Waifu RP 2 (Questions & Answers)
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Jericho Antares wrote...
Sorry if I'm being intrusive, but if you want a template for how to go about a third person perspective post, you can just check out mine on the Waifu RP II.Oh, and be sure to not stray into 3rd Person Omniscient, and stay with 3rd Person Limited.
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Wut.
There's a difference?
Oh well. xD
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Early morning a cool and gently breeze sweeps into the suburbs, leaves falling, the sound of the awakening birds and on the paved walk a golden haired lad who just came from home walks seemingly happy to the city and say’s to himself
“What a great day! I guess it was a good idea to wake up earlier to and walk to work; it’s colder than usual though.
My usual ride would take me about 10 – 15 minutes but since it’s nice to have some change in your routine once in a while this should only take a little bit longer but it’s actually fun *show’s a small grin* it should be a start of a good day .”
The lad continues his walk to the city as from what it seems has just about to awake.
[size=11]tell me if my intro was bad XD[/h]
“What a great day! I guess it was a good idea to wake up earlier to and walk to work; it’s colder than usual though.
My usual ride would take me about 10 – 15 minutes but since it’s nice to have some change in your routine once in a while this should only take a little bit longer but it’s actually fun *show’s a small grin* it should be a start of a good day .”
The lad continues his walk to the city as from what it seems has just about to awake.
[size=11]tell me if my intro was bad XD[/h]
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skydager wrote...
Early morning a cool and gently breeze sweeps into the suburbs, leaves falling, the sound of the awakening birds and on the paved walk a golden haired lad who just came from home walks seemingly happy to the city and say’s to himself“What a great day! I guess it was a good idea to wake up earlier to and walk to work; it’s colder than usual though.
My usual ride would take me about 10 – 15 minutes but since it’s nice to have some change in your routine once in a while this should only take a little bit longer but it’s actually fun *show’s a small grin* it should be a start of a good day .”
The lad continues his walk to the city as from what it seems has just about to awake.
[size=11]tell me if my intro was bad XD[/h]
It's good, but in present tense, and the grin in *'s should be described in a sntence outsie ofquotation marks, like so.
"My usual ride would take me about 10 – 15 minutes but since it’s nice to have some change in your routine once in a while this should only take a little bit longer but it’s actually fun," The lad grinned, "It should be a start of a good day .”"
Something like that would be nicer. xD
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Fallan
Kamen Rider Cheeki
Quadratic wrote...
skydager wrote...
Early morning a cool and gently breeze sweeps into the suburbs, leaves falling, the sound of the awakening birds and on the paved walk a golden haired lad who just came from home walks seemingly happy to the city and say’s to himself“What a great day! I guess it was a good idea to wake up earlier to and walk to work; it’s colder than usual though.
My usual ride would take me about 10 – 15 minutes but since it’s nice to have some change in your routine once in a while this should only take a little bit longer but it’s actually fun *show’s a small grin* it should be a start of a good day .”
The lad continues his walk to the city as from what it seems has just about to awake.
[size=11]tell me if my intro was bad XD[/h]
It's good, but in present tense, and the grin in *'s should be described in a sntence outsie ofquotation marks, like so.
"My usual ride would take me about 10 – 15 minutes but since it’s nice to have some change in your routine once in a while this should only take a little bit longer but it’s actually fun," The lad grinned, "It should be a start of a good day .”"
Something like that would be nicer. xD
How long should the intro be? mine is kinda long.
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xxxholic18 wrote...
Quadratic wrote...
skydager wrote...
Early morning a cool and gently breeze sweeps into the suburbs, leaves falling, the sound of the awakening birds and on the paved walk a golden haired lad who just came from home walks seemingly happy to the city and say’s to himself“What a great day! I guess it was a good idea to wake up earlier to and walk to work; it’s colder than usual though.
My usual ride would take me about 10 – 15 minutes but since it’s nice to have some change in your routine once in a while this should only take a little bit longer but it’s actually fun *show’s a small grin* it should be a start of a good day .”
The lad continues his walk to the city as from what it seems has just about to awake.
[size=11]tell me if my intro was bad XD[/h]
It's good, but in present tense, and the grin in *'s should be described in a sntence outsie ofquotation marks, like so.
