Poetry (Verikon)
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I will post a few of my poetic works here for anyone interested to enjoy, review and give opinion.
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# The Forgiving Reaper #
In black cloak be shrouded
Draped by darkest night
Clinging to the deep red scythe
Seeking souls and blood
Ever dead and shackled
Enslaved by times unholy
Reaping soul and flesh
Dipping bones in soil
A name unremembered
Thieved by time itself
Shielding it from morals
Robbing deadly truths
The grim reaper is coming
Prepared to take me in
Removing all my burdens
Forgiving all my sins
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# The Journey #
Through frozen ice chilled winds
Through vastly ash charred lands
I travel to the edge of worlds
Never meeting life's ends
As I call into the howling night
I feel the warmth of promised love
Walking willingly into death's domain
I venture bravely but am insane
Destination reached yet time uncharted
I take the hand of one so dear
Holding tightly with joy unquestioned
I feel the rising heat within me
For I am home and love is with me
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# Hades' Gate #
A flash, a bang, a desperate cry
The call in need of those on high
In future's door, does death await
Should wing bound ally arrive too late
The hand is rushing, moments passed
No time remaining for our fair lass
Then overhead does hope come fast
To relieve the burden once forecast
A flash, a bang, a joyous cry
The call is heard by those nearby
In time to alter a cruel fate
For those in line at Hades' Gate
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# The Forgiving Reaper #
In black cloak be shrouded
Draped by darkest night
Clinging to the deep red scythe
Seeking souls and blood
Ever dead and shackled
Enslaved by times unholy
Reaping soul and flesh
Dipping bones in soil
A name unremembered
Thieved by time itself
Shielding it from morals
Robbing deadly truths
The grim reaper is coming
Prepared to take me in
Removing all my burdens
Forgiving all my sins
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# The Journey #
Through frozen ice chilled winds
Through vastly ash charred lands
I travel to the edge of worlds
Never meeting life's ends
As I call into the howling night
I feel the warmth of promised love
Walking willingly into death's domain
I venture bravely but am insane
Destination reached yet time uncharted
I take the hand of one so dear
Holding tightly with joy unquestioned
I feel the rising heat within me
For I am home and love is with me
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# Hades' Gate #
A flash, a bang, a desperate cry
The call in need of those on high
In future's door, does death await
Should wing bound ally arrive too late
The hand is rushing, moments passed
No time remaining for our fair lass
Then overhead does hope come fast
To relieve the burden once forecast
A flash, a bang, a joyous cry
The call is heard by those nearby
In time to alter a cruel fate
For those in line at Hades' Gate
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I enjoyed Hade's gate the most, the structure was simple and the words used were placed well. The last stanza was particularily well done, I liked how you used an altered version of the two beginning verses to set the ending.
I think that the first two verses in "The Forgiving Reaper" could've beeen better if you had switched around draped and shrouded. Speaking definition wise, it would make more sense.
I think that the first two verses in "The Forgiving Reaper" could've beeen better if you had switched around draped and shrouded. Speaking definition wise, it would make more sense.