First things first, you should have tinkered with the text in the post. It's not very pretty to look at. I'm reading the google doc, so it's not too big of an issue, but those who don't wanna use the doc for whatever reason are going to have a bone to pic.
When I started reading, I was wondering how this was romance. It's very sci-fi. After the info dump, it kind of just jumps into the story of Alec and Eleon. I can't help but wonder if there's a better way to transition into it.
I also wonder who the narrator is in the first scene.
I do like the sci-fi stuff however, particularly the virus.
I wish there was more of a connection between the two big scenes involving Alec and Eleon. I think that just might be the biggest problem I have.
It’s been over six hundred and four years since I’ve felt your presence, even though I know you don’t exist in the space I know as reality I can feel that you’re here with me.
The punctuation in the sentence makes it read awkwardly for me. Lots of errors regarding punctuation throughout.
Proceeding this he pulled out a lighter and lit the back handle of the axe on fire throwing it into the pile of dead people creating our source of warmth.
Why doesn't he just use the lighter to light the bodies on fire?