"My usual ride would take me about 10 – 15 minutes but since it’s nice to have some change in your routine once in a while this should only take a little bit longer but it’s actually fun," The lad grinned, "It should be a start of a good day .”"
Something like that would be nicer. xD
How long should the intro be? mine is kinda long.
Eh, size doesn't matter, the intro should be as long as you want it to be. Just don't make it pages and pages. :P
@Unsigned: I'dprefer3rd person, but if you realy have to. Use frt. Don't change halfway throug you post though.
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Fallan
Kamen Rider Cheeki
*cracking sound*
“OW!” A once huge, snoring bump in the bed fell down. It then took a sitting position beside the bed rubbing its head. “Itai!! Why can’t you wake me up with a morning kiss like normal wives do to their beloved husbands?” it said, in a hurt voice.
“Cause you’re not normal.” A figure replied, dropping a wooden sword, trying to hold back its laughter.
“Uggh… That hurts, Octavia-san.” The †˜bulge’ said to the figure, now known as Octavia, while holding his heart.
Octavia sighed and walked near the sitting person. She leaned towards the him and poked its head with her finger.
“Well, if you didn’t throw the alarm clock outside earlier, I wouldn’t be waking up late and I
could’ve woken you with a kiss, Leon-san” She replied, smiling.
“That infernal contraption was ringing so hard, I can’t sleep in peace beside my lovely wife!” Leon said, pointing towards the window. Octavia smiled, then poked Leon’s forehead again.
“You should’ve press its snooze button then,” She replied putting her hands on her hips “You don’t have to throw it outside!”
“But- but- ” Leon was pointing towards the window.
“No buts, get up, and get dressed, and eat. We’re late already.” Octavia said, walking towards the bathroom. “I already ate” she added.
“Can’t we skip-”
“No, you should practice your swordsmanship as much as possible.” She then looked back and spoke in a cute manner, “Or you don’t want to learn how to defend me from those thugs that you said will hit on me?”
Leon jumped of the bed and hurried towards the kitchen to eat. Octavia smiled and headed towards the bathroom.
…Yay, I finished this thingy before I slept. Anyways, If there’s something wrong, tell me, I’ll do something bout it… This is my first time after all. And oh… I didn’t bother to describe things much… just imagine a normal on bedroom apartment something like that.
“OW!” A once huge, snoring bump in the bed fell down. It then took a sitting position beside the bed rubbing its head. “Itai!! Why can’t you wake me up with a morning kiss like normal wives do to their beloved husbands?” it said, in a hurt voice.
“Cause you’re not normal.” A figure replied, dropping a wooden sword, trying to hold back its laughter.
“Uggh… That hurts, Octavia-san.” The †˜bulge’ said to the figure, now known as Octavia, while holding his heart.
Octavia sighed and walked near the sitting person. She leaned towards the him and poked its head with her finger.
“Well, if you didn’t throw the alarm clock outside earlier, I wouldn’t be waking up late and I
could’ve woken you with a kiss, Leon-san” She replied, smiling.
“That infernal contraption was ringing so hard, I can’t sleep in peace beside my lovely wife!” Leon said, pointing towards the window. Octavia smiled, then poked Leon’s forehead again.
“You should’ve press its snooze button then,” She replied putting her hands on her hips “You don’t have to throw it outside!”
“But- but- ” Leon was pointing towards the window.
“No buts, get up, and get dressed, and eat. We’re late already.” Octavia said, walking towards the bathroom. “I already ate” she added.
“Can’t we skip-”
“No, you should practice your swordsmanship as much as possible.” She then looked back and spoke in a cute manner, “Or you don’t want to learn how to defend me from those thugs that you said will hit on me?”
Leon jumped of the bed and hurried towards the kitchen to eat. Octavia smiled and headed towards the bathroom.
…Yay, I finished this thingy before I slept. Anyways, If there’s something wrong, tell me, I’ll do something bout it… This is my first time after all. And oh… I didn’t bother to describe things much… just imagine a normal on bedroom apartment something like that.
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Jericho Antares
FAKKU Writer
Quadratic wrote...
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Wut.
There's a difference?
