The Elder Scrolls: Ed-berry Panic! Fakku edition

you'll find it here

well to the few fans I've gained through this endeavor, I'm gonna try to rewrite the second arc of my fic. I don't know when I'll start, probably tomorrow but I need to do the outline then

u should throw out the next 1 then fix the second 1 0.0(by the way now i know wat hikaru and amane or however u spell there names look like and yaya =]

.... huh?

forget it my bad <.<

I meant confusing in which you introduced the characters and setting from out of nowhere. You provided bits and pieces of the background throughout the chapter, but it would have been easier for the reader if the background and character brief persona were fleshed out before plowing onto the plot.

I read fast however, and sometimes when I read fast, I tend to lose the flow of things. I liked the beginning chapters with the Eds, but somehow I kinda got confused by the next set of chapters in Japan. Maybe it's because I think it's not necessary to introduce a brand new setting that might not be important in the grand scheme of the plot, I dunno.

Either way, I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter. The prose is decent for a good read.

Well, sorry I haven't worked on this for those that enjoyed it. Um, in case you're wondering, I'm still trying to work on the second half of chapter two (which I may call chapter 3 instead) so for the time being I've done some editing with chapter's 1 and 2, some are just dialogue changes, while chapter 1 is a bit of a rewrite. So please check them out whenever possible.

Peace

yea its been a while but im glad ur back...

Well, after a month or so, I've decided I want to close this topic in order to rewrite my story. It'll be very different from what I've had here and I hope it gets more attention. Also, like before this one will be uncensored and all.

Just thought I'd drop by, expect to hear from me again... If anyone cares