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The Line

Leed · 2008-08-09T06:17:37+00:00

I started writing a story plot and I think I'll need some help with it. I'm more or less done with the overall plot and the characters personalities. Here is the setting in VERY short: Spoiler: A guy is taking care of his mental broken mother and allways wants to protect her. One day he finds out that she was raped in highschool and he was the "outcome". her mental condition wasn't the best before that and that caused her mind to colapse. Some day he catched a heavy illness and got hospitalized. after he came back he saw his mother dead of thirst in her bed. He blamed himself for it and was close to suicide. A bit later he found out aboth an organisation that reseaches manipulation of time. The main prinziple was, that the time is allways a line. You can change it, but the outcome has to fit on the original pattern. Means he travels back and trys to save his mother from beeing raped even at the very high risk of him to vanish. Is there someone who is interested in the story and/or willing to help me out a bit, since my english is not perfect and i cant tell things as lively as most of you guys can. i could give you my msn then or something. if you want, i can also translate the rest of my notes and put it up.

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Leed

16 years ago

have u read the new version aswell? its the complete first chapter and its far less crappier now. you will at least find less bad things to point out.

Damienthedevil

16 years ago

Leed wrote...

have u read the new version aswell? its the complete first chapter and its far less crappier now. you will at least find less bad things to point out.

i gave my comments and rating already go read it dude....

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