Nemesis

crimson875 · 2012-01-20T10:31:45-01:00

i got the idea a week ago an decided to write it down also sorry for my bad english Spoiler: the story takes place in 2003, when tension rise between middle east and the US, thus started a war, US lost on the war so as its allied country including the whole Asia and soon, was under control by middle east, the story revolves around "cross", The leader of the revolutionary Army "Nemesis" and his Team which consist of 10 members (including him) each with their own role and fighting styles, they were different than ordinary revolutionary group, they dont fight with mere weapon or strategy only, the 10 of them trained and have mastered the usage of "chakra" in which every person poses,different from the chakra you uys have known from naruto, the chakra in this story is the release of energy from the body, so they are able to create energy coat to block bullets,missiles etc, able to explode anything they touch through like balloons that pops with too much air, able to sense people in a area, able to harden paper and make it sword-alike, able to move very fast through transferring chakra to their legs,the 10 of them are the only people in the world who have successfully studied and mastered the art of chakra, they fight and fight to bring back freedom to each country middle east have conquered and take down the leader of it and bring back peach to the world i decided to draw it a few days ago and make it a comic the art isnt that good but im confident about the plot to anyone who wants to see some pages i made you can see it here http://crimson875.deviantart.com/gallery/34823230 i keep adding 1-2 pages a day

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Kuro vi Lolitannia

12 years ago

You should upload this to a zip too... For example a zip for each 50 pages or something.

I want to read it but I'm not good at online reading

crimson875

12 years ago

Kuro vi Lolitannia wrote...

You should upload this to a zip too... For example a zip for each 50 pages or something.

I want to read it but I'm not good at online reading

oh, glad your interested :)
http://www.mediafire.com/?abjedbmnnwhldc5
119 pages, page 25-119 are type written

also decided to change the plot a little, and make it a little "advance technology Vs. Humans vs. gods"

Kuro vi Lolitannia

12 years ago

Hrm... I like the story, but I don't really like the 'after 3 years' part... It makes it seems... Rushed,

crimson875

12 years ago

Kuro vi Lolitannia wrote...

Hrm... I like the story, but I don't really like the 'after 3 years' part... It makes it seems... Rushed,

thanks.....i kinda rush it coz i got soo many ideas running on my head,i kinda want to get into the main story asap

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