Kuro vi Lolitannia wrote...
I just updated a new chapter in my story that I created~ The title is CHESS.
Well, I want to ask if anyone here know what kind of tense that we actually should use when we make a story...
Example :
"Good night, Onii-chan..." my cute little sister
whispered to my ear. This
triggered---
Yeah, the one that I bolded.
It would be,
whispered in my ear. This triggered an insta-boner in my pants---
Your only mistake was
to instead of
in. People whisper to other people, but whispering in someone's ear is a decidedly intimate action, which I guess is what you were going for.