[Winter Contest Entry 2014] filial piety

I criticised Anamnesis for lacking an introduction. Here, it lacked a conclusion. I could have explained (briefly) what is up with all of the eye opening and eye shutting.

I didn't really get the how the rumination about stress and the funeral were related to each other. It could do also with a brief explanation. Like, 'Indeed, I was in similar circumstances. My grandfather's premature death must have led me to be prone to stress.'

The transition to our main character ruminating about whether he would do things differently in his deathbed I did not understand. Was he thinking if he would regret his decision if he were not to take part in the ceremony? I looked back at the previous sentences for clues but instead found lines about drinking at Starbucks.

It is very short, which is not a bad thing but I could not understand it fully. More words could have been written to make me understand the digression about talking about psychiatrists, imagining being on your deathbed, school starting and ending, Halloween so on and so for.

Indeed the only parts where I thought made sense were the last few paragraphs. Why did the main character wish to participate in that ritual long after his grandfather is dead? It must have been what both the main character and his grandfather did while the latter still drew breath.