My Poetry,rymes,lyrics,free verses,points of view
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As i mentioned,before a began writing ligth novel story "Black And White". i used to write rymes,lyrics,poetry,free verses,points of view. Here are some of them.
P.S these were originaly written in Georgian.I Won few prizes with these(nothing special prize money close as 30$)Translating them may not leave any special impression because there might not be any rythm in it or some words might not mean anything special.I even re-wrote them in English,some words are changed,sadly it will lose it's meanings :(.
Cry of influence(2010)
Some points of view about life:
1.Life is a wheel,which is always spining in different directions,but in the end it always returns to original position.(meaning-where we come from after death we go to the same place)
2.We are born from air and we return in air.(it doesn;t require explanation i think)
3.Fate is giving you chance to decide your path,as the path decides your fate in future.
4.everything is rusting and becoming old,it is becoming as plural ashes and in the end it becomes eternity as dust.
P.S Thinking how to translate others.
P.S these were originaly written in Georgian.I Won few prizes with these(nothing special prize money close as 30$)Translating them may not leave any special impression because there might not be any rythm in it or some words might not mean anything special.I even re-wrote them in English,some words are changed,sadly it will lose it's meanings :(.
Cry of influence(2010)
Spoiler:
Some points of view about life:
1.Life is a wheel,which is always spining in different directions,but in the end it always returns to original position.(meaning-where we come from after death we go to the same place)
2.We are born from air and we return in air.(it doesn;t require explanation i think)
3.Fate is giving you chance to decide your path,as the path decides your fate in future.
4.everything is rusting and becoming old,it is becoming as plural ashes and in the end it becomes eternity as dust.
P.S Thinking how to translate others.
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Points 1 and 3 don't actually mean anything, and point 1 is duplicated in point 2.
Point 4 is both pessimistic and pointless, as it doesn't really make factual sense in the definitions of some of the terms used (eg everything is not "rusting", and ashes only result from combustion.)
Point 2 is entirely factually incorrect, and would be meaningless even if it were.
Other than a few typos, a shoddy pace, an inconsistent rhyme scheme, and my general disagreement with the themes presented, the poem is okay.
Sorry if I seem like a dick, but I'm pretty tired, and my behavioral filters may not be functioning at full capacity.
Point 4 is both pessimistic and pointless, as it doesn't really make factual sense in the definitions of some of the terms used (eg everything is not "rusting", and ashes only result from combustion.)
Point 2 is entirely factually incorrect, and would be meaningless even if it were.
Other than a few typos, a shoddy pace, an inconsistent rhyme scheme, and my general disagreement with the themes presented, the poem is okay.
Sorry if I seem like a dick, but I'm pretty tired, and my behavioral filters may not be functioning at full capacity.