He got fired from the job? Didn't his boss read the great reviews the girls have written about his desire to please the customer and him being hard(working) where it matters the most?
But... they ordered the drinks he brought them the first time and had drinks on their table the second time. Or did they bring their own drinks the second time?
I can't be the only person thinking that this had way too much text? Dialogue and the MC's thoughts were all over the place and made everything feel cluttered.
From screwing up to screwing?
Certainly makes you want to start screwing up a lot more, I reckon.
Great ending though. Too bad about the job, but hey, it was probably worth it right? I mean, you don't just...refuse their invitation.
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