Strike!

Things sure took quite an interesting turn. I do like how they progressed for the most part, but I can see what you meant with it raising even more questions, what with the Disciples and Raven's supernatural abilities. You know what that means, right? That means you're not finished with the story, of course! Go back to Age of Anarchy if you must, but there certainly is some quality material here. Best of luck in perfecting it.

So now that you've finished the first series' drafts, how do you feel?

Also, this wouldn't be my comment without pointing out your blundering typos:



Drowning. At.

Actually, if you recall what happened in Are You Innocent?, the short story I wrote for Coffee's contest, you should be able to surmise to at least some extent what's up with Raven's abilities. Hint hint.



Where I want to go with this is very similar to what Age of Anarchy is. That is, it's a collection of closely connected stories, but they all have their own plot threads and can in theory be read in any order without confusion.

Having said that, the ideas I want to pursue next with regard to Strike! have nothing to do with the Disciples that Raven brings up in Chapter 7. I imagine those guys as endgame villains who won't step into the spotlight for some time, but that's a long way out from now and subject to change.



Thanks. I will not rest until both this and Age of Anarchy have been completed.



It feels good to get it done, but at the same time, I look ahead to what I want to do next, and I realize I've barely scratched the surface.



Go die.

So Raven is a necromancer of sorts?...Also, why is it called "Strike!"?

In a nutshell, though way more powerful than Rose is.



I was originally going to call it Thunderstruck, which made a lot more sense within the context of the contest entry turned first chapter, but it just didn't click with me. I considered a number of other titles such as The Wrath of Gods, which ended up being used as the subtitle for Chapter 1, but I decided I wanted to stick with something simple. I couldn't help but look toward Baccano! for inspiration, which I had just finished re-watching at the time. As you can see, I went with something very similar. Baccano is Italian for noisy, which refers to how action-packed the show is. In that regard, Strike could refer to the lightning that Garm thought people had learned to wield, the impact of a bullet finding its mark, an assailant attacking in the dead of night, or, really, any number of things.



What are you getting at? There are no typos in my post.

That's actually pretty interesting to learn, all things considered. If you would have asked me why I thought it was called that, I would have thought it would have described the assassinations throughout the story, beginning with those two shooting the hostage in chapter one and continuing with Raven's kills.

Sound of the drums
Beating in my heart
The thunder of guns
Tore me apart
You've been

That's part of why I didn't want to go with it. It's already taken.

Just finish the 7th chapter. My apologize, bro, for not replying sooner. I was on a vacation with my family in a past few days, so I didn't have the time to reply to both the earlier comment and your new chapter.

Just like you said, it doesn't feel like the end for the story, but you will probably expand on this, so I'm looking forward to it. As a matter of fact, it just feel like the end of a prologue of a much bigger story, because, you know, a fully comprehensive story needs to deliver a message and/or have a definite ending to it. After reading the 'last' chapter, I'm pondering to myself: "What am I supposed to feel?" So, I have high expectation that you won't leave me and Xenon hanging.

These chapters also needs a second draft, I agree.



Yeah, I was going to ask you about those at some point if you didn't tell me. Looks great, I'll go watch the first episode after this reply.



Well, it's the reason why we are here talking in the first place, isn't it?



Endgame villains? Examples?



Very tsun. Much dere. Wow.

I haven't read your series of Age of Anarchy, btw. Maybe I'll find some free time to do so.

Don't worry about it.



I think that's debatable. Having said that, rest assured I will not leave you or anyone hanging.



Highly recommend it.



It's kind of funny. Yes, I wouldn't have met any of you if I didn't come to this site first for other . . . reasons, but since I started posting in Writing and Fanfiction, I started going to this site for hentai less and less. I can't remember the last time I visited this site specifically for that.



I haven't heard that term used before. I just made it up, but what I'm referring to is something that's common with long-running series. There will be individual arcs with their own villains, but then there's also some guy in the background who is usually a puppet master kind of guy who takes center stage at the end of the series. Or maybe he hasn't been hiding in the shadows. He's completely new, but when he appears, you know shit just got real. He's the villain to end all villains, and you know when the good guys take him down, the world will be at peace.



It's not like I wanted you to read my stuff or anything.

Generally speaking, anyway.



Yeah, can't stop now. I really like movies/books/games/stories that aims at very specific taste like this, that is, takes things in a unconventional way. That being said though, seems like this anime is also pretty popular and highly-rated. I heard there's also a 2nd season coming out this season, isn't it?