Oh well. xD
Yeah, but no one should have a problem with it. It's just a matter of not saying what other characters are thinking and keeping it restricted to simply the character's point of view when writing 3PL. You can describe their facial features, actions, etc, but just don't say what they're thinking.
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yey scanning done now i have to wait for the other's intro's i wanna read there story so we can make a link XD
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Location: Franco's House, The Suburbs
OOC: I have no idea about how late school starts in Japan, so I’m just gonna go with how things work in Belgium, where I grew up.
IC: “WAKE UP!”
No.
“Come on, Franco.”
I don’t want to.
“Franco, we’re gonna be late!”
Late for WHA-
Suddenly, as realisation struck him, the not-so-young man abruptly opened his eyes. “Finally, you’re awake! It’s 7:50!” Mari said, irritated, but not yet angry.
“7:50?!” Usually, Franco woke up early so he could have breakfast with his youngest wife and youngest sister – both still in high school – but apparently, today, he had overslept. “Have you had breakfast yet? Are your bags ready? Sue has already woken up, I hope?” “Three times yes. Now you’re worrying too much.”
Franco’s car, which he usually used to take the two to school, was old. Very old. In fact, he couldn’t even remember buying it, but it was in his possession, and it worked, so he had accepted this gift of fate without hesitation. “Have you showered yesterday? Your smell is gone,” Mari asked Franco as they, together with the silent Susanna, got into the car. “Yes. Yes I have.” And with those words, he started the car and the radio and drove off towards Fakku High School.
OOC: I have no idea about how late school starts in Japan, so I’m just gonna go with how things work in Belgium, where I grew up.
IC: “WAKE UP!”
No.
“Come on, Franco.”
I don’t want to.
“Franco, we’re gonna be late!”
Late for WHA-
Suddenly, as realisation struck him, the not-so-young man abruptly opened his eyes. “Finally, you’re awake! It’s 7:50!” Mari said, irritated, but not yet angry.
“7:50?!” Usually, Franco woke up early so he could have breakfast with his youngest wife and youngest sister – both still in high school – but apparently, today, he had overslept. “Have you had breakfast yet? Are your bags ready? Sue has already woken up, I hope?” “Three times yes. Now you’re worrying too much.”
Franco’s car, which he usually used to take the two to school, was old. Very old. In fact, he couldn’t even remember buying it, but it was in his possession, and it worked, so he had accepted this gift of fate without hesitation. “Have you showered yesterday? Your smell is gone,” Mari asked Franco as they, together with the silent Susanna, got into the car. “Yes. Yes I have.” And with those words, he started the car and the radio and drove off towards Fakku High School.
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Jericho Antares
FAKKU Writer
Quick question to Quad: Would it be at all possible for me to join in on this RP, in light of the state of the other? If not, then I'll be a silent observer. I'm rather interested in some of these profiles.
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Jericho Antares wrote...
Quick question to Quad: Would it be at all possible for me to join in on this RP, in light of the state of the other? If not, then I'll be a silent observer. I'm rather interested in some of these profiles.pleaseshh do XD im tired of w8ting for the others intro =3
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OOC : Now this look a lot more like an RP.. Thanks to the number of people participating.. I'll be the audience for now, he eh
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You know what, screw it, the more the merrier.
You can both join?
@everyone: OOC is great an all, but it's better protrayed by "((-text-))". You can easily place it in the middle of your posts to make a note or such.
You can both join?
@everyone: OOC is great an all, but it's better protrayed by "((-text-))". You can easily place it in the middle of your posts to make a note or such.
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“Work starts at nine.”
It is morning and the sun is dimmed by several clouds. A man sitting at his house it blankly starring the Fakku News on his TV. He glanced over at a clock mounted above the television. “I have about 40 minutes,” he sighed. Charles “All” Nalen was a teacher at Fakku High School, and today was his first day on the job. “Hey, Aki-,” he stopped. He remembered that his wife, Akiko, had left the household early to run some errands. He got up from his chair and staggered over to mirror near the TV. A young man of 17 looked at him. His hair was a mess and was wearing a maroon button shirt. Slicking his hair back, he walked away from the mirror, grabbed his suitcase from a table left of the door and exited his house.
