some stuff i never knew i even wrote
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seriously where do i get these things anyway? lemme know if its ok....
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as the sun rises in the hills above the destroyed town
another day has begun and a new morning has yet risen
bodies in the streets, both friend, civilian and foe are there
bullet strewn walls and ejected brass tell the rest of the story
as broken, bullet shot windows and craters where grenades exploded greet you
you ask yourself the question your unit asked and found no answer to
"what did go wrong? did we screw up? such cost is too dear, why did it happen?"
as you think it yourself, you proceed to move the men in the town
loading the assault rifle in hand and prepare for the worst to come
to enter the town of the fallen and forsaken, to find the source of what isnt there
a bright sunny day is unusual in the days of battle, an omen they say it is
that something is happening beyond the control, vying for time, waiting to strike
demolition charges prepared, gun sights zeroed, magazines checked and start to go
to the place of slaughter, where guns lay scattered and blood in the triggers
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as the sun rises in the hills above the destroyed town
another day has begun and a new morning has yet risen
bodies in the streets, both friend, civilian and foe are there
bullet strewn walls and ejected brass tell the rest of the story
as broken, bullet shot windows and craters where grenades exploded greet you
you ask yourself the question your unit asked and found no answer to
"what did go wrong? did we screw up? such cost is too dear, why did it happen?"
as you think it yourself, you proceed to move the men in the town
loading the assault rifle in hand and prepare for the worst to come
to enter the town of the fallen and forsaken, to find the source of what isnt there
a bright sunny day is unusual in the days of battle, an omen they say it is
that something is happening beyond the control, vying for time, waiting to strike
demolition charges prepared, gun sights zeroed, magazines checked and start to go
to the place of slaughter, where guns lay scattered and blood in the triggers
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Very short, but it's a nice description. Though there were a few repetetive words and a few mistakes, it's pretty good. It gives the feeling that war seems brutal and full of surprises. At least, that's what I felt. I encourage you to write a story. :)
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heres some more...
part:
as i reach towards the sky, its so blue and serene
silence covers the grassy knoll where i lay, shot, wounded and bloody
i cant say that im a good person, nor that im a bad one
but i regretted the fact that i took lives with the gun that i used
forced to shoot a mother in front of a son, showing him the horrors of life
is something i cant forget nor can i be atoned for in my afterlife
as i look at my palms that is covered in blood, its thick because of the gun
held with precision aim, double tap firing and amazingly accurate results
now i wont question why this happened, i knew that this time would come someday
to fall to another gunslinger as great as i am and with speed equal to mine
this is what we do, like wolves sent to kill sheep or other wolves
so that is why i kept distance from my family, so my son would not follow me
to lead this life of uncertainty, all decisions are done at a split second
promised my wife that i will return, but now i cant even stand up and draw my gun
a 1911 colt that shoots .45 ACP, to the opponent that had shot me in the back
so many have died under that gun, whether boastful or evil, this gun never chooses
for it has seen blood splatter every time it draws, moments of fear that it brings
now as my vision slowly fades away, i ask the one who defeated me to come closer
to bring this gun to a certain place, to a wife and son i left behind
"let him choose his own destiny," he said, "whether he wants to avenge or cower
away. i shall train him if you wish if he decides the trigger."
i gave my consent and my sight slowly faded away, my opponent/friend being with me
i've fallen with great reputation, the legendary gunfighter status
but due to old age i cannot continue my life any longer, my son shall take it
if he wishes to or not, because i went away loving my family, and died still loving
part:
as i reach towards the sky, its so blue and serene
silence covers the grassy knoll where i lay, shot, wounded and bloody
i cant say that im a good person, nor that im a bad one
but i regretted the fact that i took lives with the gun that i used
forced to shoot a mother in front of a son, showing him the horrors of life
is something i cant forget nor can i be atoned for in my afterlife
as i look at my palms that is covered in blood, its thick because of the gun
held with precision aim, double tap firing and amazingly accurate results
now i wont question why this happened, i knew that this time would come someday
to fall to another gunslinger as great as i am and with speed equal to mine
this is what we do, like wolves sent to kill sheep or other wolves
so that is why i kept distance from my family, so my son would not follow me
to lead this life of uncertainty, all decisions are done at a split second
promised my wife that i will return, but now i cant even stand up and draw my gun
a 1911 colt that shoots .45 ACP, to the opponent that had shot me in the back
so many have died under that gun, whether boastful or evil, this gun never chooses
for it has seen blood splatter every time it draws, moments of fear that it brings
now as my vision slowly fades away, i ask the one who defeated me to come closer
to bring this gun to a certain place, to a wife and son i left behind
"let him choose his own destiny," he said, "whether he wants to avenge or cower
away. i shall train him if you wish if he decides the trigger."
i gave my consent and my sight slowly faded away, my opponent/friend being with me
i've fallen with great reputation, the legendary gunfighter status
but due to old age i cannot continue my life any longer, my son shall take it
if he wishes to or not, because i went away loving my family, and died still loving