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I started writing a story plot and I think I'll need some help with it. I'm more or less done with the overall plot and the characters personalities.
Here is the setting in VERY short:
Is there someone who is interested in the story and/or willing to help me out a bit, since my english is not perfect and i cant tell things as lively as most of you guys can. i could give you my msn then or something.
if you want, i can also translate the rest of my notes and put it up.
Here is the setting in VERY short:
Spoiler:
Is there someone who is interested in the story and/or willing to help me out a bit, since my english is not perfect and i cant tell things as lively as most of you guys can. i could give you my msn then or something.
if you want, i can also translate the rest of my notes and put it up.
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Lol. Time-travel Fic^^
Sounds interesting. Lots of people who write in this thread here can help you. just pm one of us^^
Sounds interesting. Lots of people who write in this thread here can help you. just pm one of us^^
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The good thing is, that you could give the story a lot of different endings. From comedy to drama to incest and so on xD
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incest! Lol, Son and Mother, at the same age. That would be awesome. Or you could get the son to rape the mom, thus not actually solving the problem he came to solve! :shock:
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the problem for me is that i dont know how to make it interessting to read. english is not my mother language and the longest texts ive written so far are tests @ school
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lol i agree with Uzumaki there you should try to write it. The intro seems interesting enough it has the potential to be an incredible novel although your spelling is a bit weak but i think everyone in the Fakku family can help with that lol(me included :P )
I might post so harsh comments though Uzumaki has first hand experience with that lol
I might post so harsh comments though Uzumaki has first hand experience with that lol
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Damienthedevil wrote...
lol i agree with Uzumaki there you should try to write it. The intro seems interesting enough it has the potential to be an incredible novel although your spelling is a bit weak but i think everyone in the Fakku family can help with that lol(me included :P )I might post so harsh comments though Uzumaki has first hand experience with that lol
Yes. And it's a good experience too!
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at first i wanted to start it at the moment of his despair after her death but i dont know how to make backflashes realistic in a written story, in an anime or manga it wouldnt be too hard but in a text xou cant just say "hey, i just remembered another fragment of the backround story!". And if i cant tell the story cronologically either (as far as it is even possible in timetravel fic) cuz the "original" past would be so 100% despair and the "new" one only 20% or something. this wouldnt suite well.
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Why don't you write something like this:
"I remember....... it was on that day.... When it all happened. When it started to go wrong...."
What do you think? its dramatic enough i think but it's still up to you whether you want to use it or not
"I remember....... it was on that day.... When it all happened. When it started to go wrong...."
What do you think? its dramatic enough i think but it's still up to you whether you want to use it or not
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Damienthedevil wrote...
Why don't you write something like this:"I remember....... it was on that day.... When it all happened. When it started to go wrong...."
What do you think? its dramatic enough i think but it's still up to you whether you want to use it or not
It all started back then... when I was still young, carefree, beautiful... and when IT happened...
This is the Mother's POV^^
Though I think this is a no-go. How come yours sounds better, Damien? Are you secretly writing novels?
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Uzumaki101 wrote...
Damienthedevil wrote...
Why don't you write something like this:"I remember....... it was on that day.... When it all happened. When it started to go wrong...."
What do you think? its dramatic enough i think but it's still up to you whether you want to use it or not
It all started back then... when I was still young, carefree, beautiful... and when IT happened...
This is the Mother's POV^^
Though I think this is a no-go. How come yours sounds better, Damien? Are you secretly writing novels?
lol thats how i feel like he's done this before....
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Uzumaki101 wrote...
This is the Mother's POV^^
u've got my point, i have to enter the memories of an allready dead person
i think i will let this story rest a bit. its just too much for here, you could make a whole novel out of it(i still have a copy of the twothousand something lines msn loggfile when i talked threw the plot with a geezer of mine so i wont forget it). i allready have a solid and a little anime/manga untypical idea for a new one.
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Uzumaki101 wrote:
Damienthedevil wrote:
Why don't you write something like this:
"I remember....... it was on that day.... When it all happened. When it started to go wrong...."
What do you think? its dramatic enough i think but it's still up to you whether you want to use it or not
It all started back then... when I was still young, carefree, beautiful... and when IT happened...
This is the Mother's POV^^
Though I think this is a no-go. How come yours sounds better, Damien? Are you secretly writing novels?
lol thats how i feel like he's done this before....
Damienthedevil wrote:
Why don't you write something like this:
"I remember....... it was on that day.... When it all happened. When it started to go wrong...."
What do you think? its dramatic enough i think but it's still up to you whether you want to use it or not
It all started back then... when I was still young, carefree, beautiful... and when IT happened...
This is the Mother's POV^^
Though I think this is a no-go. How come yours sounds better, Damien? Are you secretly writing novels?
lol thats how i feel like he's done this before....
Lol the two of you are exaggerating it....... i don't really have any real experience... i did write some short stories in my free time and i do imagine/fantasize a lot about ideas on stories but in truth those stories i just did for fun and i only showed to my friends
And for an additional surprise...i'm actually just in high school 3rd year (i'm legally 18 though) lol don't act too surprised :shock:
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Damienthedevil wrote...
....... i don't really have any real experience... :shock::shock: This only means one thing...
Damien... You're a gifted child at criticising and writing. I think that's the only reasonale explanation here^^
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Uzumaki101 wrote...
Damienthedevil wrote...
....... i don't really have any real experience... :shock::shock: This only means one thing...
Damien... You're a gifted child at criticising and writing. I think that's the only reasonale explanation here^^
lol...... somehow i don't well happy about the criticising part :o but i do feel happy that you said that though i won't be easing up on criticising your works!!! :twisted:
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Leed wrote...
I would like to read one of your "secret" storys :twisted:Sadly....... i lost my previous stories drafts though (never one to clean the room properly :roll: ) Guess you'll have to be patient until i get a brainstorm lol :) by the way your new story i read it and commented it did you read it? Hope you don't mind my harsh comments but keep it up anyway