Real Haiku
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mibuchiha
Fakku Elder
Wonder if this counts...
Hey kid, look
The two pillars are crumbling
Leaving a silent ruin behind
Hey kid, look
The two pillars are crumbling
Leaving a silent ruin behind
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mibuchiha wrote...
Wonder if this counts...Hey kid, look
The two pillars are crumbling
Leaving a silent ruin behind
Not quite. Haiku follows the pattern of 5-7-5 syllables. Your second line works, but the first one only has 3 syllables while the last has 9.
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Boredom overwhelms.
What shall I do, you might ask.
I shall write haiku!
The smallest of life,
has meaning in its own way.
Who are you to judge?
What shall I do, you might ask.
I shall write haiku!
The smallest of life,
has meaning in its own way.
Who are you to judge?
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GroverCleaveland wrote...
Haiku's are stupidIn my humble opinion
Too few syllables
I concur with this,
but they can be fun to write.
Finger counting rocks.
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Jericho Antares
FAKKU Writer
Finger counting sucks
The more abstract the better
Use your brain, silly
The more abstract the better
Use your brain, silly
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Xenon wrote...
Finger counting isdifferent for each culture
Your net is broken
Oh shit, my mind's blown
but wait, one is one is one,
who cares which is first?
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Xenon
FAKKU Writer
The Chronicler wrote...
This thread of haikuhas become more than I hoped
my soul screams joy
Well just look who's here
All tickled with joy and tear
Your last line lacks one.
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The Chronicler wrote...
This thread of haikuhas become more than I hoped
my soul screams with joy
fixed that dilemma
just because I wanted to,
unnecessary.
