brok3n butterfly wrote...
The Randomness wrote...
Sure, as long there are new ideas, "Mommy's Boy" isn't going to go dry.
How long has porn been around? I see alot of chapters in the future. Still loving the femdom sense that Ashley has. Since it is September and back to school season Ashley would make an interesting professor/advisor/etc. If I remember correctly its still summer vacation in this world right?
I take it youre constantly editing and stuff so I'm going to help a bit.
"She slams me hard with a fist right across the fist." ---> should be "face"
"*Meanwhile, in the other room" " ---> 2nd " should be *
"Don't shoot your load yet boy, this cock is going to get deepthroat." ---> should be "deepthroated"
I think thats all of them. Hope that helped. Keep it up Randomness
"Fist right across the fist" hmm... Wow, I guess Street Fighter is getting to my head.
Well timeline consistency shouldn't be a big deal, I just used summer vacation as an easy excuse for a lot of sex.
Thanks for the corrections and support, Brok3n, stuff like this I need to get rid of.