Mai comicu

(This is allowed here, right?)

http://eyesof9.gaijinmanga.com/index2.php?geturl=ch.1|pg.1

This is a comic i am currently working on(The writer)!
If you have some free time, check it out and let me know what you think, maybe give some advice on how to improve and what not.
Also if you want i can post some concept art/characters here before anywhere else :3

This fits better in the Art section: https://www.fakku.net/viewforum.php?f=37

Yes but i am not the artist, nor can i draw in anyway.
I just do the story/dialog/character and what not.

Hm, debatable. I would say it would still go in the Art section even if you are just the writer since it's a comic. But I'm not a mod or anything.

I think it being here is okay. It's a storyboard, is it? Not a picture or a full episode of manga.,.... XD

Fake Edit : Oh, i'm kidding. Great job!

Chapter 1, page 19, their reactions -
Matt - "It doesn't really work on living things. Besides, I'm not sure how I'd feel about doing that to someone."

Abby - "It makes sense, probably just a limit put on you to keep you from winning too easily."

You're obviously being idealistic with the story, but eh, her reaction is a bit far-fetched.

Idealistic? :<
And well that's just Abby, she isn't very normal

Well, if it was cynical, his friend's reactions might've been more like fear or rejection. And hm, my first impression of Abby was a no-nonsense rule-abiding sociable person. So her joking about killing people just by touching them as "winning too easily" is a bit off-kilter to me.

Understandable, she just acts differently compared to in public or just around MC.
I hope to make stuff like that more clear in future chapters