Opening to a short story
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Well, for my creative writing class, I'm...well...writing. Here's the opening to my current story, and I'd like to know if it's captivating, and funny. Or just a good opening in general.
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My plan, as of right now, is to have him realize how much he hates his life and try to travel back in time to change it.
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An interesting thought indeed!
The Earth is constantly circling around the Sun, but if you just kill him this way, it's actually not too impressive. The reader will depict him as an "epic failed" time traveling, if you know what I mean?
If you would like the reader to admire the main character, why don't you instead, have him explained why his time travel is better than most movies out there because he actually when he time travels he also have to calculate the movement of the Earth. So instead of just staying at his room and go back 20 years, he might actually have to fly to France Paris, at a hotel bathroom and does his time travel thing and actually go back to 20 years ago in his room. This way he sounds cooler and smarter.
Don't give him an epic failed death.
p.s. One thing interesting noted, according to the current calendar which is following the sun, every 4th year u know we gain a day in February 29th. Therefore, today's date isn't the same time as last year's date, they are constantly off by a few days each yea. HOWEVER, according to Chinese tradition they use the lunar calendar which is according to the circulation of the moon, the date in lunar calendar is never changing, no gain no loss, so in lunar date, March 1st would be exactly 1 year ago of last year's March 1st. I think this is right, if you want more info just look into wiki.
The Earth is constantly circling around the Sun, but if you just kill him this way, it's actually not too impressive. The reader will depict him as an "epic failed" time traveling, if you know what I mean?
If you would like the reader to admire the main character, why don't you instead, have him explained why his time travel is better than most movies out there because he actually when he time travels he also have to calculate the movement of the Earth. So instead of just staying at his room and go back 20 years, he might actually have to fly to France Paris, at a hotel bathroom and does his time travel thing and actually go back to 20 years ago in his room. This way he sounds cooler and smarter.
Don't give him an epic failed death.
p.s. One thing interesting noted, according to the current calendar which is following the sun, every 4th year u know we gain a day in February 29th. Therefore, today's date isn't the same time as last year's date, they are constantly off by a few days each yea. HOWEVER, according to Chinese tradition they use the lunar calendar which is according to the circulation of the moon, the date in lunar calendar is never changing, no gain no loss, so in lunar date, March 1st would be exactly 1 year ago of last year's March 1st. I think this is right, if you want more info just look into wiki.
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I'm biased, so reading about some professor form MIT gets my attention. You should ask yourself, should your opening sentence be about introducing your character? Or should it be him dropping the blue print for time travel in a waste basket full of acid? (The latter question points out on having the character do some action.)
It's interesting for me, although the story of time traveling has been over done. The question you should concern yourself is... "what structure of sentence do I want for this story to wrrk"
ps I'm drunk... chances are my suggestions dont make sense.
It's interesting for me, although the story of time traveling has been over done. The question you should concern yourself is... "what structure of sentence do I want for this story to wrrk"
ps I'm drunk... chances are my suggestions dont make sense.
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Jericho Antares
FAKKU Writer
I think you have more of an outline than a real opening here, or simply a character bio up in your first post.
I'd mainly want to hear exactly how he ends up being able to travel trough time, because that makes the circumstance he would be in upon warp (and what happens) easier to decide on. I'd like to help, but at present the only thing I know that smears the space-time continuum is a black hole.
I'd mainly want to hear exactly how he ends up being able to travel trough time, because that makes the circumstance he would be in upon warp (and what happens) easier to decide on. I'd like to help, but at present the only thing I know that smears the space-time continuum is a black hole.