word-like-mirrors

word-like-mirrors

A reflection, a mirror without a surface some stories are.
Thoughts and times bring to mind; memories we’d prefer far.
But a life without
summons great doubt
of who we truly are.

I'll be honest, I'm quite confused.

The first line seems very out of place. It does not correlate with the other four.

The first two lines have no flow with either the remaining three lines or even themselves. The second line in particular has the use of a semicolon that seems unneeded and further disrupts the flow even within that line. Is there a significance to the disjunction that you create throughout the work?

The last three lines are very cohesive though. They have both form and meaning. The way you word the third line forces the reader to imply a noun used before (memories), which conserves the flow and helps with conciseness.

Then, there's the title. I simply don't understand it. It implies that your piece is about 'words that are like mirrors', which relates to your first line, but not with the rest.

As I am interpreting it like so:


What were you trying to achieve with the style that you used? And what was it that you were trying to convey? Perhaps, I'm simply overlooking some key things or misinterpreting?

A reflection (first context description)
A mirror with no surface (it completes it's task as a mirror, but stays intangible)
Some stories are (Stories told by the people around me)

Thoughts and times (things I see and do)
Bring to mind (remind me..)
memories we'd prefer far (things I'd like not to remember blah blah)

but a life without (both never remembering and never having)
summons great doubt (the previous act conjures/creates a sense of falsehood in personality)
Of who we really are (a question I think we should all try to answer a couple times)

Haha, it's a limerick, xnine. I was really amused by your confusion and how it dictated your entire review post.

I enjoyed it and the subject topic, and felt it conveyed a meaningful message, but that's all I can usually say about poems. Hope to see another.

Thanks! I've never shared before. Imma' level with yah' both- I didn't know it was limerick. I don't really know much about the concepts or established norms of poetry aside from haikus and just making things rhyme. Herp.

Edit: I have a lot of catching up to do here (this forum)- there's so much to read.

Fair enough, I suppose. You can broaden your understanding and tactile use of poetry by researching such poetic methods, but free-form is also valid and valuable.

If you like, allow me to bring to your attention the Fakku.net story recommendation thread. It contains most writings at least worthy enough for someone to recommend them for their respective months. Mind the giant gap in 2013, we unfortunately neglected the list.

I've been all over it. This is fun~

Really nice poem, I like the message behind it.
And don't worry, I also need to familiarize myself with poetic forms.

Woah, Aphrodite. Been a while, what have you been up to? Written any works you can share with the section?

Ah! It really has been some time, Xenon. I've been travelling, not that much time to write. My last story was in April, as smut. I do have some started pieces I should finish, however.

That was awesome had 2 read it twice 2 get it tho

Thanks - I'm still working with it though~ I get what you mean.