Kirei na Hoshizora

finally got to read chap 19. moooooooar!!! :3

EDIT: also loved the Dark Sora moments, really perked my interest. :3

i was confused a Ch. 19 really -_- feeling soo mixed up i cant decide

where's mah chapter 20? WRITE FASTER BUTCH!

waiting is so frustrating and exciting at the same time.... :3

I've been reading it for a bit now, and I like it. I can't wait for more.

woot 6k+ views. this sure is an honor~

I see some new readers. Thanks a lot for reading this piece of work...

Anyway, the 20th chapter is up, finally.

Be sure to comment! XD

p/s: let's see who notices the theme of character names in it...

I think it's obvious but only for those that played the game lol.


Was thinking it was that but apparently not.

*reminds self to read the new chapter when I have time*

Gah, what game? I don't even notice there are hidden themes in the name... >_>

GRRRRRRRRRRRRrrrrrrrrrrrr!!!!!!!!!!!111 I hate cliffhangers. T_T I want MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!11111111

tsch.. is it just me or it's really shorter than usual? well, not too interesting story for me, but i think it'll add to overall story development. how was Ryushi's and Sei's past, and the truth about their parents, it really tingles my spider sense.

lol, I actually wanted to cover the whole thing in c20, but seeing that it'll take super long if I do so, I decided to bring the rest into c21.

sorry if it's not very good... v_v

no, i think it's better than make us wait forever just to read our beloved story..

lol u had me sittin here with my face up against the screen after reading that shes gonna tell him the fam story then i saw that it ended i was like " NUUUOOOOOOO"...

better not take to long for c21

Alright ch 19 and 20 reading complete~

Well what can I say? Ch 19 had me wrenching my heart out. It evoked many emotions within me. So that's just saying it was a good read.

Ch 20 on the other hand. Twas alright, not one of your best. The beginning seemed like it was written in broken english of sorts, it gradually decreased as the chapter went on but it still made me feel a bit uncomfortable reading the whole thing. So try to fix that ASAP. Also, sure Cliffhangers are good as they leave the audience wanting more. But try not to abuse them, which has been a bit of trend I've noticed over the past few passages~ :wink:
On the plus side though your getting good at setting moods and everything. And I liked the part where Ryushi acts like everything was alright but on the inside he was somewhat broken.

At the end of the day Mibuchiha, your writing is alright. So just keep working hard and to try read it and see if makes sense to you~

Edited some parts of c20~

Thankies to zai dearie for helping me out! XD

For the record, I still haven't read past chapter 1. But from what i've read, it seems like a pretty interesting read. I can't judge right now, but i'm hoping that this story will entertain me for sometime

I was bored, and then I suddenly decided to edit all the chapter titles...

What do you think?

@Uzu: Thanks for reading. I'm looking forward for your comments. ^^

They were light-hearted before but now they give some sort of fluffy feeling~
Hard to explain but hey it's a good change and I like it! :lol:

okay, two weeks after the last update, I present the 21st chapter, say whaaaaat!?

also, today's sora's birthday! it may be late already, but all my readers please wish her a happy belated birthday! ^^

Nice job Mibu ^^ You did good. I wanna see more and I'm working on the pangea story as we speak