He stepped outside, he gazed at the sky. The clouds had grown dark, yet the sun was still shining through.
“It’s going to be a long day.”
It is morning and the sun is dimmed by several clouds. A man sitting at his house it blankly starring the Fakku News on his TV. He glanced over at a clock mounted above the television. “I have about 40 minutes,” he sighed. Charles “All” Nalen was a teacher at Fakku High School, and today was his first day on the job. “Hey, Aki-,” he stopped. He remembered that his wife, Akiko, had left the household early to run some errands. He got up from his chair and staggered over to mirror near the TV. A young man of 17 looked at him. His hair was a mess and was wearing a maroon button shirt. Slicking his hair back, he walked away from the mirror, grabbed his suitcase from a table left of the door and exited his house.
He stepped outside, he gazed at the sky. The clouds had grown dark, yet the sun was still shining through.
“It’s going to be a long day.”
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((By the way, this is Sunday. We will continue this plot arc until Tuesday, which I will announce. Time can go by however fast/slow you want it to, but the day MUST end on the post you make after the one where my day ends, to help keep a guideline.))
Ethan looked at the scenery as he pedaled through downtown, people rushing around to do their daily chores. The sun was beside him, however, he would have to tun towards it to get to work, and he didn't like the sun burning his eyes, especially at this time of day.
After about 15 minutes of detouring to avoid the burn, he arrived at work. Ethan parked the bike by the entrance, and walked in slowly. Rubbing his eyes, he looked around the building, as his boss rushed up to him.
((For imagination's sake:
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"Ethan, where were you?! Your shift started 20 minutes ago!" She exclaimed, not angrily, but with a hint of disappointment.
"Sorry, I got... lost." He thought up an excuse as another wonderful day at work began. Looking at the clock, he saw it read "8:50".
Ethan looked at the scenery as he pedaled through downtown, people rushing around to do their daily chores. The sun was beside him, however, he would have to tun towards it to get to work, and he didn't like the sun burning his eyes, especially at this time of day.
After about 15 minutes of detouring to avoid the burn, he arrived at work. Ethan parked the bike by the entrance, and walked in slowly. Rubbing his eyes, he looked around the building, as his boss rushed up to him.
((For imagination's sake:
))"Ethan, where were you?! Your shift started 20 minutes ago!" She exclaimed, not angrily, but with a hint of disappointment.
"Sorry, I got... lost." He thought up an excuse as another wonderful day at work began. Looking at the clock, he saw it read "8:50".
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Morning Star
Soba-Scans Staff
xxxholic18 wrote...
quick question: are we starting or this is still the intro?Shit I don't really know, I haven't posted my bio lol...
*Typing...*
All most done!
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Bio-
Name: Matsumoto Ringo (I'm not sure how the name order works... So I put family name first...)
18 years old as of July 25, Ringo stands at a staggering 6'4. Although for his height and age his cheeks have been known to be soft and wrinkle free as a babies bottom. Black Silky smooth hair that glistens at the very caress of sunlight, eyes that seem so distant and yet so near. Light that slithers unto his eyes irradiates a gloss that bring out his winter eyes. His voice soft yet so thunderous, he could easily rile a group of pacifist in to a aggressive mob. As a baby his mother tickled him causing Ringo cheeks to burst into a reddish color thus his mother named him Ringo. "Ringo, my cute little Ringo."
(History)
Following his disowning by his father, alone Ringo was forced to walk the streets and scratch a living off rocks. Minutes passed, hours, days, and weeks, what seemed like a horrible nightmare proved to be very real. With nothing in his pockets he was forced to dumpster dive, preying upon the leftovers of restaurants and households Ringo did everything he could to live another day. Constantly warring with savage dogs, Ringo held back his adversaries with a mere sake bottle he had found near a sushi shop. Ravaged in battles his clothes tattered and worn, he faced such glares as a murderer.
(Current)
The infected wounds had taken their toll, Ringo exhausted and on his last leg he sought shelter from the hazards of nature. Ringo limped into an convenience store alley and dropped into debris of wet trash, Ringo had resigned himself to death.
Waifus-
Spoiler:
*My bio may be a little bland/unorganized, sorry I typed what I had written down during class (scared ya'll would have started with out me...)*