GiantBeardedFace wrote...
Dawn_of_Dark wrote...
I understand that you want to clarify the setting of the story right away at the start, but it's not how you do it, dude. In fact, all the contrary, prologue is the first part of the story, so people tend to want some mystery from the start, especially when it's gonna be long, and ESPECIALLY when it's a fantasy adventure.
The prologue isn't exactly the first part of the story, but rather what leads up to the story. Also, there's no reason it has to have mystery to it; that's only personal opinion, and it's up to author how they want to write the prologue and story.
Sorry, that's what I meant to say but I expressed it in the wrong way. It is true that there are no law say that there has to be mysteries in the prologue, but as we've already known that this is an fantasy adventure, so it is prone to have twists here and there, so I think it would help the story if it has an initial mystery, really. I'm saying not as a writer, but rather as a reader, I know I want a good twist in a fantasy story. But it's all up to the author at the end of the day.
GiantBeardedFace wrote...
Dawn_of_Dark wrote...
And I can't really see the main character yet. I mean, the young dude went missing, right? You really can't have a "missing" protagonist. What's so "missing" about him then? But it's still the prologue, so I shouldn't say that yet, but from the look of it, I assumed you are gonna make him the main character, so I'm just pointing that out if you were planning to.
What if
they're making Nicholas into the antagonist? You're only thinking that this prologue introduces the protagonist; I doubt it though.
He's just one man, BTW. Yes, I see what you mean, I have already said that it is still pretty soon to say anything, but I'm just assuming that he seems like he would, but I could be wrong, we have to wait to see how the story unfold in the next chapter.
GiantBeardedFace wrote...
Dawn_of_Dark wrote...
BTW, characters should always have full name. Don't need to use it all the time, but they should have it.
Also, you don't need full names for characters; it only adds a little bit to character development, but ultimately unnecessary. Hell, some stories don't even have character names to make the story much more memorable. I'm just pointing out that there's a lot of flexibility in writing and that's what makes each author unique (unless if they're copying other authors and using it as their own, which is a disgrace).
True, I have seen stories which have characters without names. But that usually only applies to one-shot short stories. Imagine how tedious it would be when you want to mention somebody that doesn't have a name. We all know what do names do. This is a long-running series, so I assume it would have lots of characters. So, it's my opinion that they should have full names to make it easy for the readers not to get confused sometimes. It doesn't need to, but it should. Then again, it's all up to the author.
GiantBeardedFace wrote...
To the author; it should be written like the story itself rather than quickly surmising the world it takes place in. It shouldn't be broad if you want to focus on the importance of Nicholas. If you want to focus the prologue on Nicholas, then write about the moment he disappears and/or his personality while growing up, not that he disappeared and had severe effects on political stability. If you don't want to focus on Nicholas, then explain about the magical abilities wizards have and the different ways to use it, and how Nicholas quickly learned them.
I think you have an interesting world and premise for this story and am looking forward to seeing it if you write it. I loved
Nothing to Give, so I'll be looking out for your next story.
In this point, I have the same opinion, I forgot to mention it earlier though. I didn't feel anything when I read to the part where Nicholas disappear. It wasn't, like, uhmmm, dramatic at all, you know? It is interesting, but I have to say though, the topic of wizards and magicians has been exploited a lot, so it may get a little bit old, but I'm looking forward to it. However, as I have said earlier, I think it's best that you rewrite the prologue.