Yeah, it's actually the same for me. I used to read every releases that come out everyday and then some more, but now I barely keep up. I just read things selectively now. I remember in a thread I read a few years back on this site, probably a front page post (or maybe on one of the hentai's comment section, I don't really remember), some user said: "Come for the hentai, stay for the community." I think the phrase truly applies to us both now.



Yeah, I figured as much when you say that, I'm a gamer too. What I wanted to ask was that can you give any examples, because I can't think of any on top of my head.



Sure you don't. *wink, wink*

They split it up into three 12 episode blocks. The first one is halfway through being aired. The second is set to air in summer and the third in January 2016. I think it's just as great as the first season so far in terms of plot and characters, but the animation has dropped in quality, and it's not as if Durarara was known for it's silky smooth animation to begin with.



I would say so.



First one off the top of my head is Queen Myrrah in Gears of War. Thanos as depicted in the MCU so far would count as well.



No winking.

Haven't played Gears of War yet. I don't have lots of consoles. Is it good though?

By Thanos, you mean the villain in the Marvel Universe? I don't really read Western comics, you know, not living in the States and such, but I do used to watch shit tons of cartoon when I was a kid.

They're a lot of fun, especially if you have someone to play with, but they aren't games I'd get for the sake of story.



Yeah, that guy. I don't read a lot of comics myself. I've really only seen the movies. In the two movies that he's made an appearance in so far, he's in the background plotting something. In addition, in the second movie he's seen in, it's outright stated that he's the most powerful being in the universe.

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/BigBad

That link lists a ton of examples by media. I don't know why I didn't just post it to begin with. Come to think of it, I don't know why I didn't use the term "big bad" instead of using my own made-up crap.

Just to sympathize with you, "big bads" is also a crappy term.

I'll check the link out.

It's been a while since I posted anything. I'm not thrilled with the progress I made since the last chapter I added. It doesn't help that things are going to start getting harry from here on out with the level of schoolwork that I have to deal with, but that's my problem, and those of you that enter this topic don't do so to read about that.

Since posting the last chapter of the story arc, I've gotten underway with the second draft, but as of now, I'm only finished with the first chapter, which was re-done in third person to fit with the rest of the story. It's been a slow start for sure, but I hope to have the second draft done by next week.

For those interested, major changes/additions I plan on making include: dropping reminders of past events in chapters 2 and 3; changing the dynamics some of the characters have with Harper; painting a better picture of the city; incorporating the other races in the world which, so far, are practically non-existent; changes to chapters 6 and 7.

With regards to the last two chapters, I'm still not sure yet what I want to do with them, but I will be changing them up, and some of those changes could impact the plot in meaningful ways.

Don't you tell me what I do or don't come here for. I particularly enjoy hearing about your real life escapades and adventures. How's the magazine contest coming, by the way?



Practically? Exactly non-existent. There are other races? That sounds awesome, what kinds?

Not a contest! We haven't started reading submissions yet. Aside from that, there's a lot of other stuff that needs to get done to make it happen.



There was one line in the second chapter:



As the name implies, they have some characteristics similar to demons like horns and colored skin. They're very religious, and people of power among them tend to be priests and priestesses. That being said, daemon warriors are also a source of pride. In fact, the main villain of the story for which this world was originally developed is a daemon warlord.

There are elves who probably possess the strongest connection to magic out of all the races. I say probably because I haven't decided yet. At the time of Strike!, an elven kingdom is considered to be one of the wealthiest and strongest powers in the world but also isolated. It's mostly closed off except for merchants and scholars who must follow strict protocols.

The main reason I want to include these other races is realism. Baradium is the capital of a vast empire similar to the Ancient Roman Empire, and it'd be a little ridiculous if the other races don't have a presence there. Also, I think it'll add some character to the city.

Ah, I thought that was just using a super racist term for Asian-looking people. That's actually pretty cool, they almost sound like Qunari.

I said before that it wasn't. I guess you didn't see it. Yeah. I've played Inquisition, though it was after I came up with the idea for the daemons. Strangely enough, I didn't think of my own fantasy race when I saw them. That's not to say the Qunari are nothing like daemons at all in terms of appearance, but it just didn't click for me for some reason.

I'm going to preemptively say that I will not be able to make good on finishing the second draft by next week. The reason for this being I figured out what I want to do with chapters 6 and 7, and it will require some pretty heavy revision. I may even have to add another chapter or two. The end result will be the same, but how the characters get there will be quit different. Also, I need to make up my own language because reasons.

To those who care, I will no longer be posting a second draft as of this post. Why you might ask? Because working on it is boring as hell. Moving forward, I still intend to stick with my previous plans of continuing Age of Anarchy. If my track record is any indication, you can expect me to post new chapters toward the end of Summer.