Writing Review Requests Mk.2

Do you review PYOAs?

Can you critique my story here?

https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?t=80936&start=0

I want some suggestions on how to put what the characters "act"

Example. I overuse the word "stood" , "looked" , "stared" do you know how to make it sounds better? Thanks~

If you do review Pick You Own Adventures, can you look over this: Love-Story Drama

I would much appreciate any comments from a writer like yourself before I write the next chapter.

It started out as a lemon, and I've switched gears with it... I don't know if that's a good thing or a bad thing.

https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?t=69889

https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?t=72728

If you can, can you please critique these, Jericho?

Ouch. Jerry has lots of reading cut out for him.

Yikes... that is a lot... He can take his time with mine... I'll be pretty busy with school work for a bit, so I won't have time to write anything more.

(gulp)

Here's another...
https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?t=82614

good luck with the tons of work!

I could dump out an excuse or two for my lack of response, but I won't. Apologies for the long delay. I've made a point to catch up on all requests within the next one/two days, but I want to encourage everyone that visits this thread to give reviews for others too in the mean-time. I am but one perspective.

Hmm... I guess I'll help with reviewing some of the posted works here, then.

Necro-bump to report all reviews (finally) fulfilled. Posting to let any SWC participants know that a review is but a question away.

Ok I made a thread here. If you would be so kind as to give me your input on my first few chapters i would appreciate it. https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?p=3226065#3226065

Request fulfilled. Apologies for the abrasiveness.

Was wondering if you could review mine Jericho.

https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?t=89715

https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?t=91502

Here you go, Jerry. I don't mind how brutally honest you are, as long as you're honest, and I can at least learn something from what you say. Thank you.

Since you're reviewing too Jerry, I'd like you to read my story I'm writing

https://www.fakku.net/viewtopic.php?t=91795

https://www.fakku.net/forums/writing-and-fanfiction/winter-contest-entry-2015-the-enigmatic-lady

I guess this is sort of a bump, but if you ever do come back, I'd love to see you review my latest work.