so nervous … I'm lucky. The kids seem like good kids … Except for that girl." He thought out loud, smiling at the sight of the empty room.
"Hiya, Sensei!" Out of nowhere, a girl's face popped up, her nose touching his. It took Sasahara a moment to focus his vision, seeing Aki staring at him with a grin on her face.
"K-Kokonoe, shouldn't you be with your friends eating lunch? Did you forget something in here?" Sasahara asked, Aki shaking her head and hopping up to sit on his lap.
"Nah, I just wanted to spend today with you! You seem nervous; do I make you uncomfortable, Sensei?" Aki asked, rubbing her cheek against the man's face. Sasahara stayed silent, picking the girl up and dropping her to the floor, the girl landing hard on her bottom. "Ow, Sensei! What'd ya do that for?" Aki asked, groaning.
"Kokonoe, this is very inappropriate. You need to leave and go eat lunch, I won't have you complaining about hunger later today." Sasahara said, pointing at the door. Aki sighed, standing up and heading for the door. She turned around, meeting eyes with Sasahara.
"I understand, Sensei. I'll see ya after class, m'kay?" She smirked, winking as she slammed the door behind her.
"W-What the hell is up with that girl?" Sasahara thought, sighing deeply.
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"Sensei is too cute! I wonder if he likes me?"
- Aki-chan.
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... Too confusing?
Does that make sense?
Any talking you see above a ~ Is Aki's writing. Everything inbetween is the story which would be the diary entry. If this doesn't make sense, please tell me. Every chapter will begin and end with a comment from Aki.
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Entry 1: Brand new Sensei!
"This is the diary of me, Kokonoe Aki! Today was such a fun day, diary! My class got a brand new Sensei!"
~
"Did you hear?"
"Yeah, he's a guy, isn't he?"
"I hope he's a nice guy."
A group of children were chatting amongst each other one early morning. They were the children of class 3-1, in a small classroom. They had heard rumor that a new Teacher would be entering their class today, and each child had their own version of what the person would be like.
"I bet he's tall …"
"No, I heard he was like a midget!"
"… What's a midget?"
A loud bell rang throughout the room - Class was about to begin. Each child quickly ran to their desks, watching the classroom door with wide eyes and anticipation.
One girl in particular, however, seemed the most excited. She sat at the North West corner of the room, the first desk in the first row. She had flowing blonde hair which she tied into very long ponytails. Her hazel colored eyes had a look of delight as she imagined what this new adult would look like.
The large door finally slid open, a figure walking inside. It was a somewhat tall man with dark black hair, lime green eyes, and glasses. His attire was the usual for a teacher - A black tie, black dress pants, and a white formal shirt. The class wondered if he was their teacher, or just some kind of secret agent turned normal. The man approached the desk at the front of the room, smiling at the group of children in front of him.
"Good morning, class. My name is Sasahara Takeshi. I will be your Sensei from this day on!" The man smiled. "It's nice to meet you all!" The children all smiled, returning the greeting.
"Nice to meet you!" The children all seemed happy with their new teacher. This man seemed like he would be a nice guy, and that was really all they cared about at this time.
"Okay, now to take roll and learn your names." The man said, grabbing a list of the children names. Everyone seemed to be here, and he was getting to one of the last names on the list.
"Kokonoe, Aki." He said, looking into the group. The blonde girl smiled, standing up quickly and thrusting her hand into the air. Her long ponytails swayed as she moved.
"I'm here, Sasa-Sensei! I'm right over here!" She exclaimed, grinning. The teacher looked disturbed, but forced a smile back.
"Please, Kokonoe. It's Sasahara-sensei." He said, sighing. The girl shook her head, sitting back down.
"Nah, I like Sasa-sensei better! It's cute!" Aki said, winking at him. Sasahara turned from her, pretending she was no longer there.
"S-So, today we'll be learning about …"
(…)
The lunch bell rang, and the children quickly left the room. Sasahara sighed in relief, falling into his seat, wiping his forehead.
"I was so nervous … I'm lucky. The kids seem like good kids … Except for that girl." He thought out loud, smiling at the sight of the empty room.
"Hiya, Sensei!" Out of nowhere, a girl's face popped up, her nose touching his. It took Sasahara a moment to focus his vision, seeing Aki staring at him with a grin on her face.
"K-Kokonoe, shouldn't you be with your friends eating lunch? Did you forget something in here?" Sasahara asked, Aki shaking her head and hopping up to sit on his lap.
"Nah, I just wanted to spend today with you! You seem nervous; do I make you uncomfortable, Sensei?" Aki asked, rubbing her cheek against the man's face. Sasahara stayed silent, picking the girl up and dropping her to the floor, the girl landing hard on her bottom. "Ow, Sensei! What'd ya do that for?" Aki asked, groaning.
"Kokonoe, this is very inappropriate. You need to leave and go eat lunch, I won't have you complaining about hunger later today." Sasahara said, pointing at the door. Aki sighed, standing up and heading for the door. She turned around, meeting eyes with Sasahara.
"I understand, Sensei. I'll see ya after class, m'kay?" She smirked, winking as she slammed the door behind her.
"W-What the hell is up with that girl?" Sasahara thought, sighing deeply.
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"Sensei is too cute! I wonder if he likes me?"
- Aki-chan.
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... Too confusing?