I would actually bring up certain fangames that could be good event material, but I'll have to locate the links again since I no longer have them.
On that note, if a fangame was ever chosen for an event, which would you prefer it to be - bullet curtain or non bullet curtain?
Kagamin wrote...
Old - Jenkins wrote...
Alrighty. Even though it doesn't really mean much, I will see what I can formulate.
Every vote counts. Unlike some countrie's government makes you believe, in my case they do.
I've only read "The End of Boredom" so far, but I'll pitch in my current thoughts.
First off, allow me to say that I am a fan of your writing technique, where the character's personality and opinions blend into the text - I think you did it quite seamlessly. It gives off the feel of hearing one tell a tale rather than reading a tale.
I generally found your choice of words pleasing to the eye, with the occasional hiccup or two which sounded awkward, such as using the full words "do not" instead of "don't" (IMO, the latter works better for your tale). That's just my personal preference speaking though~
You've built your storyline quite linearly, with no incessant straying that breaks from the flow - your character's inner thoughts and opinions have been utilized well for providing the additional backdrop. While we're on the matter of environment, kudos on providing good descriptivity. It helps keep the reader's imagination spinning.
So far, I must say I find the MC's slightly pessimistic/negative outlook of life a bit off-putting (I've only read first part, so bear with me :B), and I think he gets a bit too opinionative on certain subjects at times (though it does add insight into his character).
On the overall, I like where you're going with the story. That you chose to involve the MC with Maribel and Renko instead of randomly being spirited away to Gensokyo is a good sign that things are bound to get interesting later on.
I'll follow up later when I've read the rest.